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dustyreader — What I Have
Published: 2008-11-11 05:37:18 +0000 UTC; Views: 104; Favourites: 1; Downloads: 3
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Description I have a collection of things
That don’t work.

I have a bell that doesn’t ring
(but it’s pretty to look at)
And a necklace made of keys
That don’t unlock doors or chests or hearts
Rings that won’t slide off fingers
And half-formed fledgling thoughts
That never make it to my mouth.

So I shouldn’t be surprised that when
You asked me to go on a date
I said yes.
Because you were the one asking.

And I have a joker’s mask
That’s too small to wear.
And I have an idol of a god
That no one worships anymore.
Because they stopped believing.

And I never told you but
I hate losing those things.
Except when I taught you that tear
Is spelled the same way whether
You’re crying or being pulled away from someone.

(Just so you know:
The keys are carved
With the words “journey” and “new beginnings”).
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Comments: 7

ZenithHalcyon [2009-02-25 04:04:44 +0000 UTC]

Ohhh...lovely.

That's so similar to something that happened to me.

You have some nice metaphoric one-liners in there melded in with the basic to-the-point "action" sections...it's a good blend.

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dustyreader In reply to ZenithHalcyon [2009-03-12 06:08:10 +0000 UTC]

Thank you very much!

Sorry to hear that it happened to you though, it's not exactly the happiest experience.

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Noite-Bela [2008-11-20 03:48:20 +0000 UTC]

I really loved this--especially the line with keys, I liked how it sort of tied things together.
Very beautifully written.

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dustyreader In reply to Noite-Bela [2008-11-20 04:00:08 +0000 UTC]

Thank you very much!

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Noite-Bela In reply to dustyreader [2008-11-20 04:57:43 +0000 UTC]

you're welcome

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aa-Moss [2008-11-12 04:33:35 +0000 UTC]

extreeeemely well-written. i don't really know what to say. there are a lot of glorious lines in this one.

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dustyreader In reply to aa-Moss [2008-11-12 06:20:15 +0000 UTC]

Thank you!
You're very kind.

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