HOME | DD
BlueJacketChronicles — OC Ralden
Published: 2013-05-10 21:42:15 +0000 UTC; Views: 740; Favourites: 0; Downloads: 0
Redirect to original
Description
Ralden is a young man who was called by a brilliant scientist to join his underground group on call freedom fighters to go up against one of their own who became possessed by the soul of an old foe. Ralden was first reluctant to join but when his city was ravaged by the same foe, he join them on their quest to destroy that soul and save the once heroic leader who stands dormant inside is own mind. the Spiritual Beast known as Phoenix compelled him to do so.Ralden is owned by
Related content
Comments: 12
Not at all.....He's just a teen who forces himself to join a group of folks to stop the original leader who is possessed by the undead spirit of their first foe....just think Batman being possessed by Ras'Al Ghul kinda thing......Plus The mystical Phoenix makes sure he stays with the group, think of it as the first boot camp Sargent a soldier meets the first time after getting off the bus to star military school. Originally Ralden was just a petty thief in his city until he story some ancient relic that caused him to be the Mystic Phoenix's boy on call. then the possessed guy showed up and boom..he's forced to join the scientist's group.
👍: 0 ⏩: 1
Dude... Come on.
👍: 0 ⏩: 1
okay seriously is it because of his name is Ralden? this character has nothing to do with MK...
👍: 0 ⏩: 1
Wrong Raiden.
[link]
Eliminate young guy, swafty hair, awesome sword.
👍: 0 ⏩: 2
Damn thats waay to close.....Name change, new hair, Tweak back story, get the original blade back.
👍: 0 ⏩: 1
I'm not trying to say you did it intentionally. But hen I look at this, I immediately see Raiden. And if I do, others will to. I don't want you to get called out for ripping something off when you really didn't.
This happens to me a lot. The story I was writing for my character Io, ended up being almost exactly like mass effect. So I know these things happen.
Just looking out for you.
👍: 0 ⏩: 1
thanks 
👍: 0 ⏩: 0