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Published: 2003-03-22 00:55:57 +0000 UTC; Views: 96; Favourites: 0; Downloads: 2
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War has twisted the land,Punished the innocent,
And destroyed our souls,
Yet it isn\'t enough, for;
Where war is, the others follow...
All well known, not by their true names,
But by their twisted masks.
Fatigue rules me,
Fear drives me
Time haunts me,
Love drugs me,
Confusion stalks me,
And despair is my constant companion...
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nice... I especially like the winding down flow of
Fatigue rules me,
Fear drives me
Time haunts me,
Love drugs me,
its got a despairing feel.. *maybe thats just that you used the word despair.. *
but good..
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the punctuation is messed up in a few places but i do like the beginning three lines.
"destroyed our souls" is a tad cliche, try working on that, and it possibly could be longer.
other than that i do like this.
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