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Published: 2005-05-26 09:59:11 +0000 UTC; Views: 376; Favourites: 5; Downloads: 32
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IgnoranceI see your actions and stand in disbelief
of all the things that society has failed to achieve.
You act like what you don't know can’t hurt you,
but I can see the fear in their eyes,
Hiding under a veil of toughness,
a cloak of supremacy as a disguise.
I see your actions and stand in disbelief
of all the things our nation is yet to achieve.
People speak about the steps forward
and say that we have come so far,
but tolerance in this country has never
been common enough to be considered a lost art.
I see all your actions and stand in disbelief
of all the concepts your mind is yet to achieve.
Yes, society can take some blame
But there are personal responsibilities as well,
And if you don’t fulfill them
This world may remain a living hell.
I will see you as you act,
but I won’t merely stare in disbelief,
because sooner or later the line
will be drawn between you and me.
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Very nice! I like the structure of it, alternating betweeen strict and lax. The last line especially is very resonating.
All in all, great poem!
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Interesting message, I like how this relates in general to society both as a whole and as individual people. I especially liked
"Yes, society can take some blame
But there are personal responsibilities as well,
And if you don’t fulfill them
This world may remain a living hell."
Good job
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Awesome 
A lot of my poetry comes to me at night near sleep. Heck, I wrote Dessert while I had a crazy fever and all I could eat was fudgsicles because my throat was so sore and I could barely stand without feeling a headrush. Wow. What a long sentence. *ahem* Anyways, inspiration comes when the mind shuts down. One by one thoughts disperse until one random thought lingers. You concentrate, grasping your last connection to reality and are compelled to keep it, to fasten it in place with words of nails.
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this is very true... many of my poems come from such late-night thoughts...
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Very good concept a hard one to actually write about in todays sociaty but very well written i must say
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It's an interesting poem, it doesn't seem to have a steady rhythm to it tho 
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This is absolutly awesome! I love it. It really grabs you!! I have one titled 'Ignorance' also. It's nothing like yours
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I really like this and the concept behind it. I also like how you repeated that one line a few times. I like to do that w/ my poetry sometimes as well. Repetition like that helps the flow and getting the idea into someone's head. Nice job w/ this.
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Mmm... it's very to the point and frankly put. No wishy-washy symbolic imagery. I like the repitition of
I see your actions and stand in disbelief
of all the things that society has failed to achieve.
with little variations every time you put it. Good rhyme scheme as well. The poem's in fixed, but the rhythm is very natural, almost conversational, which goes well with the opinionated tone of the poem. Simply but effectively written. I enjoyed it because it actually made me think. Thanks.
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Ignorance is a driving force in our society. Ignorance of beliefs, ignorance of truths etc... Even looking at the sciences... all we see is an admitance of ignorance... take quantum physics for instance. It makes no sense. We can not explain why certain tendancies occur, they just do, and we just accept that as a fundamental law when objects get objectively small. "Why?" has been a question we have asked for centuries, but rarely have the gusto to answer. Most of the time, it is easier to claim ignorance. If this was the driving point of the poem, then I liked it very much. I couldn't help but feel that there were political undertones in this piece though, and there, I am not quite sure I appreicated that. I am pretty much universally known in my circle of friends as the local conservative bastard and I can't really blame them. Regardless of party though, ignorance exists... the solutions the right and the left have proposed to world problems are born of ignorance of the true problem and the need for individual responcability and involvement in a solution. I would agree with the poem to that extent, but still, I am no fan of politically motivated poetry (although I may indeed be guilty of writing some myself). Overall I very much enjoyed the piece. It got better as it went along, and at the end, has a powerful statement.
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actually i like this the facelesness of the opponent as well as what could almost be described as intimacy with them seems to run through the piece!
i also agree with what this is trying to say...this world is going to the dogs!
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Nice,
i like the way it's simple yet complexed- it's an extremely different approach to a poem! So open and unsymbolic yet riddled WITH symbols! haha! if that even makes sense!
Really good, to the point!
Keep it up Ian.
xoxox thalz
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no worries!~ Keep it GOING STRONG Poodge
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I love it, very different from the normal cmplaining/'dark' (which gets annoying) poetry. =3 Its refreshing.
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I like how it's so bluntly written. It's a very different style to me, I'm not used to it, but from this, I think I like it. ^^
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solid poem. I usually always agree with your viewpoints on the country...so it all works for me.
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Very...matter-of-fact, but still poetic. Wonderful combination.
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this is really good, i love your opiniated stuff. I think that the best poems can often come to you early in the morning, its the same with me. When the words are fresh
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Its a great concept and I do commend you for writing on it. Its a good poem and very well worded. In my humble opinion though I feel it could flow better. But it is a work in progress and I cant wait to see the finished product.
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This is interesting.
In the name of progress! why not.
My favorite lines have to be
"but tolerance in this country has never been
common enough to be considered a lost art."
*chuckles* an interesting point, well written.
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This is a very strong opinion... I commend you for that...
And yes, society is to blame
But there are personal responsibilities as well
That's such a tough thing to say... nobody wants to hear that...
I will see you as you act,
but I won’t merely stare in disbelief,
because sooner or later the line
will be drawn between you and me.
This is such a great ending... one question... who draws the line???
Very weighty issue you're speaking of here... I like your choice of words...
Nicely done...
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thanks for the comment. glad you could see the point that i was trying to get across. i didn't really think about saying who would draw the line, but i wanted to give the sense that me (or the representation of those who are sick of ignorace) would be the one drawing the line. maybe i need to make that a little more clear. thanks again for the feedback, as i said in the description, it may be a work in progress so i appreciate your views...
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