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Great poem
i dont normally get into poems and stuff, but this was pretty well written
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I try my best to draw the reader into the poem. Thank you
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Your work reminds me of my dad's. He does not like to share though >.< I will have to dig one out.
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my work is free to share
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... Um, can I refer the people I critique to you when I lecture them about what flow is? Because yours is nearly perfect. I actually had to read it out loud. It sweeps you away. Magnificently done.
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you can use me as a reference 
About flow and how a poem should draw the reader into it. I would love to hear my work read aloud some day
by someone other than myself. That is a good tip for teaching flow read it aloud it should be able to be spoken easily
almost a chant as it were. if it is hard to speak then it needs to be worked on.
Thank you for the comment and the compliment milady.
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Every once in a while I think about recording myself reading certain poems out-loud... so that I can listen to them in the car.
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I can't read most of my own poetry out loud without choking up. When you put your heart in something it effects you even more than the readers
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Really? I only have that problem with my short stories, but then I think I put more of myself into those. And I'll drink to that! Most of my stories have deeper meanings that the readers would never guess at.
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This is amazing 
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I'd be glad to help you if you want to try
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Thank you
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Your welcome and I cant wait for your next work ^^
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its so amazing, how do you manage to align the words and make each line so perfect? it's a problem I have, I have near enough all the words but the way i put them together and present them makes a less than decent poem.
thanks for posting this poem
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try reciting your poems. they should have a cadence to them. almost a rhythm so each line flows into the next.
this also helps the reader because it will draw them into the poem. if you find something that obstructs the flow
a word not right. A line too long or short then work to fix it. unless you want the reader to pause there or to change their view to a different point.
I'm trying my best to explain something that I do without really thinking. I hope It helps you
And thank you for the comment and Faving my work
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Beautiful and emotional... I really enjoyed it
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Thank you Dearheart 
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