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Published: 2009-05-26 07:13:26 +0000 UTC; Views: 790; Favourites: 34; Downloads: 6
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Description There is a note for me playing hide-and-go-seek
in between the wall and the hotel bed,
but the author is done playing
and driving home

because continuing after losing is too hard,
people are still breathing and posing for photographers,
popping balloons, asking for names or numbers
and living, and sometimes life would be

so much easier if they didn’t,
if the world stopped the way a clock
doesn’t tick after it’s dropped off a balcony,
lying there as a small jumble of twisted metal and wooden splinters,
a cracked face with fingerless hands

and all blessedly, gloriously still.
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Comments: 14

FollowMeBackHome [2009-05-28 17:42:14 +0000 UTC]

i wanted to copy and paste my favorite part
but realized that i'd be pasting all the poem.
this is so beautiful. so truthful. so alive.

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EasyConfessions [2009-05-27 10:29:58 +0000 UTC]

Heart breaking, too truthful. Beautiful, really.

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Stellaciel [2009-05-27 06:25:37 +0000 UTC]

For some reason, the first stanza makes me feel the way I felt reading "The Love Song of J. Alfred Prufrock." Not sure why.

The last line, especially after all the destruction, is beautiful (if this were a painting, it'd be breathtaking), and the details of the second stanza are perfect images, not overpowering or overstated, just what they need to be.

I'm not sure how many times I've read this poem now, trying to find the words to explain. In any case, it's miserably beautiful

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Eefera [2009-05-27 05:15:23 +0000 UTC]

This is so, so good. Fabulous write.

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GetYourGrip [2009-05-27 02:58:21 +0000 UTC]

so sad.
not even in the likable way.
in a miserable way, actually.
but i give you credit, for
making me feel like i do when
i'm trying to sleep at night.

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Waltz-With-Me [2009-05-27 02:46:48 +0000 UTC]

I really really loved this. I think you had a lot to say and it was said! A real accomplishment.

My favorite thing about it would have to be the description of the broken clock in contrast to everything gloriously still. It was breathtaking.

I, too, was led here by ~ohsostarryeyed 's journal.

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cleveland49 [2009-05-27 02:05:33 +0000 UTC]

I think you should thank ohsostarryeyed for linking me to this!

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p0laroids [2009-05-27 00:25:29 +0000 UTC]

oh my gosh, this is practically perfect in every way possible.

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fierypoplartree [2009-05-27 00:09:15 +0000 UTC]

because continuing after losing is too hard,
people are still breathing and posing for photographers,
popping balloons, asking for names or numbers
and living, and sometimes life would be

so much easier if they didn’t,

=

it's amazing. really, really beautiful.

[~ohsostarryeyed 's journal led me here. <3]

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poisonxmuffin [2009-05-26 22:41:28 +0000 UTC]

this is beautiful.

thank ~ohsostarryeyed for leading me to this in her journal.

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daisychainss [2009-05-26 22:24:26 +0000 UTC]

i come by way of ohsostarryeyed, and she's right. this is astounding. i the second stanza <3

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Suspithra [2009-05-26 22:00:21 +0000 UTC]

"because continuing after losing is too hard"
Yeah..I'm gonna cry now.
Beautiful and thank you and all that.
Hugs, Sofie.

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Suspithra In reply to Suspithra [2009-06-06 11:52:18 +0000 UTC]

oh yeah. I came here by ~ohsostarryeyed's journal too.

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ohsostarryeyed [2009-05-26 21:19:44 +0000 UTC]

holy SHIT, my dear, this was astounding.
i am directing as many people as will read my journals to here, so that they may love it as much as i do.

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