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I no longer know who I am.I decorate my shell as the mirage I suspect you yearn to swim in, entranced with
the quench of feminine attention, unconcerned with the slug inside.
I can’t share what I don’t have.
So yes, drinks, dinner, or just your time,
Stare into my eyes, gawk at my body but please…….don’t look at me.
I turn to dust in silence.
I’m an open book, in a language you’ll never comprehend…..a public statue whose reference you don’t recognize yet use as a landmark of your experience.
Feel the braille on my lips.
So leave me here, in your fantasy, in your dream, in your darkness……its where I feel the safest anyway......
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its truly one of my most personal and best written works
thanks for reading it 
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thank you - really. its one of the most personal things i've ever written.
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A lovely expression of the feelings of worthlessness and insecurity women, and men feel about attempted romantic impressions.
Truly a beautiful piece.
I applaud you.
-Miranda
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Mary- I'm glad I got to read this. This is very powerful and I understand why you don't post a lot of your writing. If you did, I think you'd have my crying/breaking down emotionally a lot more than I do. Your work is in essence....powerful. There is no other way I can think of describing it.
The line "the quench of feminine attention, unconcerned with the slug inside." is very poetic. I have never seen the word slug used so perfectly....
Thanks
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thank you so much! 
i think my photography is my happy face and my writing usually my angry or sad side.
you are a doll to support me so and take the time to really share my stuff with me.
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You are very welcome. You deserve all the credit. I'm not a good expressive photographer, or drawer so I guess all my emotion comes through poetry and writing. I'm not good at anything else. Although I really do have happy times, it is hard to convey them onto paper. I guess b/c I don't want to let those go--and putting the sad/bad times away, (on to paper)
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oh darling, I adore this! I adore this so much!
Feel the braille on my lips. <- beautiful imagery !!
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thank you so much - its some heavy imagery but its really on the money - i was feeling sad!!!!! 
thanks so much for taking the time to read and encourage me.
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the Image is fantastic! and so ins the poem it is emotional..deep full of perpective!
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thank you! that image is a blurred portrait of me wrapped in saran wrap 
i write first and photography second in life but on DA mainly photography - you ran across one of my few poems on here and writing - so thank you for the encouragement!
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This is beautiful. The idea of letting someone be with you and near you as long as they don't look to close? It's funny actually, that's why I broke up with my last boyfriend. He came too close to seeing to many things that I didn't want anyone to see, and so I ran away from him
This was insightful. You are an artist of a true talent, and a human with a rare gift of sharing.
IS x
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well you totally deserved it. *hugs back*
IS x
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ack, didn't mean to do that. that was a great poem/photo combination, very expressive as always. i wouldn't expect any less from you.
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Nice pose! I like the red and orange! It gives it a glowing efffect!
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Sadly, I don't know much about poetry (have to work on that).
Just hope you don't really feel like you've written in this poet; get that spooks out of your head and just look at yourself the way you are: a beautifull and unique YOU! Not everybody has got to like you (thats impossible anyway), as long as you like yourself and do no harm to others. That's just it.
This was a DTF? Congrats!
Beautifull lines :
I’m an open book, in a language you’ll never comprehend…..
and the braille
One more thing:
a public statue whose reference you don’t recognize yet use as a landmark of your experience.
as this line means what I think it means; not every man is like that; there are people out there that are really willing to try to understand. Don't give up till you've found one; you deserve nothing less.
Stefan
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First of all I have to say that something in the poem touches me, but since I have only read it I can't really say what it is now. I'll come back and do that later. Also a lot of the things I now would have said, have already been mentioned by other people. Reminds me also of a poem I haven't published yet, which has a line similar to one of yours. Well it wouldn't make any sence to put the line down unless I wrote down all of the poem and I do not feel ready to do so now.
Keep on writing.
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Excellent work here Mary
Love the poem and the artwork
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"Feel the braille on my lips"
I close my eyes and all I see is you incredible creativity.
I close my eyes and all I see is you.
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Wow, Mary !
I can relate !!!!! Can't offer more comment than that...
g
"To want to be.... but having fear of just being me...."
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It's so sad.....seems so empty....lost of your vibrance and life....Yet so deep.....I almost feel as though I'm holding your soul, your essence in my hands....watching as it slips away....not able to catch it....I don't know what to think really....beautiful words touching ones on heart....I almost want to cry for you, but I'm not saure if you's accept that...*Hugs tight* Thank you for sharing this with us....and maybe, just maybe I can do something to fill the void? *Hugs tight*
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You go girl. Yes, most men endure those illusions because most are pigs. I dont by any means stereotype....but the majority of my guy friends, that is all they care about; "sex, pussy, and hot girls." Myself on the other hand, am different. I like a good girl....one with morals and values. A woman who is goofy and is herself and doesnt need to dress up all the time --- one who doesnt give a damn. And me.....I'm laid back, do not drink but still can have fun, and i dont lust or fantasize over woman. I have been dedicated to one girl my whole life basically because I love her and she is different than any other girl I've met, and I dont believe in sleeping around all the damn time and bein a slut (guys can be sluts too)
In conclusion, this speaks the truth and 'tis a very well done job again Mary
Much love, Jason
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I see contemplation here. And emotion and realization.
I like the way the words flow and sound, though I'm never comfortable with elipses (...). I think there is substance here and the fact that there isn't multilayered metaphor doesn't make it any less thoughtful.
As I read it again (and again) I like it more & more. The braille line is kicking my ass in the best way (I love it).
Lovely words.
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I love it. Stirs up so many feelings and thoughts that I really am at a loss of words.
Keep up the good work.
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wow...you're an amazing poet! and I love the picture you paired it with, it's very fitting.
Keep on writing girl, ya got great talent!
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Very truthful, sexy and enjoyable prose you've created there!
Kaujot got a good deal of insight into this poem, and I like his points.
The first line is the strongest; 'I no longer know who I am'
You are who you first wake up to be, no makeup, messy hair, bad breath and a foggy mind.
The rest, besides a clear head could be considered an illusion, is this not true of both men and women?
In women it is most easily discerned, being that most men's expectations are physical.
But this illusion is a big part of a mans life also, his job, his manliness is all an elaborate ruse.
But hey, peacocks get a lot from illusion, we need our elaborate plumages also.
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What a wonderful emotional journey your words took me on! Splendid writing ((forgive the lack of depth in my comment- I always find it hard to express how poetry makes me feel))
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i love the ""please dont look at me"" line... very... touching... i feel like that sometimes... congrats for the DTF!
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*Johnny Depp from Don Juan Demarco*
"When I say that all my woman are dazzling beauties, they object. The nose of this one is too large; the hips of another, they are too wide; perhaps the breasts of a third, they are too small. But I see these women for how they truly are...glorious, radiant, spectacular, and perfect...because I am not limited by my eyesight.
Women react to me in the way they do, Don Octavio, because they sense that I search out the beauty that lies within until it overwhelms everything else."
This poem made me think of this scene in this movie cos' most males are limited ONLY by eyesight...and do not truly understand the inner beauty of a woman...ANY woman....As for me...I get to know the inner really well....and the outer shines with the beauty of the inner....whatever it may LOOK like....I would be nice if EVERY man was as "Blind" as me...if you get what i mean by "Blind".....
Anyway...I love this poem too....you write so beautifully....It's quite amazing to read....and i think men reading this should take notice....maybe it would change relationships forever....
Then again i'm a cheesy old fashioned romantic so maybe there's no place for me in this world anymore....I'm happy and that's all that matters....
Hope you are too....and if this is TRULY how you feel i hope YOUR man (husband) takes notes....
Your Friend...
~M~
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gahh, I suppose I was vauge.
what I meant by "it's pretty, but, what else?" is that your poem reads nicely, but, is there anything else to it? Any meaning deeper than face-value here is so deeply shrouded it can't be reasonably reached. It's a phrase I say on a lot of people's poetry.
And now that I think about it, yes, this poem does read like prose. Might want to work on that, too.
Sorry for the ambiguity, critique after critique, I start getting lazy.
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this is great! i love the second stanza especially "unconcerned with the slug inside" that is so completely and amazingly original and such an awesome image ... great job
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This has magnificent flow, it keeps the reader involved. It also had wonderful imagery. I definitly know how that feels. Keep up the wonderful work.
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LOVE the deviation is more like it. The emotion is pure, its tactable, its amazing writing. I think its fantastic. And I know how that feels, a bit. Great work.
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I liked this alot... only thing is, it seems more like a prose to me. Anyways... very nice!
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i loved the emotion, softness, truthfulness you could FEEL from reading it. but it isn't exactly poem-like to me. I got a prose-ish feel from it. But that's irrelevant, it's very beautiful.
-brita-
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your face glitters, but the coat is thin.
it's pretty, but, what else?
it lacks subtance
what it lacks it makes up in pretention.
I'll admit that I'm here solely because of its current DTF status, but this poem isn't getting any negative feedback, and I think it's healthy to get some amongst so much popularity.
I don't lie, I'm just a little too honest sometimes. Blame my lack of tact on my tiredness. For that much I apoologize.
Don't think anything of the somewhat like deviation, I rarely give better. For that too I apologize.
Just here serving whatever feedback you haven't had yet.
Wouldn't be much use having broken record after broken record as your sole critiques.
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This is emazing! The pic fitted absolutely perfect. It is an instant fav, no doubt.
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wow, some nice stuff here, you should work on more poetry, you seem to have a nice talent for it. you true artist you, your just so great!!!!
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