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Shellulose
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[2011-08-26 23:31:03 +0000 UTC]
"A lonely cucumber at sea"
(United States)
# Statistics
Favourites: 3278; Deviations: 418; Watchers: 116
Watching: 203; Pageviews: 31925; Comments Made: 14664; Friends: 203
# Interests
Favorite visual artist: YuumeiFavorite movies: Pacific Rim
Favorite TV shows: The Legend of Korra, Black mirror, Voltron Defenders
Favorite bands / musical artists: Kenshi Yonezu, Unison square garden, DAOKO, and Ninja sex party
Favorite books: The miraculous journey of edward tulane and A thousand splendid suns by Khaled Housseni
Favorite writers: Mark Zusak, Benjamin Saenz, Khaled Housseni, many others
Favorite games: Final Fantasy XIV, Don't Starve (together), Celeste, Gris and Hollow Knight.
Favorite gaming platform: Nintendo Switch
Tools of the Trade: I normally use copics or a tablet with photoshop cc to draw! (I also do acrylics!)
Other Interests: I like to bake!
# Comments
Comments: 3763
Could you resend the last message? Β And please, please I know this seems like spam but it isn't read "Love" on creepypasta. It's not creepy, I repeat It's NOT creepy.Β
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er..... I don't think I remember the last message any more....
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Darn! OH well, at lest I have some memorized....would you please read this little bit and tell me how it is? Remember the idea was the allies living in a group of apartment building and the main thing was Yao was in collage and had a pacemaker to help keep his weak heart beating while Ivan was an schizophrenic musician playing in Arthur's pub.
Ivan walked though the rain, he looked like a drowned rat, but he didn't care he walked (read; splashed) though the mud and the muck, the dark grey sky only depressed him further. He thought to himself 'Just get home, there's nothing you can do right now.' His apartment complex was a U-shaped and he lived on the first floor. His ex-lover and only true person who could ever keep him sane was Yao Wang who lived a floor above and to the left of him. Ex-lover only because Ivan couldn't keep it all together and they just had too many arguments so Yao ended it, it was a pain seeing him everyday by the mailbox or at the pub where they both worked. He heard his cell go off, it was Francis. Scowling he answered "Da? What it it?" he sounded bitter, just like his step-father...how he hated that. "Ivan, I hate to be the one to tell you this but...Yao had a heart attack. They're keeping him on a heart-lung machine and he scheduled to have a heart transplant in California tomorrow." Β
This is a littler later in the story but, do you like it?Β Β
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gasp! it's sooo great! oh! it's so intense! I love it!Β I think you should give some detail upon Ivan's reaction. maybe he drops the phone in surprise or maybe pauses for a while.
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Well the reaction would be something thing like this:
HE threw the phone against the wall, shattering the glass and breaking it in too. On the other line Francis was worried, not because of the phone going silent but of the fact Arthur or Alfred could have heard him, right now Yao's family was in there, all of them sitting or standing next to the ruined form of their brother. Skin an unhealthy white and eyes that lost their shine of the glaze of death over them, he heard a few anguished cries in a foreign language. Francis only guessed that was Lien who he saw holding her brothers hand. All family feuds forgotten and only hope to bring them any sort of relief. Ivan ran into he room, several nurses and security guards trailing him. He slumped to his knees besides his one and only, "Yao, my love what happened...I thought I told you to be careful and not to put to much strain on your heart, yeah. I know it's me fault for leaving and causing this. I never meant to hurt you like I did. The voices went away for the time being so I am here all of me, no. I won't leave and I'll stay by you." he muttered softy to almost dead youth. Kiku was the first to react "Leave him be. You caused this! You don't belong here with him!" he yelled, something that the Japaneses male never did "Yeah did the wax out of your ears and leave Aniki alone!" Im Young joined in, soon it was all of the siblings that were yelling at him telling him to leave, still Ivan didn't move an inch. Β Leon and Mei set him up on his feet and then kicked him out of the ICU room. "Ivan mon amine you must not give into the insanity you have! Do not go dead!" However Ivan didn't hear him, he was dead with grief, his eyes glazed over, he looked at Francis's worried face "I'm already there." and with that he drew back into his barrier.
Well? What do you think? Was it to over done to where William Shatner would say "OH.MY! IT's so corny I can't believe it!" or was it good?Β
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it was great! very angsty!!! ooooh!!! it's so great! it's not so over dramatic that it would be considered cheesy, it's on the perfect balance!
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I thank you ten-fold for the postive comments. But for one last thing, could you please critic this one horrible attempt for a romance shot, in the story and one change to the plot is Yao is in a FWB relationship with Lilly, which is all B and no F.Β
It was raining, per the ho-hum of Seattle, it was almost always wet and cold. Ivan mused over his own little thoughts, drinking a cup of instant apple cider he got from the store. Not bad, but not particularly good, he remembered that Katty could do better but her specialty was warm milk and hot cocoa. He sighed, he missed his elder sister, the knock at the door startled him. He got up and got a towel, how ever it was must be a drowned rat by now, the clouds beat down on the poor city with rain. He opened it to see a flash of gold and burgundy, he caught a good whiff of spring flowers and peonies. This one meant it was his neighbour Yao, the last piece of evidence gave him away. He was soaked to the bone and a bit rosy on the cheeks, Β not from the cold or rain, but a slap mark was evident. He looked at the smaller man "What happened? Tell a perverted joke in front of Eliza Β again?" he started to laugh but the small whimpering and sniffling noises told one thing. He was crying, Yao was crying. He brought him the towel and calmed the collage student. From what he hard, was that he went over to Lily's house and drank a huge amount of lager, then started to fool around like they always did, but he called the wrong name and she was pissed at him. They fought with him taking all of the physical abuse from the woman, and left. Ivan gritted his teeth, but who was he to say that the FWB relationship he had with the Liechtenstein girl was wrong? "I think you should not be seeing her anymore, plus as you said it was a one time thing.." Ivan spoke up, Yao looked at him studyed his features and flat out pounced on him, attacking him with kisses. From the heavy beer taste Yao had, Ivan could only assume he was drunk but went along with it. "No, I realized something, it was a one time thing, the thing i want with you would be eternal." Yao said after breaking the current kiss off. Ivan smiled, "Then forever is how long I want to live...." They continued blissfully until Yao had fallen asleep and Ivan tired. Tomorrow seemed like a valiant warrior coming home, for it as a new beginning in both of their lives.
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They shall take over the world one dayΒ
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Yes!! Hahaha I think they have already!!
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Thank you for watching me and faving my story
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no problem! i look forward to more!
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I have 7 chapters right now
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But to continue I need more inspiration... I have no idea how to continue T_T
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awwww!!! i'm sorry!!!
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well no problem... I never forgot the story so maybe if I find some inspiration I might continue
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oooh! ok! if i think of something (in my blank air filled head) i will tell you! XD
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Hello! I'm hereeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee!
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ahaha that's a cute icon XD
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I've been wanting to use that for a long time..it was so cute! So I didn't want to spam the drawing page so I came here! You're nice if I can go by your page.Β
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hahaha indeed!!! XD it's ok! you can come here! anywhere is fine! ^_^
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Yeah, and if I may, could you help me a bit with a story I'm writing and talk me into publishing it?Β
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hoho~! you have come to the right place my friend! i will help you to the full extent of my abilities! ^_^ so what exactly is your story about?
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See, well. It was inspired by the movie Singles. And well, Yao is 24 working thought collage to be a councilor of Special Ed kids, with one downside.He was born with heart failure and has a pacemaker to help his heart keep a steady beat which is one thing that he can't keep, example, working temp jobs that will hire him despite his disability. And in the apartment complex he lives in there are Alfred, a collage grad who works as a mechanics man who actually got a much Much higher degree that could enable him to work for NASA who lives with Arthur, a pub owner, those are his upstairs neighbors. To the right is Francis who is a cordon blue grad that is working in Arthur's pub as a bartender with his wife Madeline in order to save up money to go to Vegas, then along comes Ivan. A schizophrenic musician that just moved from New York's highest social circulate, could something happen after a choice meeting in a club?
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hhmmm... from what i can draw from this! is a few things could happen!
1. Ivan could offer to play a spcial song for Yao, after they chat?
2. A fight could break out between like some of them with Ivan included and then yao coming into break the fight
3. they could also choose to take it slow and just start out as friends with a drink and chat about stuff.
4. they could both be challenged into a drinking contest (obviously Ivan would win.) then Yao would get insanely drunk after refusing to give up and something happens after that. (in my mind it's just dirty... >///< sorry bout that)
5. Love at first sight? Ivan decides Yao is the one for him, though too afraid to talk to him he slowly moves over stool by stool until he is sitting next to yao. Yao Whom notices thinks it's cute and will proabably talk to him first.
6.Ivan could be walking by with a bottle of vodka and then accidentally trips and cheesily spills all the vodka on him and knocks him over. Then Ivan frantically apologizes and then ofers to help Yao clean up via take-him-to-his-bedroom-so-maybe-something-will-happen-there?
That's all i got now... if you like any of'em feel free to use em! if you don't i'll think of something else! just say so! ^_^
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Well, it's more like Ivan moved into the apartment next to him, and from what I read 5 and 2 come a bit later. It's like Friends and The Big Bang Theory. Now can you talk me into publishing it? And don't worry, I have insanely dirty mind too! I only say 2 and 5 come later because Ivan is currently writing/calling Toris who still lives in New York, where Ivan was studying to become a music teacher. Β But now he attends the University of Washington for a degree in claymation and movie making. Β
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ahhhh sooooo then publish! i think it will make a wonderful story! i want to read it! so publish it! plus every rochu fan loooves things like this! XD publish! publish! publish!
(claymation is hard TT^TT it requires intensive patience)
If you need any more help i'll be right here bro! ^_^
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Thanks so much for the fav.
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Thank you for the fav! Much Appreciated!
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Thank you very much for your favorites
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