WedgeFactor In reply to Okami-Rayne [2012-11-02 23:36:35 +0000 UTC]

Ah, you're welcome. I'm in the middle of trying to write a decent review that doesn't consist of "" for BtB and OtC. It's a work in progress

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Okami-Rayne In reply to WedgeFactor [2012-11-04 13:39:48 +0000 UTC]

LOL! Aww, bless. Thank you, luv! Cheers for reading!

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WedgeFactor In reply to Okami-Rayne [2012-11-07 16:03:47 +0000 UTC]

Yeah, I think those fics gaave me an ulcer, I was just sitting there looking stressed and mom was like midterms and I was like

"NO. Neji's being self destructive and he is torn and their mutual want-do-not-want is TRAGIC and VERY HOT and THANK GOD there's a sequel because it's proof they don't end up deeeaaad even though OH GOD - Neji just beat Shikamaru into a bloody pulp and EVERYTHING hurts bbs why do you do this to mee~. My heart is going to explode, remember mom, I love you and to be cremated *grosssobbing*."

and mom said "..."

And that is why it's been really hard to write a proper review because my brain breaks every time I think about these fics.

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Okami-Rayne In reply to WedgeFactor [2012-11-07 18:25:04 +0000 UTC]

!!!! This just made my WEEK! *laughs* I am thrilled that you went as insane reading it as I did while writing it. I shall bequeath my straitjacket to you, my dear. ! Thanks for making me grin like a muppet

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WedgeFactor In reply to Okami-Rayne [2012-11-07 22:02:36 +0000 UTC]

There was a good exchange with mini!Wedge too, that went roughly like this;

Me:

"Why are you reading it if it's actually, actively stressing you out?"

"Shuddup, my love is pure!"

"Dude, no one's love is pure when it's for gay porn."

"It's not about the porn! It's about all the feels and the drama llamas and the emotionally compromised pretty boys and DID I MENTION THE FEELS?!"

"...and the porn."

"That too."

And that jacket will really complete the picture of me rocking in the corner popping Xanax like it's going out of style (only without the Xanax).

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Okami-Rayne In reply to WedgeFactor [2012-11-13 14:56:14 +0000 UTC]

Epic!

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WedgeFactor In reply to sourapples1 [2011-09-10 01:00:45 +0000 UTC]

Well. It's small.

XD

On a more...elaborate note, it's very enjoyable so far. New friends, good classes, cute boys etc.

Only real problem is the text books. +600$ for the whole lot! It's heinous.

But on the much brighter side - I never have to be up before 8, and I have no classes on Friday afternoon.

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sourapples1 In reply to WedgeFactor [2011-09-10 01:03:08 +0000 UTC]

well that seems great Wow that is a lot for some books.

Lucky......I have to be up at 6:00 to catch my 7:30 bus. yeah high school is really boring at the moment. I'm so advanced in what we're doing in math and english..thank god i'm taking math 11 advanced next semester

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WedgeFactor In reply to sourapples1 [2011-09-10 01:44:35 +0000 UTC]

Which English teacher do you have?

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sourapples1 In reply to WedgeFactor [2011-09-10 10:19:30 +0000 UTC]

I have Mr. Cogsgrove

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WedgeFactor In reply to sourapples1 [2011-09-10 18:06:23 +0000 UTC]

Ah. I don't know him.

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sourapples1 In reply to WedgeFactor [2011-09-10 20:49:21 +0000 UTC]

I figured

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WedgeFactor In reply to TackyToast [2011-09-06 13:45:19 +0000 UTC]

It's OK, I told Carole to call next time you were around so we can talk. Sorry I didn't respond, I had no wifi until...45 minutes ago.

I still love you, and I'll be back on the 21st! I can see you then. And also for Thanksgiving, and then again for Remembrance Day. That's plenty.

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TackyToast In reply to WedgeFactor [2011-09-07 10:03:32 +0000 UTC]

Sounds good to me , and Carole told me something about that. Funny... We lost the internet at you're (It'd be weird not to call it "you're house") house yesterday.


Yaaaaaaaaaay! I'm HOPING to have some comic or another that you've requested done by then. Hopefully sooner. But I'm bad at time management/just getting things done, soo..

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WedgeFactor In reply to TackyToast [2011-09-08 01:07:54 +0000 UTC]

It's totes still my house, still home for sure. I still miss it occasionally, but not as much as I did at first. My housemates are all pretty cool, I made friends (yay!) and there are a few very attractive guys around. Only one of whom I talk to regularly.

What I really wanted to say though was; how did you enjoy your first class with the illustrious Mr. AuCoin? Tell meeeeee.

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TackyToast In reply to WedgeFactor [2011-09-09 00:25:11 +0000 UTC]

Yay new friends and boooooooooooooooyyssssssss!


Mr. AuCoin is a psychopath. Seriously, today I had him last period in a stuffy class room and I was over tired and I still loved his class. It was awesome. He thinks that, and I quote, "Dora has to go to Candy Mountain, but oh! She wouldn't have to if Swiper that thieving bastard didn't steel her stuff! Somebody ought to just kill the damn thing!". His voice got louder and more angry as his sentence went on then he apologized to me because I think he thought I was offended by his language cause I made a little jump at "BASTARD!". He proceeded to mumble about euthanizing Swiper. Also, he thinks it'd be more interesting if Barney had to battle himself internally over his carnivorous instinct.

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WedgeFactor In reply to TackyToast [2011-09-09 11:09:28 +0000 UTC]

Haha, sounds like him. He has two daughters, both quite young, he probably spends a lot of time watching Dora.

Tell him I say hello!

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TackyToast In reply to WedgeFactor [2011-09-09 18:02:02 +0000 UTC]

He says he lives in Treehouse.

I shall. You actually came up in class. I said, "You remember Ellen, right?" he was all "Of course"

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WedgeFactor In reply to TackyToast [2011-09-09 19:15:56 +0000 UTC]

Haha. What can I say, I'm unforgettable. *Preens*

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TackyToast In reply to WedgeFactor [2011-09-10 13:13:12 +0000 UTC]

So are teachers like Mr. AuCoin. But you more-so, of course.

Carole and I had an odd insident with a dog last night. We were watching the stars, and then, as calm as ever, Carole looks to the side and says "That dog is staring at us". I look over and I made a loud yelping sound and scared the shit out of both Carole and the dog. We went inside, just in case.

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WedgeFactor In reply to TackyToast [2011-09-12 16:30:29 +0000 UTC]

Haha, creeper dogs. That's a new one, actually.

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TackyToast In reply to WedgeFactor [2011-09-12 23:17:05 +0000 UTC]

God I hope you get on really quickly.. I don't know what I'm supposed to do for my essay. We read a short story and he got us to write about the development of atmosphere and now we have to write an essay but I don't know what to do and I'm freaking out and I'm not sure if it's supposed to be on atmosphere or whatever but I'm really confused and I don't know what he wants from me.

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WedgeFactor In reply to TackyToast [2011-09-13 00:42:41 +0000 UTC]

OK, atmosphere is a bit confusing at first, but really simple over all.

Atmosphere is the "feel" of the story. Is it scary? Why? Is it sad? Why? etc.

If you want to say "Story X is has a depressing atmosphere" you need to explain and explore the little pieces that making it depressing.

For instance imagery, maybe a reoccurring "image" in the story is of a bird cage. Now you have an image, what's the symbolism of that?

Imagery isn't just in what you would see if you were actually in the story, it's also in the sounds and smells in the story.

Other things that you can look at, word choice. Does one word come up a lot? What is the dialogue like?

Very closely linked to atmosphere and diction (word choice) is tone. Diction gives the story a tone, and a tone fills out the atmosphere.

And what he wants? He wants you to present an argument. He explained about thesis statements, right?

I'm assuming he did so here's what I want you to do for me.

Give me a thesis statement.

So for my story it'd look like this "In the short story X, by Author Anon, imagery, diction and tone are all used to create a depressed atmosphere".

When is this due? If it's not tomorrow (and I'm assuming you didn't put it off) give me your statement, based off what you know in the story, I'll help revise it tonight and then you give it to him, and he'll talk over it with you.

When you give me your statement here's what I want.

* Statement

* Point A - three supporting statements in the text
* Point B - three supporting statements in the text
* Point C - three supporting statements in the text

So with my above thesis for X by Author Anon, my point A looks like this.

* Imagery - reoccurring use of the bird cage, the constant mentions of the smell of diesel, the bed which is half done half messed up.

So, give it a whirl. And while you're at it, which short story is it?

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TackyToast In reply to WedgeFactor [2011-09-13 01:54:30 +0000 UTC]

Okay, I'm sorry for dumping that on you. I was actually crying I was so stressed about what to do on this essay. I didn't really have any body to go to because Carole's not in my class I don't have anybody's phone numbers in my class and my parents aren't even home. And, yes, it is due tomorrow, BUT IN MY DEFENSE. We got it today. Just so you know, I've saved this information (and using it to go over what I have.. Which is currently garbage).

The short story is "The Garden Party".

Thankyouthankyouthankyouthankyouthankyouthankyouthankyou!

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WedgeFactor In reply to TackyToast [2011-09-13 02:04:53 +0000 UTC]

It's no problem, I told you both you can contact me for help, and I stand by that.

The other things to look out for are citing properly (for every quote put a page number) and your introduction and conclusion. Actually, send me your introduction in your reply, it's the hardest part.

Both should be fairly short, but should reiterate your points in their most simple form. Since you only had one night to work on it he's probably only really looking for a rough draft, he'll no doubt ask you to edit and resubmit it. If he doesn't, I think he'll let you do so anyway, or you can ask to talk it over with him. Do so, it's very helpful.

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TackyToast In reply to WedgeFactor [2011-09-13 23:14:03 +0000 UTC]

So. There's been a bit of a change in plans. Mr. AuCoin gave us an extension because we suck. We get until tomorrow. Also, it's on setting, not atmosphere. My bad. I'm only going to ask for help with the intro because no doubt you're even busier than I am.

I'm not done my intro, but I don't want to take to long while I still have a good bit to look over.. blah blah blah, I'm rambling again.. Well, here goes...

Setting can tell the reader things about a piece of writing that sometimes the characters in the story can't. In Katherine Mansfield's short story "the Garden Party" has two main classes, rich and poor. The setting of the story clearly shows the difference between the two classes. The rich live on top of a hill and the poor below, an indication of superiority. On top of the hill, everything is pristine and colourful where the bottom of the hill is gloomy and forlorn.

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WedgeFactor In reply to TackyToast [2011-09-14 01:17:29 +0000 UTC]

Italic means delete that word/part, a part bolded with a number just means "see footnote".

Setting can tell the reader things about a piece of writing that sometimes the characters in the story can't. In Katherine Mansfield's short story "the Garden Party" has two main classes, rich and poor. [1] The setting of the story clearly shows the difference between the two classes. The rich live on top of a hill and the poor below, an indication of superiority. On top of the hill[2], everything is pristine and colourful where [3] the bottom of the hill is gloomy and forlorn.

Okay.

[1] Instead of "rich and poor", since you used "classes" refer to it as "upper and lower".

[2] You just used 'on top of the hill', it's repetitive. Try and think of a way to restate this.

[3] Contrast! Use that word. Example: "...pristine and colourful, contrasted by..."

And fourthly...Send me the whole thing! Bad Kylie, withholding an editing possibility. Just email the essay to me, I'm never too busy to help.

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TackyToast In reply to WedgeFactor [2011-09-14 01:26:35 +0000 UTC]

You're amazing, you know that?

I didn't want to bother you too much in case you had work yourself, which I'm sure you do. And now, as much as I'd love to send you the rest, I'm so beat that what it looks like now is going to have to do.

And now, as soon as I have an inkling of free time, I'm going to draw some stuff that I promised you a million years ago.

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WedgeFactor In reply to TackyToast [2011-09-14 01:48:59 +0000 UTC]

All righty, but like I said, once you pass it in, (I think) he'll let you re-try. and sit down and discuss it with him. Mr. AuCoin is pretty awesome, he'll find the time to do so with you.

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TackyToast In reply to WedgeFactor [2011-09-14 19:45:44 +0000 UTC]

I have another essay due Friday, now.. I think I'm going to go in for help tomorrow because I don't know what to write for an essay on narrative style. :S

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WedgeFactor In reply to TackyToast [2011-09-14 21:22:46 +0000 UTC]

Ooooh, fun!

Send me an email, I check it more often than I check this.

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TackyToast In reply to WedgeFactor [2011-09-14 23:22:26 +0000 UTC]

I'll probably email you tomorrow while I'm panicking about getting my essay done in one night again. XD

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WedgeFactor In reply to TackyToast [2011-09-15 01:04:43 +0000 UTC]

Okay, I have Swing tomorrow at 8-9, so send if you don't send it by 4, is it OK if the edits don't come in until 10ish?

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TackyToast In reply to WedgeFactor [2011-09-15 09:31:05 +0000 UTC]

Of course! I'm just lucky to have you doing this!

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WedgeFactor In reply to sourapples1 [2011-07-07 22:16:38 +0000 UTC]

Thank you dear. <3

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sourapples1 In reply to WedgeFactor [2011-07-07 22:17:20 +0000 UTC]

So now what are you up to?

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WedgeFactor In reply to sourapples1 [2011-07-09 13:52:27 +0000 UTC]

Not much really, how is paddling treating you?

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sourapples1 In reply to WedgeFactor [2011-07-09 14:01:12 +0000 UTC]

owwwwww

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WedgeFactor In reply to sourapples1 [2011-07-09 15:57:12 +0000 UTC]

Well, if it makes you feel better it gets easier.

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sourapples1 In reply to WedgeFactor [2011-07-10 12:40:28 +0000 UTC]

Yup, now I feel better knowing that

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WedgeFactor In reply to sourapples1 [2011-07-10 12:55:23 +0000 UTC]

Glad to have helped.

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WedgeFactor In reply to KittyMira [2011-04-03 17:25:19 +0000 UTC]

HELLO!

And nothing much, despairing over the weather mostly.

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KittyMira In reply to WedgeFactor [2011-04-03 17:32:43 +0000 UTC]

YES spring = snow
hohum ):

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WedgeFactor In reply to KittyMira [2011-04-05 00:24:15 +0000 UTC]

It's better today, didn't even need a jacket after the morning.

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