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I had no idea what I was going to do with the hours of free time I had now. With Leena gone off to see a friend over dinner, she left me to fend for myself. It’s not like she ditched me, she actually asked if I wanted to go. But being still rather uneasy around others with how I looked now, I politely declined the invitation. I knew she'd be back and we could cuddle all night, so I had no worries. Just the waiting part kind of sucked.Just settling down to rest and watch a movie, the previews hadn’t even finished rolling through when I heard a knock at the door. Naturally, I tensed up a bit with it being so late at night and with me being alone. I tried to ignore it and focused back on the television.
But then it came again. And again, as if there was urgency behind it. Looking nervously to the door I willed myself to get up and walk to the door. Knowing there was literally no possible way of disguising the massive bulge between my legs, I swallowed hard and pulled the handle.
My wariness quickly fell away and was replaced by awe. Before me stood what looked like a curvy, slime…girl... creature. I probably looked like an idiot drooling in the doorway as the moonlight sparkled through her purple body.
“H-Hi…?” I mumbled out. Any self consciousness about myself was temporarily masked by the intrigue I held of this girl. But there was something about her that caught my attention. Her eyes were pained and her slick arms skittish. If I didn’t know better by her body language, this poor thing seemed lost.
“Are you alright?”
Some weird tentacle thing came sprouting out of her shoulder making me reel backward. “Whoa! No way!” I put up my arms to wave them defensively. I unfortunately knew a little too much about tentacles and whatnot to be comfortable thanks to the internet.
She seemed to be hurt by my overreaction and let her body sink a little in her pool of goo she had at her feet. Damn…once those few tears fell from her eyes, I felt like a terrible person.
“S-Sorry…I didn’t mean to do that, really.” I let out an apologetic sigh. “N-Not everyday I see a cute girl made of slime standing on my porch.”
She seemed to lighten up at my comment and reached her hand up. I wasn’t sure if she wanted a hand shake or something so I habitually rose mine up to hold it.
This is the only way I’m able to communicate with people.
Every hair on my body sprang up on end, making me tense all over. S-She can talk in my head!?
Heehee, yes. I get that reaction from people a lot.
Her smile faded quickly as her worried demeanor returned. I was able to sense it better than before with her anxious hums and mumblings dancing in my mind.
“Are you alright?” I asked again, hoping this time to get an answer with her touching my hand. Her eyes locked onto mine, her head swiveling back and forth frighteningly.
Kelsey! Where is she! I-I can’t find her anywhere!
I jumped a little as her words cried out. Kelsey? I immediately went to the conclusion that she was missing her child or something, the situation only seeming to worsen.
N-No…Kelsey's my girlfriend! She had me wait over at the bus stop while she went off and did something…b-but it’s been over four hours! If she—
“Easy! Ok. It's ok,” I interrupted her as her slimy body began to quiver all over. She was practically hyperventilating inside me…which was really weird to feel. I tried to give her the smallest of smiles and turned to look inside the house. “Let’s just go inside and you can explain everything. It’s freezing out here.”
I wasn’t trying to be creepy by inviting a stranger in to my house, but my balls were practically getting goosebumps just standing out there on the porch. Being inside the warm house would be good for both of us. As I let her walk by and closed the door, I led her to the living room to talk.
“Take a deep breath and tell me what's wrong,” I told her as I sat down. The purple girl reached out again and nodded nervously.
Kelsey said she had to go do something really quick and had to leave me behind that bus stop down the street. I-I don’t know why she couldn’t take me with her…but I waited there for almost four hours…and she still hasn’t come back…
“You can always wait here if you need to, I don’t mind. And I’m sure Leena wouldn’t either.” I looked at her curvy figure dripping with purple goo around her. “Not sure if a bed will suit you comfortably… But you can stay the night if we can’t get a hold of Kelsey before tomorrow.” I hadn’t noticed it before, but aside from being worried, the girl also looked exhausted. I was about to ask why when she enlightened me on it.
I… I can’t sleep in a bed, but thank you. I…I can’t survive like this out of a host for too long…or else I… I die…
“Die?!” I really choked on the word in utter shock. “W-What'd'ya mean die?!”
I…have to physically live within someone in order to stay alive…I’m able to come out like this for a while, but too long I become too weak. Please…if I don’t find her soon I don’t know what I can do.
My night had gone from dull to intense in a matter of ten minutes. I was now sharing the girl’s worry as I was becoming her only option to solve her literal life or death situation. I may have been skeptical, but based on the genuine fear in her voice I couldn’t help but believe her.
I quickly snatched my phone from the side table beside me and looked to her hopefully. “You wouldn’t happen to know her phone number would you?” It seemed far fetched with her being a mute. Her sad shake of the head only confirmed my assumption. I asked question after question about Kelsey's job, where she lived, if she had friends, and many others, but it seemed the longer I kept the googirl out in the open just sitting there, the sicklier she became.
“Look…I’m sorry,” I said with a sad painful sigh. “I don’t even know your name and I can’t even help you…” I glanced to the side not wanting to see her distraught expression.
My name's Nari.
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Comments: 22
BrowsingChipmunk In reply to motorolafan117 [2017-01-12 10:43:35 +0000 UTC]
Hi Depends on who you're talking about. Nari (my googirl OC) is from the "A Beautiful Mistake" story and series I wrote. Jordan (my red panda futa OC) is from a previous story I wrote that included her backstory. That story is over on my FurAffinity page, but I'll be posting it to my sta.sh soon since this method of posting worked out. She has artwork in my gallery as well if you wanted to know what she looked like.
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LNMman [2017-01-11 06:27:39 +0000 UTC]
Once again you have taken multiple things that I am not even remotely interested in, and made them into a great read. Bravo for your talents!
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BrowsingChipmunk In reply to LNMman [2017-01-12 00:30:56 +0000 UTC]
I greatly appreciate the fact that you read the story. I'm glad overall it was a good story for you. Like you said, even if the topics don't pertain to everyone, I always hope the story itself (be it the prose, structure, content, pace, or whatever it may be) will make the story worth it to an effect.
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LNMman In reply to BrowsingChipmunk [2017-01-12 01:19:25 +0000 UTC]
The slime girl concept could have some interesting cross-overs with some of my more mainstream (laughing at myself) interests.
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BrowsingChipmunk In reply to LNMman [2017-01-12 01:32:17 +0000 UTC]
Why laugh at yourself? You've got a bunch of interests, and each have the reason (unique as it may be) to why you like them, so that's all that matters. And hey, if googirls and goo-inflation can mesh with it, more power to those ideas!
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LNMman In reply to BrowsingChipmunk [2017-01-14 03:07:30 +0000 UTC]
I laugh at calling any of my interests "mainstream".
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BrowsingChipmunk In reply to LNMman [2017-01-14 21:36:47 +0000 UTC]
Eh...mainstream is just people's excuse to not go out of their comfort zone to explore new things. Heh, I've made a few quite successful stories from your 'non-mainstream' ideas
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LNMman In reply to BrowsingChipmunk [2017-01-14 21:37:34 +0000 UTC]
Yes you have, and I love them.
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Paitent115 [2017-01-11 03:23:19 +0000 UTC]
I liked the intro and how you created Jordan personality inside the story as well how she react to seeing a slime girl
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BrowsingChipmunk In reply to Paitent115 [2017-01-11 03:50:51 +0000 UTC]
:3 Thank you. Did you end up reading the whole story or just the introduction here? Either or, I appreciate the feedback
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Paitent115 In reply to BrowsingChipmunk [2017-01-11 03:55:18 +0000 UTC]
I read all of it and WOW just WOW. I liked it alot
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BrowsingChipmunk In reply to Paitent115 [2017-01-11 04:21:43 +0000 UTC]
Heh. :3 I... hope I didn't make too much innocence run away from you with this one, lol. Thanks ^w^
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Paitent115 In reply to BrowsingChipmunk [2017-01-11 11:20:57 +0000 UTC]
This story has some stuff that i'm into so what innocence.
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MisterDisposable [2017-01-11 03:10:33 +0000 UTC]
Well done as always! The themes of discovery and exploration really shine through in this story. If the sta.sh method works, I wouldn't mind reading more of your more NSFW stories.
Out of curiosity, what things do you look for in a Futa story (or what makes a Futa story "work," in your opinion)?
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BrowsingChipmunk In reply to MisterDisposable [2017-01-11 03:49:00 +0000 UTC]
Thanks I probably could have done this earlier with my first story but I don't see any harm in posting the other story later in my sta.sh. With this being non-canon, it won't confuse people. (Lol I'd hope not.)
As for futa, well, for the large variety of artwork of it, I find I like a specific niche of it. That niche happens to be hyperfuta. And even more so, it helps if its anthropomorphic as well. Not sure why, but furry based futa is much more appealing than just human based ones. Like in most BE lit I've written, the larger the size works much better for the story. I take it the same way with futa. Not only is she larger up top but also down below, giving it a complimentary 'balance' of exaggerated proportions. And frankly, with the addition of futa, there's even more to talk about/describe/grow along with the usual BE.
But as what works? I'm not sure. Haven't read enough to know really. But I see it as a unique opportunity to incorporate different elements than what I'm used to, broadening my vision of character attributes, and giving futa characters just as much love as any other character I'd write about. (Lol here I go again being an idealist again. :3)
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MisterDisposable In reply to BrowsingChipmunk [2017-01-12 00:19:54 +0000 UTC]
Sometime after my comment, I found this futa artist named Mousewerk. While I'm not outright requesting a story, I'd be interested seeing what you do with the condition his character Alex has.
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BrowsingChipmunk In reply to MisterDisposable [2017-01-12 01:26:49 +0000 UTC]
Haven't seen or heard of them before, but I took a look at their tumblr. But with the short comic they made of Alex, it does make me wonder what I can do with that concept now that you mentioned it. (Lol, don't worry about implying a request.) It may as well happen regardless just because what you brought up is an idea I'd be open to writing about.
And after reading your first comment and then looking at this "Day in the Life" kind of comic, I've wanted to attempt a story that tracks the daily life of a character for quite some time. Some people make it work so well. I've made attempts but they all seem to fizzle out. But the reason why I shy away from it is either the story will try to describe everything in the day and lose readers with mundane routine things, or with the character already used to routine, there will be no surprise/ups and downs of emotion to play off of.
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MisterDisposable In reply to BrowsingChipmunk [2017-01-12 02:13:08 +0000 UTC]
He seems like a new artist. I only found out about him at some point when I was googling "goth futa" or something.
I'd say advise for you to think of it as a character doing normal things, but their endowments end up causing things not go according to plan (SaburoX's "Adventures in Babysitting II" is a great example). I think it's the fact that we were given a visual in that comic is what makes it work. The written detail expanded on what we could already see, and seeing it in action made gave it a vibe that words can't quite do justice (like Alex *ahem* "drinking her own protein shakes with her straw" as she sat on a washing machine).
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MisterDisposable In reply to BrowsingChipmunk [2017-01-11 04:50:47 +0000 UTC]
I also forgot to mention that Nari's crazed growth reminded me of how I described Vanissa's binging at the end of WSitN 1. That kind of emotion when it comes to expansion seems hard to find.
Anyways, I don't really have an answer to the appeal of anthro futa. Personally, I've read futa stories where things just go off the deep end, and those end up loosing me (although this one didn't). I guess it's the same as BE literature: their's always going to be another character with bigger tits, so don't be so focused on getting the biggest.
I'd say what makes a great futa story is a mix of embarrassment and a (temporary) loss of control. The embarrassment is pretty self explanatory, but the loss of control makes things interesting. Situations where the futa girl's panicking over getting bigger and being unable to "shrink it," or where she's exasperated at how big her load is (or how long it's been going on) involve the reader, IMO. It's when things get out of hand for the MC, who's already exceptionally endowed, that make the reader wonder how far you're going to take things. Just having the character go "Whelp, I just sprayed a swimming pool's worth of spunk out of my ten foot cock. Just another day in my life." doesn't really do anything for me. I guess in a similar vein, the character needs to be actively reacting during the escalation, climax, and deescalation.
Those are just my thoughts.
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BrowsingChipmunk In reply to MisterDisposable [2017-01-12 01:17:19 +0000 UTC]
I'm glad you noticed that particular part in the story, because it was the most conflicting thing to decide on out of the whole story. With wanting to keep with Nari's more naive and innocent nature, the sudden change overwhelms her drastically. But the battle for me was deciding whether it caused drunken unstoppable need for more (causing house damage and harm to Jordan, [which really isn't me as a writer]) or letting it happen a little, but comes to her senses as she realizes her true mission: (To make anyone and everyone she encounters as happy and feel-goody as possible.) The extent at which she goes to achieve that goal is what makes the story fun, lol.
And I'm ok with people going off the deep end with stories, but they better have a damn good reason or build up for it, for it to be successful IMO.
I definitely agree with the embarrassment. I guess I didn't mention it as it's typically a core character trait of basically 95% of any character I use. And the point of which where the character and the reader lose control of the situation and are both at the mercy of what happens next is another great point. That's why I've started noticing that I enjoy writing more in first person, so that the emotion, thoughts, and feelings are all instantaneous as the story goes. Now, its not a "&&&& X Reader" which gets the reader into the story up front and personal, but first-person POV has it's strengths in that regard. To add more to what I said about "what works," in futa, to me the underlying sense of discomfort being different than most should be embraced in the story. No matter how much assimilation and acceptance the character receives, they are still different. Which is perfectly fine, just don't hide the obvious. And also, it needs to make use of the futa aspect. Going in line with what I said before, you've got to describe it like its there and it's not taking a vacation any time soon. The weight, size, length, amount, presence on the character. It's a reality, so don't skimp on the detail if one wouldn't skimp out on the detail for a BE story.
You're thoughts were helpful and awesome, thank you.
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MisterDisposable In reply to BrowsingChipmunk [2017-01-12 01:55:08 +0000 UTC]
Anytime, man .
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