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Published: 2013-01-29 20:02:43 +0000 UTC; Views: 14316; Favourites: 150; Downloads: 37
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" I understand him... I can not tell him to go ..."** Thank u friend for your help! I love you! **
**help with the grammar**
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WOAH did i see a change in his eyes wow im shocked but i think its sweet keep it up
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Awesome! 
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Did I detect a bit of softness in the good doctor's eyes?
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aaaaaaw que tierno TTwTT me encantoooo!!
esta muy bello!!!!! >w<
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Love the art and idea, but with your grammar, make the following changes:
Panel 2: Capitalize the i to I
Panel in the bottom left: Again, capitalize the i to I. You do this because you ended with "N-no...". "It's" is the start of a new sentence.
Panel in bottom right: Capitalize the I in "All what I can do...", "The problem is that Ican't hide...", and "How I hide" Also, change "what" to "that" in the 1st speech bubble. Lastly, insert the word "can" between "How" and "I". "How can> I hide you from the mechanics?"
I will keep looking for updates on this story, because so far so good!
-Perry
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I think it's okay ... I'm 10% English and 90% Spanish XD
Thank u!!!
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Your art is BRILLIANT! I absolutely love it! I was looking through your comics, and can't wait to see the next update!
Anyway, no probs! If you have anymore grammar questions, just note me.
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Chiquilla, tienes un error en el ΓΊltimo cuadro... es "How can I hide you from the mechanics"
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Shove him in an aircraft hangar! XD You're improving.
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Awesome page as always
Simone should hide Knock Out in his vehicle mode - if that's possible~
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Loving this comic!
You need to fix the last panel where: How i hide you from five mechanics?" it should be "How do I hide you from five mechanics?"
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I'm really liking this story a lot. Looking forward to more
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I love the relationship between these two
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This is amazing as always! Keep up the great work!
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Darling,Darling,DARLING!!! you never cease to amaze! complete love for this.
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Hello. This is some really great work, but the grammar in the top-right bubble and the bottom-right bubble need a bit of fixing.
For the top-right bubble, you spelled "yours" when it should just be "your".
And for the bottom right one, the sentence should be "How can I hide you from five mechanics?".
Thank you for asking for grammar help in the description(It made me feel a bit useful). ^_^
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that frames? the number, please
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Oh. In the second and seventh frames.
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Oh, and FAVED! <3 I love the artwork!
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