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Published: 2012-08-16 21:19:50 +0000 UTC; Views: 9397; Favourites: 565; Downloads: 73
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There is a heart in a ribcageAnd a brain sitting in a skull
There is a history that is void
And potential which is null
Just puddles of inspiration
Where the vast ocean once sprayed
An endless tide of moonshine
Swelled upon my parchment page
There's a brain sitting in a skull
There is a heart in a ribcage
There is ink in my fountain pen
But still no words on my page
Just embers of inspiration
Where a great fire once roared
I'll stoke it with those memories
I've been afraid of and ignored
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And thanks for watching me too!
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Aww no thanks needed!
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Wow... I cannot tell you how many times I've felt that way!!! This one gets a fav, for sure!
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Of course. Only you could turn out a stunning poem about writer's block... while having writer's block. 
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thanks for the comment
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No problem. Glad the writing worked.
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its funny cause i wrote a bit of a it a while ago. Then i couldnt write anything so i tried to finish it off. Theni did finish it off and i feel like i might have a few more poems in me until i retire lol
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huh well it turned out uuuuuuuuhMAZING!!! well lol you got plenty of time before you retire so get typing
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yyaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaayyyyyy ! thankkkkkkkkkk youuuuuuuuuuu !!
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I've been having writers block for the past year! And this my friend is amazing! Its so simple but still meaningful.
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When I have a writers block, I just kill someone and move on
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its one solution i suppose 
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very nice.... i've been on a writers block for a while i just can't come up with a story to go with any beginings....
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its horrible isnt it. And the more you try the worse it seems to get. Its funny how writing this has sort of got me out of mine.
thanks for reading and commenting
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yea it takes time to really get going.
welcome!
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thanks for reading and commenting
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The poem holds some nice idea-play and articulation of its thematic concept. A small point on general mechanics (and I might be mistaken), though. It seems to me that the poem is reaching for consistent meter and cadence, but is just missing out on catching hold of them, creating an effect where the inner ear is drawn toward finding and listening for rhythm and then is repeatedly left a little frustrated. It's a close thing, though; close on the cusp, nearly there, if that's what you were trying for. So, you have my encouragement; keep working at it.
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This is awesome, I remember writing a poem about this
Not as good at this
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i bet it was
thanks for the comment
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thank again for comment and fave
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Ack. This is me to a tee. For the last couple of days, actually
As such I really like the way you describe this feeling. I usually hear it being described as frustrating, which it is, but you capture how downright depressing it is. It makes you feel as empty as your page...
In short I love this poem. It's so inspiring! It's making me want to try to write some more, and I can't thank you enough for that ;w;
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thanks so much for a lovely comment and hope you find inspiration soon if you havent already
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it happens to me all the time - even when emotions and words fill my head in my moments of contemplation, I cannot get them on the page in any pleasing way 
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yeah, and I dont know if its just me but the more I write the higher my standards become and the less satisfied I am with what i write lol
I so often upload poems and then delete straight away because I'm not happy. And i still get nervous uploading now which is silly really because people are always so lovely
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Ever as we climb higher on the hill, we gain perspective on how low we truly remain and how much higher up the true peaks are than we ever realized from below. It's an odd conundrum; the feeling of slipping back even as one trudges forward, and yet it tantalizes, too, offering up a better view of the heights above that yet wait to be soared. It can be wearying, yes, but, with the right frame of mind, it can also lure and propel us on.
P.S. Hmm. Something odd happened when I submitted this. Hopefully it doesn't become a double post.
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i received two comments from you and i appreciate both very much.
Its great to have constructive criticism to look back on like this as i am quite new to poetry. I have never studied it and rarely read it.
thanks again for taking time to do that
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"But still no words on my page" either TuT
lovely poem!
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I love this! The comparisons of the 2nd and 4th stanza especially. The first stanza is simple and matter-of-fact, encouraging your readers to continue deeper into the poem. Something about the 3rd stanza feels off. Maybe because the second line starts with the word "there" again instead of following the pattern of the first stanza and starting with "And". Also, the word "my" in the third line of the third stanza seems too personal after describing your heart and and brain as just A brain and A heart. In contrast, I think declaring ownership by using the word "my" really works when describing your parchment and page, because these are blank, representing YOUR writer's block.
The last stanza is by far my favorite, for you convey the solution to any writer's block with such beautiful clarity. "I'll stoke it with those memories I've been afraid of and ignored," You speak of the personal sacrifice every great writer must take in order to instill life in their work. Well done!
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such a great comment and very helpful, thank you
i really appreciate the constructive criticism
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What I do is write down a name, and invent the character it belongs to. It doesn't always get me writing, but it makes me feel more creative.
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thats a really good idea
thanks for reading this and commenting
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That's very accurate. I get it all the time, which is very annoying.
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i hope you feel inspired equally as much as you get writers block
thanks for the comment
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Oh, I know this feeling. Writers block has just struck me, and it always makes me feel hollow, and it's always after I begin to write in gusto. It sucks, but I always seem to write poems to fill the void inbetween legit writing speels. This poem is fantastic, and describes it perfectly.
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yeah i think some people find it best just to stop and wait others like to just keep writing until something good comes
thanks for the comment
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