Seniman101 [2009-10-09 21:14:02 +0000 UTC]

so I can't give critique cuz I'm no premium member...then I'll just leave ya a comment

take down the amount of different types...three's a crowd, and you've got the music key which counts as one as well...try and get one closer to the key in its swirl and curves, and make the "FLOW" stouter, make a stencil with less rounded letters, to add into the contrast of the finesse of the silkscreen pictures.
And because everything is in an angle, put the silver notebar over straight, I think that would give it a bit more edge...
ohja, I'd take the orange and blue, because I really like those, and then maybe just put one or two complementary colors with that, instead of five, because you already have the silver going as well.
And try mixing some white with transparent, or a color with transparent, it gives a nice little see-through effect, but still leaves your colors intact (in my opinion)
I think all of this would give it even more flow!
hope you can use something in this huge comment, and looking forward to the next one!

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