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AfraidToDrown — The Last Innocent Summer
Published: 2004-04-06 17:50:58 +0000 UTC; Views: 73; Favourites: 0; Downloads: 2
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Description The stifling heat
That drenched each room
Saturating the thick air
Drove the young girls
Out into the backyard.
And still
The heat was there,
The suns rays
Baking the old pavement
That ice heaves have broken
And cracked
Not so long ago.
Bouncing from foot to foot
They escaped the rough gravel
Of the driveway
For the cool
Soft grass.
The damp
Rich earth between their toes.
Embedding its self underneath
Bright pink toenails.
They set up their camp
Beneath a tree for shade
Spreading blankets
Telling stories
Gossiping about boys
Asking tentative questions
About things like kissing
Love
And other issues
That only best friends know about.
They eat their icy treats
While the thin layer of frost
That still covers the thin cardboard box
Slowly turns to water
Making damp spots on the bedspread
The taste of tart orange
The bitter cream
Mingles with sunscreen,
Sweat and chlorine,
Memories
It drips onto their fingers
Down their chins
As this perfect day
Melts
Into the last slanted purple rays
Of warm sunshine
And innocence
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Comments: 10

nsbell [2004-05-16 14:41:29 +0000 UTC]

WHY HASNT THIS GOT MORE COMMENTS!????!!! im very angry - more so than my pleasant exterior hints at - you SO do not get enough applauds showered on you! by god your one of the best poets here and people should comment more! anyway, ahem, i love this poem. it is so vivid, so sensory - im so very impressed, touched. and i could imagine that day, because the images you use, well they are profound and detailed. this could not be better, and the ending, WOW. i dont know what to say. for once, im speechless

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AfraidToDrown In reply to nsbell [2004-05-16 16:22:57 +0000 UTC]

haha! wow!..well..im really gald that you like it so much! im glad that you could imagine it..when i was younger my friends and we used to always sit around outside and talk..it was really easy to write it cuz it happend

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nsbell In reply to AfraidToDrown [2004-05-16 16:32:14 +0000 UTC]

yea, you are a very talented writer

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AfraidToDrown In reply to nsbell [2004-05-16 23:28:00 +0000 UTC]

gracias *blushes madly*

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nsbell In reply to AfraidToDrown [2004-05-17 12:01:59 +0000 UTC]

no problems

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tainted-visions [2004-04-10 05:27:25 +0000 UTC]

Wonderful, wonderful descriptions... Nice spin and style as always.

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AfraidToDrown In reply to tainted-visions [2004-04-10 13:29:51 +0000 UTC]

thanks so much! your words mean a lot to me

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tainted-visions In reply to AfraidToDrown [2004-04-10 16:38:46 +0000 UTC]

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JustALittleFolkyGirl [2004-04-07 12:01:07 +0000 UTC]

"The taste of tart orange
The bitter cream
Mingles with sunscreen,
Sweat and chlorine,
Memories"

AWESOME.

and the ending rocks my socks.

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AfraidToDrown In reply to JustALittleFolkyGirl [2004-04-08 00:16:16 +0000 UTC]

well thank you! that means a lot to me that you like it!!

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