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I eased my struggle, turning my glare back at Mikey. This time I could make out the arms locked around his chest, pinning him and stopping him from coming at me. I became aware of the tense muscles locked around me in a submission hold as well. Mikey was baring his teeth, his eyes narrowed at me and I felt my anger well up again. It was stopped short when my line of vision was blocked by a blue and white mirage. I turned to glare at it instead, recognizing the stony posture of Usagi. He glared straight back and didn't break eye contact. His eyes were hard and chilling. Somewhere deep inside me I felt my will buckle slightly. Just enough to regain my senses.“Raph What the Hell is going on?!” I heard Leo's voice, realising it was him who was holding me back. Somewhere behind Usagi I heard Donny's voice say something to Mike.
I gave a frustrated snarl and tried to pull free from him again but he had me pinned tight. “Leo Get the hell offa me!!” I snapped.
“Are you out of your mind?!” He yelled, not letting go. “Raphael what in Heaven's name did you think you think you were doing?!”
I felt deeply insulted by this statement, my anger bubbling up all over again. “What am I Doin'?! I Ain't doin' Jack shit!!”
“What do you you call this?!” Leo screamed, letting me go. He sounded angrier than I was. “We come in to see what the noise is and we find you two beating the hell out of each other!! What were you thinking?! Do you honestly think we need to deal with your hot-headed, irrational bullshit right now?!”
“Hey! Fuck you!!” I yelled back as I spun to face him, enraged by the accusation. “Why the hell do you automatically assume it's me?! What kinda sick, mindless psycho do you think I-?!”
I was cut off when I felt a hard blow from behind, knocking me down. I slammed against the ground rather hard before I spun around to face what had hit me. I saw Leo shoot forward and grab hold of Mikey, dragging my struggling brother off of me.
--- From my own fic; Wild Animals
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Ugh. This picture has a lot of issues DX I knew it had a lot of problems even in the pencil sketch phase, but I thought it had enough going for it to finish it up.
As it stands I have mixed feelings about it. I'm aware that the anatomy is very weird in places and the background is terrible XD;; I didn't have a plan. Never a good idea.
And of course, the comfort grip on my stylus is broken so the entire time I was inking and colouring this I was cutting open my hand in the process 8'<
As such, just being in pain the entire time I was drawing makes me hate this picture.
On the other hand I really like how Mikey looks in this picture. It's fun to draw Mike as the Aggressor (FOR ONCE IN HIS LIFE!) and I'm proud of his expression.
All in all, I think this picture suffers from a lack of planing. 8C
*sighs* They can't all be masterpieces I guess.
I tried to put a preview on the picture but it wouldn't let me
Scene from Chapter 22 of my fic. I know it probably looks OOC... but I swear it makes sense when you read the whole thing
at least I hope so.*sighs again* oh well. Moving on
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Holy crap, Girl.
I don't fully know what's going on here, even after reading the passage - but this what I'm talking about.
The best thing about this piece is Mikey (that is Mikey on top, right?). The fierce anger and focus in his awesome - clear as daylight and unmistakeable - he plans to hurt someone and he's past the point of no return. Even with your big, bright shiny eyes you pulled it off. Not bad. I didn't think you had it in you.
Mikey's posture is great too, and the way his headband is moving adds some nice energy to the piece. The composition if full of interesting lines to follow also. The little blood speck shooting out of his mouth is a nice touch too.
The only thing I think could use a little work is Raph (that is Raph right? I'm sure I read it was). Anyway, I'm not really feeling it. His far arm is heading in the right direction, but maybe if it were more over his his head - palm away from him, in a defensive posture, it would have more impact. Maybe his face turned away in a tooth-baring flinch, eyes narrowed?
Well, that's the only suggestion I had. But on the whole, I liked the vitriol of this piece - definitely something I didn't expect from you, and I like it. Given that it's Mikey freaking out and going postal, gave it more points for originality than my standard 2 1/2 for fanart. Great vision too, great technique and a lot of impact. Nice work.
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I sometimes like to keep people in the dark regarding my pictures... what do I mean 'Sometimes' XDDD I lvoe it when people try and come up with their own perceptions on situations! Even if this one is more or less a scene from my fic.
I never doubted I had it in me 
Anyway I'm really glad you like Mikey X3 he's what makes this picture I agree. And I also Agree that Raph is falling flat XDD I struggled with him and reall, wasn't feeling it which translated into the picture. This is very much a "1 character picture" despite their being 2 of them in it. oh well.
I like to throw wild cards now and then, and I'm glad you approve of this one. I like to shake things up a bit and don't enjoy repeating myself too often. (Which is why I do random comics and randomly decide I'm gonna write a fanfiction XD It's all about trying new things!)
Anyway thanks a lot! I'm really glad you approve 8'D
....now to work on those backgrounds DX
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Ooof... Please don't say "approve"... makes me sound so condescending. I didn't come across that way, did I?
Let's just go with it appealed to my love of action and intense situations. They don't necessarily have to always be violent as such.
Silly me, I didn't even mention the background. But that's because, uh... that's how much the action leapt out at me, I didn't even notice. Yeah, that's it.
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XDD;; no not at all! I meant it as thanks 
Violence is boring if it's not tempered properly IMO.
I hope to do a nicer background in my next picture, especially since I want to do a homage picture to the Samurai Jack Backgrounds (I LOVE THAT SHOW!) specifically this one
[link]
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Hmm.... interesting. It's a little flat for my liking - the building at least. The bamboo forest is nice - I like the way it fades into shades of grey in further layers - makes it look dark and misty. It's cool.
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*nods* I'm not gonna do the very graphic flat thing, but I REALLY like the colours and atmosphere in this pic 
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Cool. I look forward to seeing it.
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hope I can pull it off! 
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They serve their purpose. Some times more than other times.
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Now that I've actually read the scene and story in question...this is awesome. Catches all the anguish and emotional toil that Mikey's going through, and yet also the totalness with which he's snapped. Also a great image of how Raph is totally caught off guard, at least with the essence of what's REALLY going on here.
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where can I read the rest of this?????!! please!????
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www.fanfiction.net/s/5349604/1…
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OH IVE READ THIS BEFORE! its truly and amazing story!
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It's a long story
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Then what did made him mad?
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It's part of a fanfic I wrote
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hey, uhh I'm having trouble finiding the other chapters, they are here right?!
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Nope. They're on FF.net
[link]
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[link]
Please let me know what you think
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Oh LOL! I found it on my own and as you know, I LOVED IT! - Dreams.Rewritten
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OH HAI! XDDD Thanks again for the awesomely wonderful review
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LOL, no probleeemmm <3 like I was at the last paragraph and was like "I wanna write more, but I'll drive the author mad!" LOL <3
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XDD haha not at all! You know your review made me re-read my own fic after 3 years and I was surprised I liked my own writing after all this time. Maybe I can stop sucking and try writing like that again
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Oh my gosh! I reallllly hope so! It makes me so happy you got such a boost from it
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Did I link it in the description?
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The twist on Mikey's stomach seems a little odd to me. I mean, they have a hard shell on their back, how can they twist or bent like that???
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I always draw them with some space between their carapace plates to give them some flexibility, although granted, it probably wouldn't give them this much mobility. On the other hand though they're ninjas, they're suppose to be flexible
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You should definetly make more of these!!! Its freakin awesome!!!
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Wow, this is so impressive. I like to see the rampage on Mikey's face. Besides, I feel some pain is proceeding from him.
I like this artwork.
But it's strange that I can't see the second Raph's leg
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Whoa... That part was scary. Poor Mikey! I felt the way you handled the reveal for what was bothering him very, very well. It was shocking enough to warrant the huge build-up you gave it, and totally explained Mikey's behavior. I always love seeing anything with a Not-Goofy!Mikey. He looks so angry here, it's cool. Nice job!
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Thank you very much!
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Hey! Do you know about the Anything but a Goofball contest? [link]
so, far there are only fic entries... but there is still time to submit! (Hint: submit this!!!)
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OMG! How have I not (a) faved this already, or (b) commented?
???
*confused at self*
Just like the fic it belongs to, this picture is fab. I love how emotive Mikey is, and anger and rage are illustrated very well...in a very weird way I enjoy art or stories that depict Mikey being pushed over the edge and losing it.
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XDD thank you very much!
I like stories where Mikey shows a little more of himself too, but it's hard because it needs to be done in balance with his regular personality or it just comes across as OOC or unnecessary angst. I'm not fully convinced I pulled it off myself
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I think you found a good balance. There are so many bad OOC Mikey stories out there...yours (Wild Animals and your Mikey/Leo oneshot I always forget the name of - doh) definitely do *not* fall into that category.
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That's very good to know X'3 I struggled very hard to write Mikey, even in his gloomy phase, to still have a semblance to normal Mikey.
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AHH no! Stop it, Mikey! 
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DOn't worry, I made sure the extract I used doesn't reveal anything about the story, nor does it tell you WHY what's happening is happening or the most important point in this chapter
If I do draw something super spoiler I'll be sure to let my watchers know in the title though I promise
Sorry you find the picture upsetting XD;;
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Wow, this picture is wow
I like it, atleast or well at the end Mikey
shows some emotions and get his real anger out
good picture!!!
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Violence prevails! Darkness rises!
KnightGainax had an excellent turn of phrase in their critique response to Mikey. His sheer emotion is portrayed perfectly here, the rage and hurt in him. It's not just anger; it can't just be anger that makes him turn on his brother, it's a deep sense of personal injury or injustice. His eyes, or the rage within them, are indeed captivating, and emotion of this sort isn't an easily found commodity for most artists.
The movement of the whole picture works well, dynamically infusing it with a true sense of suddenness and sporadic, well, violence. Grim but not desaturated colour palettes, and a slightly surreal background in my opinion that works to focus the frame in on the action. The small issues that could be tweaked, or matters of personal preference such as KnightGainax's remark on the positioning of Raphael's arm, I think are very heavily negated by the otherwise wonderful work of this picture.
Um... Wom-wom.wom.
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