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Whenever you see a "break" in my writing. aka a line that spans across the page. This means I am showing time has passed. I was taught this in a creative writing class but I seem to be crazy cause I can't find ANYTHING about doing that on any writing "rules". The best I can find is that some novelists use "***" soooooo yeah I am not sure lol. Also don't take the "years" too much to heart. My timeline starts at year 7000, but I may change that later on.

(Read Chapter three first to avoid Spoilers!)
SO! SHES BACK! lol If I had this up sooner, it wouldn't feel that long. So I have been rewriting, and editing this chapter for ages. However we get to see more of Shaila and Orlan as kids so that is fun! I hope I didn't over or under explain anything relating to Mika. I know there is a happy balance so I am aiming for that.

Also I am SUPER proud of that last picture there. I might upload it by itself, or put it as a patreon thing. I am not sure yet.

*~~When Critiquing!~~*
If you're going to Critique, I ask very nicely for constructive criticism!
Grammar, spelling, Anything like that is helpful when you point it out! I sometimes miss these things! So thank you!
Writing is NOT my strong point. If anything does not make sense, let me know! I can explain and maybe edit the story if something is confusing. I am after all, a comic artist. I am more used to drawing details not explaining them.

Personal Critiques about this chapter:
Nothing I write ever seems completed lol... I hope for now this is good.

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This is a PDF file, you may encounter issues viewing this, try a different browser. Mobile seems to work okay if you "download" the PDF.
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Whenever you see a "break" in my writing. aka a line that spans across the page. This means I am showing time has passed. I was taught this in a creative writing class but I seem to be crazy cause I can't find ANYTHING about doing that on any writing "rules". The best I can find is that some novelists use "***" soooooo yeah I am not sure lol. Also don't take the "years" too much to heart. My timeline starts at year 7000, but I may change that later on.

(Read Chapter three first to avoid Spoilers!)
SO! SHES BACK! lol If I had this up sooner, it wouldn't feel that long. So I have been rewriting, and editing this chapter for ages. However we get to see more of Shaila and Orlan as kids so that is fun! I hope I didn't over or under explain anything relating to Mika. I know there is a happy balance so I am aiming for that.

Also I am SUPER proud of that last picture there. I might upload it by itself, or put it as a patreon thing. I am not sure yet.

*~~When Critiquing!~~*
If you're going to Critique, I ask very nicely for constructive criticism!
Grammar, spelling, Anything like that is helpful when you point it out! I sometimes miss these things! So thank you!
Writing is NOT my strong point. If anything does not make sense, let me know! I can explain and maybe edit the story if something is confusing. I am after all, a comic artist. I am more used to drawing details not explaining them.

Personal Critiques about this chapter:
Nothing I write ever seems completed lol... I hope for now this is good.