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AlienLifeDetected — Eraser-able
Published: 2011-07-21 19:06:29 +0000 UTC; Views: 223; Favourites: 2; Downloads: 3
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Description All this time
You were a burden
A dark shadow
Wondering around my mind

Changing my life
Directing my every move
Critizing my person
Always putting me down

Well not now
I'm a new person
Able to breath
So goodbye old grump

You are now
Like my pencils eraser
There one day
And gone the next
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Comments: 11

CoffeeCupPup [2011-08-28 17:36:31 +0000 UTC]

Ahahaha I like the title.
It's an interesting poem, without reading your little blurb at the bottom the last stanza wouldn't have really made sense to me... But I like it!

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AlienLifeDetected In reply to CoffeeCupPup [2011-08-30 22:49:21 +0000 UTC]

I'm very glad you liked it, Mesko. Sorry it was hard to understand 'til the comment. I'll try my best next time around to be be clear. And I really like the title too. It's my favorite part. xD

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CoffeeCupPup In reply to AlienLifeDetected [2011-09-05 20:42:54 +0000 UTC]


No big~ It's a poem and poems are allowed to be confusing.
Yay for good titles!

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eternalwriterstar [2011-07-21 21:44:08 +0000 UTC]

It is good

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AlienLifeDetected In reply to eternalwriterstar [2011-07-22 00:40:52 +0000 UTC]

Thank you.

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eternalwriterstar In reply to AlienLifeDetected [2011-07-22 03:37:52 +0000 UTC]

welcome

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AzeeraTheNinja [2011-07-21 20:15:31 +0000 UTC]

I think this is great!
I love the flow and it was short and nice

The only thing is that you said
"Critizing" and I think it should be "criticizing"
But that's about it

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AlienLifeDetected In reply to AzeeraTheNinja [2011-07-21 20:37:05 +0000 UTC]

Oh darn! Thanks, I'll change that real fast.

And thank you so much for the compliment.

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AzeeraTheNinja In reply to AlienLifeDetected [2011-07-21 20:40:17 +0000 UTC]

You're welcome!

And you're welcome again!

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AlienLifeDetected In reply to AzeeraTheNinja [2011-07-21 20:46:47 +0000 UTC]

I saw that you updated the prologue. I was going to ask you about that. I'll go read it.

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AzeeraTheNinja In reply to AlienLifeDetected [2011-07-21 20:47:01 +0000 UTC]

Haha, okay XD

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