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Words are my lifeI can't draw what I see
I'm not a visual person
The sky may look beautiful
With those warm hues
Covering a cloudless canvas
But I can't recreate that
Not with paint brushes
Or chalk
Or crayon
Or even with my own blood
Words are my life
I can't draw what I see
I'm not a visual person
A reptile may look neat
With its rough skin
Tiny spikes and beady eyes
But I can't recreate that
Not with paint brushes
Or chalk
Or crayon
Or even with my own blood
Words are my life
I can't draw what I see
I'm not a visual person
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>3 Thank you a lot, Tiesai. But I think it's really bad. I should have spent more time on it.
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Your welcome. XD Don't we all think that about our own work.
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Yeah, I think you're right.
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More of a writer then 
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xD Are you asking if I was more of a writer than a poet?
Thank you, I really appreciate your comment.
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I mean then a drawer
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This is an excellent poem. The repetition of the first stanza and the ending lines of the two descriptive stanzas really draw the whole piece together and give it a very solid and sturdy feeling. The imagery you use with your desciption of the sunset/sunrise and the reptile are very vivid. The concrete description is a nice contrast to the more abstract concept of "words are my life."
Would you consider a version of this poem using punctuation? While the flow is perfectly fine now, I think that adding punctuation might add more weight to those places where you would like the reader to pause.
A very excellent job, and a wonderful expression of something many writers feel. Bravo!
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Wow, really? I never thought of the two stanzas (on this piece) as being that well descriptive, but thank you very much.
And I think that's an exellect idea. 
Thank you again, Singer.
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That's my job.
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xD Yeah, I guess it is.
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I really like this poem. You're very good at using descriptive language - I can practically see that sky and the reptile!
My main critique is that, in my opinion, you are relying a little too much on repetition. Three of the five stanzas are identical, and even the descriptions of the sky and reptile end the same way. Try changing it up a little! Variation in your stanzas makes the poem more interesting to read. You've done an excellent job of that in the artist's description when you wrote about books, and I think you can only benefit from going forward in that direction.
Keep on writing! c:
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Wow, thanks.
And I think I'm relying on the repetition too much as well. 
So really, I appreciate the help!
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I love to read!!!! But I read both ways. I have a ebook app on my ipod. while I don't mind it, it's not the same as a book in your hands
good poem
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Yeah, I can relate. 
Thanks Connor. I'm glad you liked it.
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I mean, nooks and kindles do have some pros (like cheap books ranging from .99 to 9.99) but it does feel a little weird not feeling the weight of the book and the pages. but I still use it ^_^
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Yeah, I can agree with you on that. But still, like you've said, I still prefer an actual book.
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but still, the new Inheritance book is (Eragaon book) comin' out soon and it's only 13.99, I plan on buying it when it comes out
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OMG it is!!!!!!? 
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only on ebook though. sowwy
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xD Oh darn. Then I'll just have to be patient and wait.
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aaand then either get it at the library, or pay almost twenty bucks for it XD
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It's plain epic
You're wise beyond your years~ <-sounds weird, coming from someone two years younger than you...
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LOL! Wow, thanks! And I don't think it sounds weird.
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Thank you ^^ xD
It deserved it's place in my favs ^^
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THIS IS EPIC <3
I LOVE TO READ 8'D <3
I've never had one of those "nooks" and I don't want one :U
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Did you know that electronic book readers are what put book stores out of busniess? :I
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Yeah, i'm reading an epic book right now :3
Yeah D': THEY TOOK OUR BARNS AND NOBLE OUT DX
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Same! 
I know! 
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xD i have a book i read over the summer tht had 3 books in it XP
I was all sad when I found out! THEY HAVE ALL THE GOOD BOOKS! DX
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I know how you feel. It makes me so sad and angry!
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-sad nod- And libraries aren't any better. It's not like you can buy the book...
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