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[2013-05-15 06:03:36 +0000 UTC]
"Flash"
(United States)
# Statistics
Favourites: 5; Deviations: 39; Watchers: 19
Watching: 41; Pageviews: 5631; Comments Made: 513; Friends: 41
# About me
My nickname is Flash. I write music by the stage name, C-Zar and I have always appreciated the arts of good literature and art. #CreateGreatness
# Comments
Comments: 69
You're welcome, doing anything fun for your B-day?
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Yeah it was nice. We went to the movies and I'm planning a beach trip later this summer. Thanks for asking.
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Hey, I just finished the second piece of character design. If you want to check out on my page, it will be awesome.
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I just saw it and I left a comment that you can check out. Great work!
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Same to you. Enjoy your holidays!Β
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Same to you, friend!Β
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Back at you! Hope yours was good
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Hey Chaos. Not much. Just Β been writing some new chapters lately. What's up with you?Β
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Not much as well, just in a chatty mood. Same here, working on my chapters, it's a slow progress. Not sure if I told you this but I know an artist who's style might go perfectly with your story...for scenes and stuff.
eclipse4d.deviantart.com
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Yeah I had a conversation with him. He's really talented but I wasn't ready to to do commisions at the time though.Β
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Just double checking if I mention it or not. I can be a bit forgetful sometimes. So...what's the next big event for your story?
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You'll have to wait and see, my friend!Β
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Hey flash 
I was curious is you had character bios yet. I know you want me to read your story to get the hang of the characters and all but im having a hard time balancing the reading and my ..well...time where I live lol
I was wondering if you had them because I find it very hard to draw characters when I don't know them that well . :/
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Hey.
You're right that I prefer you to check the story out. I haven't don't any character bios as of now, but I can definitely make some if it would help you out. What characters do you need them for?Β
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well character bios are important to have in any situation, that's how i was able to become a bigger fan for Wandering Coast x3Β
nd the characters i would like to see would be Calaroh and Raymond. I have a hard time comming up with a good design for each of them. especially Raymond because I have no idea what he actually looks like tooΒ
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No problem! I'm away from home right now so I can't reply as fast as I would like. I'll get you what you need with the bios when I can
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That's okay I can wait then :3
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Sorry for the wait! I'm back and ready to go. I'll send you Calaroh and Raymond's description right away.
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Thanks! These will really help when I'm making pictures!
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Great. I'll do whatever it takes to make it easier and hopefully more fun
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Thanks Chaos. I appreciate it!
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Overall, I think your story is good. Just need to work a bit on your writing style.
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Thanks. The actual story is what I was really focusing on. I'll clean up the writing in the future.
I'm thinking of continuing the story as well. So a chapter 11 might be in the future.
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Is this then end of Xavier, or will there be more?
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Could be. I would probably say there's more in store.
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Same to you. Enjoy the holiday!Β
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Review time, only read the first six chapters at this time. So don't worry too much about it. Have you thought about adding some drama or unexpected twists in your story plot in future chapters? Maybe add some conflicts, not physical fighting conflict, but don't stop writing the fight scenes. Emotional and teammate disagreement. Cause it just seems a bit too straight forward, leading up to a fight. Not that it's a bad thing, alot of superhero fights are like that but usually has some issue that interfere. Like teammates getting into a fight with each other about something. Or the villain's plot being a little more complex, or had fun/dark ways of achieving their goals. Your story Reminds me of the DragonBall series cause of the simple but cool fighting. Cal is adding some humor, so it makes the conversation a little more lively. Does anyone proofread your work before you submit it? Cause a proofreader helps a lot. I like the characters and their personality. So 3.5 out of 5 stars of your story so far. You lose points for spacing issue.
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Thanks for the first review.
To start, I don't really proofread too much but I'll look to that more in the future. Through the first few chapters things are straightforward, but I feel there's more tension as you move along. You're right that the fighting scenes are a favorite of mine haha, but more personal conflict would be a nice idea.Β
I hope it's enjoyable overall
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I am noticing the tension. Conflicts helps build a person's character and their relationship with others. Plus makes things interesting. Have a family member or a friend proof read your work, a different person's view can help improve the story sometimes and catch any mistakes. Also try looking for Devianart members to help out.
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Oh yeah, forgot to tell you, that i might do all your illistrations on this profile: fandom-person.deviantart.com .
i hope you understand this but, on this profile, i just wanted all of the art work i did to be done by me, not sure how to explain it but like...the other profile will be requests, commissions, etc....and this profile will be...none of those. would that be ok?
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Hey! That's totally fine. Whichever profile you decide is up to you.Β
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Hey! And thanks for your interest.Β
The story is action/adventure with some science fiction.Β
It focuses on a boy who loses his parents and becomes trained fighter who goes on adventures to promote peace.Β
Let me know if you would like more details. (The story is in my gallery)
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