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*The blue mail-satchel bumps and sways, brings them in,
rigid with the weight of promise;
envelopes, dessert-colored, a delicacy,
the brittle folds filled with scent,
a creme transfer over time, to me.
I open each with the reverence
of seashells and oceanic loves.
I cut apart the shore that separates us
with a letter-opener, the sound of water.
You have arrived
before your body.
I settle into my pulse
and the resounding ambiance of my privacy
while your words touch my lips.
*
I.
We stand in our reamed maze of consent--
faces, throats thrumming
on parallel shoulders;
a doorway, at dusk;
a barefoot dance sung over by birds.
We are two of the same one;
the twin elements of time:
now and Then
--before and after--
not opposed. Of the same origin,
a substance pared from itself.
II.
The dawn is your precision.
The long hair of rain,
the history of sound. You stand,
hands over your heart, eyelids like mourning veils
as the clouds close in and then disperse
over your head.
The sun cut through the windows
as you arrived, ethereal, over vastness;
a clarity emerges
with the quick ribbon-script
of what you say.
A green and glassy seed of meaning
unhinges its sprout
and ascends, terse,
watery, understood by the soil,
its roots
between your words.
You elaborate with your self,
on the movement
of song.
III.
Your laughter
is a tangled cordage of light
in my eyes;
the liquidity of your dance
drowns me.
A ginger joy, the presence
I anticipate, the raucous noise
of living an old love that follows.
A resemblance of hands and eyes,
the voices thick with similarity.
We are the foliage in a play,
minor and careless.
We claim ourselves
with our delicious hilarity,
our theatrical gestures,
for our own sake.
*
He has left to resume his circuit with his satchel,
his square truck
full of baskets,
his tan smell of wind and paper.
The afternoon resumes
surrounded with envelopes gutted
like empty ice-cream bowls;
surrounded by the gift of tangible contact,
surrounded by the sultry, rainy tang
of time well spent,
full of its own rewards.
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Comments: 53
katarthis [2011-02-07 03:15:55 +0000 UTC]
Superb! I had to doubletake when even after reading your comments I realized that nothing had passed but time - the post man had only left and all that one had was three written letters and good feelings.
k
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Anthony-Ryan In reply to katarthis [2011-02-07 04:21:20 +0000 UTC]
Thank you! I am glad you had to doubletake
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DailyLitDeviations [2010-12-31 15:03:44 +0000 UTC]
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Piscesandthediamonds [2010-10-24 09:08:08 +0000 UTC]
You turn minutia into magic, breathe life into so much
"You have arrived
before your body."
That moment of realisation is so beautifully described.
"The long hair of rain,
the history of sound. You stand,
hands over your heart, eyelids like mourning veils"
Wow...you should be a famous, wealthy poet...if you aren't already!
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Anthony-Ryan In reply to Piscesandthediamonds [2010-10-24 09:31:32 +0000 UTC]
I'm very pleased to hear you enjoy this poem!
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miserabel [2010-09-11 12:26:33 +0000 UTC]
Really, this is amazing - so beautiful, and reading it is just a taste of perfection really. Awesome. I love it. To read this made me smile
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pluvialeyes [2010-09-09 20:54:08 +0000 UTC]
Congrats on the DD! I always love the metaphors and choice of words you use.
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lovelyloon [2010-09-09 18:27:44 +0000 UTC]
Aw, Tony...
How so very happy i am for you.
This one (and "orange," of course) is a very special favorite of mine.
But you knew that.
:]]
:haert:
<33333
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Anthony-Ryan In reply to lovelyloon [2010-09-09 20:07:34 +0000 UTC]
thanks Lori! yes, i did know that haha. and i'm very glad you like them!
:haert:
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lovelyloon In reply to Anthony-Ryan [2010-09-10 06:56:41 +0000 UTC]
i called you!
And when you didn't pick up, i was very confused because i know you must be awake right now.
And then i was like, "Oh duh. It's Thursday night, which means towel mountain conquering time."
We musmustMUST speak soon, though!
Ahh i miss having at least a weekly dose of the Tones.
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Anthony-Ryan In reply to lovelyloon [2010-09-10 17:26:13 +0000 UTC]
haha, yeah this morning i saw that you had called. no i wasn't at work, i was chillin' at home. when you called, my phone was on vibrate and in another room as i was listening to headphones, so you just had no chance! haha. yes indeedio, we must! :haert:
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Julye-chan [2010-09-09 18:16:23 +0000 UTC]
Your wording is simply beautiful it touches my heart and i can't help but fall in love with it over and over again.
Congrats on the DD. You totally deserved it!
Keep it up ^^
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anicol [2010-09-09 16:58:59 +0000 UTC]
'You have arrived before your body.'
Great line Congrats!
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Solarune [2010-09-09 10:49:47 +0000 UTC]
Beautiful. Just wonderful, the imagery is so perfect that I lost myself in it. This is one of those poems that's like a sunny day or a photo of someone's smile, it's full of happiness and contentment and delicacy and the excitement of a precious gift. The extended metaphor/dream is wonderful.
I love the whole poem, but in particular I like these lines:
I cut apart the shore that separates us
with a letter-opener, the sound of water.
You have arrived
before your body.
The dawn is your precision.
The long hair of rain,
the history of sound
A green and glassy seed of meaning
unhinges its sprout
and ascends, terse,
watery, understood by the soil,
its roots
between your words.
and I could go on and on with the quotes, but I'll spare you.
Congrats on the DD, it's really well-deserved.
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Lit-Twitter [2010-09-09 07:46:34 +0000 UTC]
Chirp, congrats on the DD, it's been twittered. [link]
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AlecBell [2010-08-08 07:51:53 +0000 UTC]
How well it works, Anton.
And completely rooted in that world that is recognisably of your imagination.
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Anthony-Ryan In reply to AlecBell [2010-08-08 08:19:56 +0000 UTC]
Thank you very much, sir! I always appreciate you taking the time to comment.
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AlecBell In reply to Anthony-Ryan [2010-08-08 08:29:56 +0000 UTC]
I enjoy reading, and sharing my responses with you, Anton.
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londonrey [2010-06-02 20:50:39 +0000 UTC]
This is ridiculously good. I honestly can't believe how much I enjoyed reading this. You captured that feeling of anticipation perfectly. This is beautiful and meaningful. I was smiling through the whole thing. My favorite part is the prologue.
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archelyxs [2010-04-30 14:24:50 +0000 UTC]
Beautiful, and congrats for the DLD! You deserve the appreciation.
Anyway, I got the weird over-clean papery smell of post offices from the very first line- beautifully done.
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Anthony-Ryan In reply to archelyxs [2010-04-30 17:58:59 +0000 UTC]
Haha--mission accomplished. Thank you very much!
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kittylivers [2010-04-27 05:10:31 +0000 UTC]
Prologue
I love the prologue. Having just received a letter from a friend whom I haven’t seen for awhile, the anticipation of a letter and the feeling I get when I open it is always special, not quite like getting a phone call or an email.
I love the imagery of dessert with the letter, something to be savored and enjoyed.
I think that the word “shore” isn’t appropriate for the fourth paragraph. A shore doesn’t usually divide people. A gulf, a stream, a river, a canal, divides people.
You have arrived before your body is probably my favorite line in the poem.
Section I
I love the word choice in this section, irony of “reamed maze”, the alliteration all over the place, and parallel lines in the third stanza.
Section II
Again, the word choice here is incredible. The mixing of sense, with the idea of “long hair of rain” right next to “history of sound” as well as “movement of song”. This section is kind of a contrast to vague, flightly imagery of the last section with more concrete, precise details.
Section III
I like how while there is no over riding poetic image, the imagery within each section bleeds over into the next one, making it feel coherent and connected.
I don’t quite like the line “A resemblance of hands and eyes,/the voices thick with similarity.” I know poetic license says that you don’t have to follow conventional sentence structure, but this sentence just bugs me.
Epilogue
I like the epilogue, it says goodbye without sounding depressing, and ties back to the prologue with the dessert imagery. Yum.
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KneelingGlory [2010-04-26 18:35:17 +0000 UTC]
I literally said "wow! wow! wow!" after I read this piece. It is wonderful. The way you told such a heart-warming story in such a small space is spectacular.
I am wondering why you don't capitalize 'i' though? It doesn't seem to add any stylistic advantage to the piece, and in fact distracted me from the reading the second and third time.
But, seriously, wow!
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Anthony-Ryan In reply to KneelingGlory [2010-04-26 22:21:15 +0000 UTC]
Oh! I capitalize it when it's at the beginning of a sentence...actually you reminded me to go back and actually bother to do that haha. I don't usually use capitalization when i write poems anyway, but decided to start doing it again.
Thanks very much for the comment--very glad you like it!
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DailyLitDeviations [2010-04-26 18:00:24 +0000 UTC]
Your wonderful literary work has been chosen to be featured by DLD (Daily Literature Deviations) and has been selected as our Pick of the Day. It is featured in a news article here: [link] and on our main page.
Keep writing and keep creating.
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