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ctrl-4lt-d3l — The Wave
Published: 2010-05-10 01:20:44 +0000 UTC; Views: 478; Favourites: 3; Downloads: 4
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Description A wave
In and out
With the moon

A pattern
That changes, repeats
Every month
Every year

It hurtles onward
Headlong, focused, uncaring
Then,
Afraid of it's deed,
Rushes back

A never ending cycle
For eternity

A musicians dream
Eternal rhythm

Like the hearts
That beat
Above and below
The waves' eternal surfaces

Natural, soothing
Ferocious yet calm

A wave
In and out
With the moon
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Comments: 14

schmelen [2012-01-19 22:57:35 +0000 UTC]

even though it has grammar mistakes?

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LITTLESHAVER [2010-08-07 13:54:26 +0000 UTC]

Forget sixth grade. This works and should not be judged by when you did it, positive or negative. Because it is that good!

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ctrl-4lt-d3l In reply to LITTLESHAVER [2010-08-13 00:10:41 +0000 UTC]

Thanks!

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meganbednarz [2010-06-07 22:41:16 +0000 UTC]

This is pretty good for 6th grade I like the repetition at the end. Interesting characterization of the waves.

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ctrl-4lt-d3l In reply to meganbednarz [2010-06-07 22:42:43 +0000 UTC]

Thanks!

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meganbednarz In reply to ctrl-4lt-d3l [2010-06-07 22:48:39 +0000 UTC]

Actually it's good not just for a 6th grade work, but for poetry in general. This might be one of my favorite of your poems. I wrote a poem that I really like a long time ago too... but it was in High School.

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ctrl-4lt-d3l In reply to meganbednarz [2010-06-07 22:49:42 +0000 UTC]

Really? Huh.

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Wrennars [2010-05-18 07:33:35 +0000 UTC]

This one has a nice rhythm to it, nicely done!

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ctrl-4lt-d3l In reply to Wrennars [2010-05-18 21:53:34 +0000 UTC]

Thank you!

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Wrennars In reply to ctrl-4lt-d3l [2010-05-21 06:21:16 +0000 UTC]

You're welcome!

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Kajm [2010-05-10 09:31:11 +0000 UTC]

Nicely Physicsal

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ctrl-4lt-d3l In reply to Kajm [2010-05-10 20:59:10 +0000 UTC]

Thanks!

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seyrii [2010-05-10 02:16:04 +0000 UTC]

Really good for 6th grade.

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ctrl-4lt-d3l In reply to seyrii [2010-05-10 20:59:14 +0000 UTC]

I guess.

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