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Published: 2011-07-31 21:14:52 +0000 UTC; Views: 213; Favourites: 1; Downloads: 4
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Crimson scars on a scarlet heartCarved with a stainless blade
Always in the dark,
Monsters come out to play
Invisible shadows
Deadly hide-or-speak
The light is afraid
Innocence runs away
Barbed velvet words
Stroking open sores
Shattered glass peroxide
And Band-Aids on bullet wounds
A Veteran of pain
Souls escaping
From the grave
Escape on the wind
Bathed by the rain
The Earth turns,
Sunrise brings a new dawn
And slowly fading
Are the crimson scars
Comments: 7
It has a very unique combination of words but the Title and first sentence "Time Heals Wounds"....
I'm having a hard time seeing it's meaning revealed in the poem itself.
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Thank you... I'm trying to think of a better title, but I left it as that for now.... any suggestions?
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Wait my bad,
"Sunrise brings a new dawn
And slowly fading
Are the crimson scars"
I see how Time Heals the Wounds, but still I'd go with another title perhaps something along the lines of "Thou Scarlet, White as Snow"
Maybe to biblical but try to use the colors Crimson and Scarlet in the title and let the reader discover the hidden message of time healing wounds. Once a creative writing teacher always told us "Show, don't tell." Hope that helps.
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True... Thank you 
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This is so strong. Full of imagery!!
You have done such a lovely job on it, very rich.
(:
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