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Published: 2009-05-10 06:47:37 +0000 UTC; Views: 603; Favourites: 0; Downloads: 1
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Description The moat has overflowed,
the unadorned castle built lopsided and
carved out and
Thank God no one has to live in it

except the flies and sand crabs,
the occasional ladybugs who enjoy
vacationing in sand castles,

and I say, “even if it is

malformed and crumbling,
at least you can tell what it is
(and someone’s enjoying it).”

you ask me if
we’re still talking about sandcastles.


later I went back
(because castles without people are too lonely)
and filled in the courtyard,
made an etched hump and each tower
into a flipper,
a round head, triangular tail,

and I pressed two ripped apart mussel shells
into the turtle’s face.
so it could see.
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Comments: 9

artifice-child [2010-03-19 08:18:12 +0000 UTC]

forgot how amazing this piece is.

-re-faves-

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sayDahlia [2009-05-11 06:05:06 +0000 UTC]

"and I pressed two ripped apart mussel shells
into the turtle’s face.
so it could see."

this is wonderful.

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dustyreader In reply to sayDahlia [2009-05-13 06:26:32 +0000 UTC]

Thank you!

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sayDahlia In reply to dustyreader [2009-05-13 06:29:07 +0000 UTC]

Awes, no problem.

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staticwind [2009-05-10 23:09:39 +0000 UTC]

Wow! This has great imagery and a nice flow to it.

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dustyreader In reply to staticwind [2009-05-13 06:30:47 +0000 UTC]

Thanks!

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staticwind In reply to dustyreader [2009-05-14 03:38:14 +0000 UTC]

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ZenithHalcyon [2009-05-10 06:58:00 +0000 UTC]

"you ask me if we're still talking about sandcastles"

EXCELLENT line.

Faving this.

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dustyreader In reply to ZenithHalcyon [2009-05-13 06:32:01 +0000 UTC]

Thank you so much, and thanks for the !

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