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Moozika [2012-04-11 06:05:56 +0000 UTC]

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I think that this critique box needs some love, so let's do this!

First of all, when i saw this picture, I really felt a sense of longing, and sadness from this picture. The pose you drew yourself in, the expression on your face, and the single heart beat detected on that heart rate monitor, really work very well. e.deviantart.net/emoticons/s/s… " width="15" height="15" alt="" title=" (Smile)"/>

The fact that the heart rate monitor resembles a window gives it that much more of an impact, too.

Now on to what can be improved.

1) The way you made all the parts outside of the "window" monochrome further adds to the dark mood, but the fact that the colors are vibrant inside the "window" is also quite contradictory.

The "window" I feel represents her inner sadness, a lack of life.

If ever, it should be the other way round, the things inside that window should be monochromatic, and the ones outside of it are in color. The "window" will then act also as an X-ray, seeing into her inner feelings.

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I redlined the correction for the legs.

The way that you drew your body slightly turned to the viewer means that you have to adjust the contours of the legs accordingly.

atm, it looks like your legs are dislocated from the knee down. The left arm is also too short, or at least you've drawn the contours incorrectly as well.

Anyways, Hope this critique helps! I really love this piece, and I think this is definitely one of your better works e.deviantart.net/emoticons/a/a… " width="15" height="15" alt="" title="Aww"/> Looking forward to see more artwork of this kind in the future!

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Mellnoia [2012-04-19 20:28:30 +0000 UTC]

Still I believe your style looks like K-On! But that's impressive. I love the style. It's so sweet, but not too childish
Love this piece <3

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DeadCobra [2012-04-10 10:26:37 +0000 UTC]

Sweet

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Girlteknoid [2012-04-09 16:10:35 +0000 UTC]

O_O Holy crap, love it. Is it just me or when I look at this picture I think of homemade pizza. I really want homemade pizza. But I ate homemade pizza three days ago, so she probably doesn't want to make it again.

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bowfanatic [2012-04-09 05:00:15 +0000 UTC]

ME GUSTA

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Zelvii [2012-04-09 04:54:35 +0000 UTC]

OMG YOU HAVE ZOMBIE FEET! You draw hands really well now-a-days!


YOU DRAW YOURSELF SO WELL!

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