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emonightwalker — Oceans
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Published: 2010-04-20 22:27:38 +0000 UTC; Views: 350; Favourites: 10; Downloads: 2
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I've been swimming for a few daysAnd the skies above me couldn't look more gray
The dark blue waters have never looked black
and i know, if i quit this buoyancy, i wont come back
The sea weeds, so beautiful, green, choke till I see Night
They constrict my thoughts, my lungs, pointless it was to fight
the coral reef invites to embrace a hug
under the soft sand i feel snug
Sea shells decorate where I lay
Hints of purple, green, yellow, blue, on display
I am an alien to them, in there sea
but they let me sleep, let me be
As i wake up, i stand on the shore
i dive back to feel for more
But i let foam pull my pain away
I taste the salt, on my lips, telling the world
I'm Here To Stay.
Comments: 8
aww, thank you, im VERY proud of this poem! thank you again.
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I agree, this piece tends to give off a sense of serenity even if it is a heavy subject. Nicely constructed.
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Aww, thank you guys, i had a good feeling about this poem! Thank you for the support!
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I like the colors and the word usage. Some end rhymes (i may be bias against rhyming lol because i'm lazy) seemed forced tho. I actually feel really peaceful when I read this, because you reminded me of the ocean. Thanks
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its been a while sence you wrote that, but i want to say, thank you!
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