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Neotokyo6
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[2005-05-23 13:56:55 +0000 UTC]
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no just war lord down to border of CSSA (ie brazil empire north border)
which by small useable land size . is made war lord in this region , must be the best to survive from other war lord. (and resist to CSSA expansion campaign too)
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So there may be warlords who are better than other warlords?
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that why many not survive in the end ....only strongest will unified broken country.
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So do all the warlords look the same or is there something to tell them apart?
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hmmm they look different from one to other.(from two leg walk till two wing fly)
but to make them look stand out is there are all way wear a cloth strang then other...all way.
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I assume you mean "They look different from their to legs to some having two wings to fly" and "They stand out by the clothes they wear."
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hmmm something like that.
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Alright then. Don't know how much I can work on this since school's starting very soon.
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do you have concept of third part yet? ....(how story will going in this part?)
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I would think since James took out the warlord in the recent battle, he'd get some award or promotion for strategy.
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and he will be sent to more danger yet more ambition in the south ......in the same time of new of rebellion come to main land (or later after jame royalty begin to shift ).?
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The rebellion would be around the time James defects.
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what cause you think logical for this rebellion ....aside from internal power struggle in CSSA. that made brazil empire military power weaken , and open chance for this slave colony to revolt.Β
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You mentioned the rebeliion first, I thought you may have an idea. But if you ask me I would think it's a revolution to overthrow a corrupt system.
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hmm my idea is similar to you too.
in case of change of leader. from corrupt system (very when ruler class is demon while working class is slave .(human and lesser demon ))
as havana is slave colony as i said before. (slavery not a good thing by natural)
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What was your original idea?
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my original is just revolution of slave against there master....from too much brutality and corrupt of there master. (compare to other state in CSSA)
of course under aid of foreign agent.
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Not sure how to write in the foreign agent unless we know more information about this agent.
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he is agent sent by foreign country to aid rebel faction ....
name Mr. Xi
he come with handful of assassin team and fund for rebel cause.
his purpose is to made this rebellion success, and destabilize brazil empire army by get rid of key personal in army.
(which will made this new nation easy to manipulated later)
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I'll have to check whether this part of the story has room to fit Mr. Xi's description or if it'll just confuse the reader.
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please look at that . (what ever have room for him or not is okay to me).
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But that's probably going to be Β the last few chapters anyway. I'll have to see where the current story leads.
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for now is jame promotion > more mission > more danger > a choose he must makeΒ moral or mission ?
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ask about you opinion(not about story) (if you are in same situation as jame . moral or mission will you take?)
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Looks like it'll be missions next.
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not many choice to take then.
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ta very much for another 
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th-thanks for the points DO you want a commission in return? BEcause that's kinda ALOT of points
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not really just because you ask for point....to save you premium membership
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Thank you so much! It means alot!!
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I'm better now....
hope to see commission begin soon ....I hope. before next month .
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almost forgot to give llama too.
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I'm at the part of chapter 2 where the squads are being deployed, currently our part of the story is headed to Alabama. Any current ideas of the types of demons and Confederate supporters lurk there? Or should I choose another state which makes more sense?
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to made more sense by that time line it should be america empire which still on going war with them .
and type of demon i think to giant size demon (tall around two-three story building) with fang horn and wing . (standard demon)
that use human slave as there meat shield and foot solider.
how do you think?
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If you have more specific names for those demons, it makes more sense to use them. As for their opponents, I planned that the colonies will fight multiple. But that may depend on geographically where things are. I thought going West then South into the Central American regions would make more sense. So where is Alabama on the map? Is it Confederacy or something else?
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at that time Alabama still in control of British empire.(but have minor skirmish with America empire all the time )
and name for those demon "Malus" is should be there name (assume that Latin still be official language in church realm).
and by that time confederacy main territory in whole south america. (at that time Mexico empire still rule out most of central america )Β Β
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The year is 1878, so I'm not sure what the map looks like at that time according to you timeline. Do you have a copy made for that yet?
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this is the may at those time (6 years before but i think territory not change much (not until Havana rebellion))
fc09.deviantart.net/fs70/f/201β¦
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There's this unnamed territory West of the colonies, not sure about the situation there. The current plan for the story involves James' group to go through the American Empire then to Mexico Empire unless they want to take over the California Republic first assuming the only church controlled area on that map is British.
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oh that territory is like frontier for British-amrican ....control but not firm yet (as you see is act like a buffer zone then real territory)
as for situation ...just war lord (both American / Mexico empire) VS standard armyΒ (British-american empire)
and for Californian...they live on they own.
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Convenient if the American and Mexican Empires are simply warlord dominated, don't think they're Empires but just Disputed Territories at this point. So is California in your story demonic, church controlled, or just independent? Same with the other Republics (Peru + South America which could be Argentina).
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California is just loosen republic of small town in per-civil war time . not on any side just live by them self. (most of people may not know that civil war end already)
while the south america still in internal power struggle (between three state that who going to be leader and capital located)
at that time compare to other state only British-american dominion (British empire government)and Republic of South America(lead by original body of confederate government),Β is most well organize faction in term of military and society .
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Then possibly the Peru and South American (I still think should be original Argentina) may not be republics, but South America may be an oligarchy.
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but you have no issue with brazil empire right?
in sense they are oligarchy (demon rule) .
with peru is not much (still be neew born country ) while south america still try to keep hold what left they have. (aside from power struggle with other 'two')
republic only in name as you can say.
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If Brazil is under one centralized power, then it makes sense to be an Empire. I think for chapter 2, I'll make James' part of the army march through the Appalachian Territory before taking down some warlords in the Disputed American Territory before going to Disputed Mexico/Central America. Since you have a number of characters already in your gallery, are there some specific warlords, Central or American that I should take note of?
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most of my character is belong to terra faction most of them.
but for that time line ...those warlord are more or less a demon that wanna be ruler and no unity with they own race nor faction at all.
(so most of them is not survivor to the end and only few left is become america empire in the end)(no name for most of them)
(assume that most of this war lordΒ can handle by organize army of British empire (but they have too many to handle in same time))
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That seems to make sense for where the story is going, so technically it's the Louisiana Territory James will go to. So in the Louisiana Territory, who are the significant demon warlords there? I added the Appalachian Mountains to the British American lands.
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