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Anna-Viktoria — Invincible
Published: 2012-08-04 16:18:28 +0000 UTC; Views: 1876; Favourites: 44; Downloads: 8
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Description They say that I can't last much longer,
Grinning as I scream in pain
And laughing as I gasp for air.
But they won't reach their goal.

"Daddy, you'll be back, won't you?"
Her words still echo in my head,
A piece of happiness I keep within.
"Of course, my angel. Sooner than you'd think."

Darkness embraces my consciousness,
And every breath becomes a struggle,
But still I hear her worried voice.
"Promise?" she asks. "Promise." I answer.

And as I lie here on the floor,
Beaten, bloody, and alone,
I feel my heart beating in my chest,
Fighting to fulfill my promise.

"But how can you know?" she calls
As I'm halfway out the door.
I smile as I bend down to hug her.
"for you I'll be invincible."

And though my world is made of pain,
And my blood seems caught on fire,
I draw one breath after another,
And know that I'll return alive.
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Comments: 36

GoldenFlameNaLu [2013-02-03 01:57:19 +0000 UTC]

You are awesomE!!~!

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Anna-Viktoria In reply to GoldenFlameNaLu [2013-02-03 09:32:15 +0000 UTC]

Thank you so much! I'm so glad you liked my poems! If you want to, you can also take a look at my gallery [link] for more!

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GoldenFlameNaLu In reply to Anna-Viktoria [2013-02-03 12:52:33 +0000 UTC]

sure!!

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Priya-Kumar [2012-08-07 16:42:07 +0000 UTC]

See? You ARE perfect!
Amazing piece

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Anna-Viktoria In reply to Priya-Kumar [2012-08-12 20:50:37 +0000 UTC]

Thank you so much!

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luvicoffee [2012-08-06 15:41:44 +0000 UTC]

That made me want to cry it was so amazing

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Anna-Viktoria In reply to luvicoffee [2012-08-12 20:51:03 +0000 UTC]

Thank you! I'm really glad you liked it!

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JunozPP [2012-08-06 11:36:22 +0000 UTC]

I'm impressed. I thoroughly enoyed it. Thanks for writing it! Made my evening.

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Anna-Viktoria In reply to JunozPP [2012-08-12 20:51:34 +0000 UTC]

Thanks! I'm glad you liked it!

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cee69 [2012-08-05 19:37:54 +0000 UTC]

I usually don't read poems (I just delete them) but this one just dragged me to the end O.O
Really awesome poem

~cee

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Anna-Viktoria In reply to cee69 [2012-08-12 20:52:06 +0000 UTC]

Thank you so much!

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tegori [2012-08-05 19:37:25 +0000 UTC]

Wow!!
Truly BEAUTIFUL and very, very emotive!!!
I think you've made cry to more of one (myself included)...

Good luck in the contest!!

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Anna-Viktoria In reply to tegori [2012-08-12 20:55:02 +0000 UTC]

Thank you! I'm glad you liked it! And I'm glad that I managed to get get you so into it that it made you cry! (that sounds really evil, doesn't it? )

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tegori In reply to Anna-Viktoria [2012-08-13 07:22:59 +0000 UTC]

You're very welcome!! (yep, it does. but it's fine. I guess it's all part of your plan.. your evil plan )

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Anna-Viktoria In reply to tegori [2012-08-13 12:24:10 +0000 UTC]

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tegori In reply to Anna-Viktoria [2012-08-14 00:57:50 +0000 UTC]

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Kailani-e [2012-08-05 14:03:53 +0000 UTC]

Great poem! I just love how you wrote it

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Anna-Viktoria In reply to Kailani-e [2012-08-12 20:55:23 +0000 UTC]

Thank you so much!

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Kailani-e In reply to Anna-Viktoria [2012-08-12 23:30:03 +0000 UTC]

Your welcome ^_^

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DSteffi [2012-08-05 05:42:42 +0000 UTC]

Great poem. O.O I love the message behind this and how every line flows perfectly to the other.

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Anna-Viktoria In reply to DSteffi [2012-08-05 06:42:25 +0000 UTC]

Thanks!

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Fantasy-WarriorX [2012-08-05 04:53:57 +0000 UTC]

This is wonderful, I enjoyed reading this one. It's very moving, nice job!

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Anna-Viktoria In reply to Fantasy-WarriorX [2012-08-05 06:42:05 +0000 UTC]

Thank you!

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CrematedMan [2012-08-05 03:03:29 +0000 UTC]

The last stanza and dialogue really made this poem. It moved it from the typical struggling narrative poem to something better. Nicely done.

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Anna-Viktoria In reply to CrematedMan [2012-08-05 06:41:52 +0000 UTC]

Thanks!

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NotenSMSK [2012-08-05 02:21:13 +0000 UTC]

Beautiful!! I loved the concept. The story line is very short yet gives a person many thoughts. It is vast. The start did not impress me VERY much. It was fine. But from the third stanza, it turns really great. I didn't feel a lack of rhyme though I felt its presence when I reached the fourth stanza and there it gets REALLY good. loved the ending... but I got a totally different YET similar idea... I hope to write on it soon

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Anna-Viktoria In reply to NotenSMSK [2012-08-05 06:40:57 +0000 UTC]

Thanks!
And thank you so much for always giving me that great feedback! It really helps!

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NotenSMSK In reply to Anna-Viktoria [2012-08-05 10:45:12 +0000 UTC]

I hope it does... I rarely get VERY critical as in line by line and this and that... so I hope it helps

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breezybrutality [2012-08-05 01:04:45 +0000 UTC]

Oh. My God. I cried.
I absolutely love this T^T

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Anna-Viktoria In reply to breezybrutality [2012-08-05 06:39:33 +0000 UTC]

Thank you so much! That's the best compliment you can give!
I'm really glad you liked it!

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breezybrutality In reply to Anna-Viktoria [2012-08-05 14:37:26 +0000 UTC]

I'm glad I could give a good compliment to such a great piece!

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Incendiya [2012-08-04 21:59:17 +0000 UTC]

Wow, very touching

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Anna-Viktoria In reply to Incendiya [2012-08-05 06:37:42 +0000 UTC]

Thank you!

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chewyraezen [2012-08-04 16:49:21 +0000 UTC]

raw emotion. i liked it.

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Anna-Viktoria In reply to chewyraezen [2012-08-04 16:51:41 +0000 UTC]

Thanks!

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chewyraezen In reply to Anna-Viktoria [2012-08-04 16:56:13 +0000 UTC]

you are quite welcome

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