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Mul [2007-12-06 22:57:37 +0000 UTC]

Well, my first and most major tip would be: Scan betters.

This is sort of ironic because I use the tablet specifically because I can't scan better. :/

The main problem here is that the grains of the image contrast wwaaaaay too much with the added onomatapia... onaematapeia... something. So does the text itself, by the way. You'll also want to stay consistent - if some words are outside speech bubbles, some words are inside speech bubbles, it'll look odd. (Unless it's one of those manga things where the small words outside the bubble are just like background information or chatter)

Your bubbles are also too close to the text; leave some 'breathing room' white space between the text and the edge of the bubble.

You might want to put some thought into panelling as opposed to sticking seperate scans over each other. (Once again, I avoid this issue entirely using the tablet. *hugs tablet*)

The drawings and the storytelling is very good though, keep it up!

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Waddle-Penguin [2007-12-06 07:05:07 +0000 UTC]

Everything looks great blue! But, time for waddles to be picky!

In the panel where we first see keyah running, "OH GOSH I'M GONNA BE LATE---" so on so forth, her back shouldn't curve out like that, she's only nine.

The only other part I can be picky about is when she trips on the stairs, it gets confusing...try to make it clear, i think? and what are the "Pick" sound effects for?

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