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Published: 2007-01-05 15:02:02 +0000 UTC; Views: 11671; Favourites: 25; Downloads: 52
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My leg hurts, and it's not even the leg that I smashed on the hard wood floor this morning, while jumping out of bed to stop you from leaving. Maybe this is my memoir of you, my last hurtful memory to think of you by. They always did say that love hurts.Behind my pretty smile, there's a thick film coating my teeth; and I can't help but run my tongue over it to see if it tastes like you. I’m not sure if it does or not, ‘cause my taste buds become extinct after I open a bottle of tequila, and half of it is gone. Slurred words and teary eyed expressions are all that is left of me.
And I'm sure that you think it’s not your fault. It's never your fault. Nothings ever your fault.
But when I could feel my heart beating inside my stomach, and my tongue became hot and bitter as my temples were pulsating; I clenched my teeth and thought of you.
You: the one whose name had been written on my heart with a number two pencil. Everyone knows that pencil markings fade away through time. Just like our love.
But that's ok.. 1 hour and 45 minutes ago I had to crawl across my living room floor because my heart broke into 317 minuscule pieces. I picked up as many pieces as possible and glued them back together with my hot glue gun, but not every piece was found; so I guess my heart will never be complete again.
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Holy crap thats so good! You should post some more stuff on here!
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i used to have quite a bit posted on here. sadly, i don't write anymore.
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It's full of so much emotion! I almost cried. Well done! 
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I liked your poem.
If you experience this in your life.......... I'm really sorry I know how it feels.
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the pain goes away though. that is one good thing about heartache!
thank you!
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This completely floored me.
I adore it.
And yeah, fuck love with a large spiky pole.
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thank you, thank you
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couldn't agree with ya more.
<3
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I wrote a poem once and mentioned the film crap that covers your teeth... ick... I also like the reference to the number 2 pencil... nice.
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i'd love to read it.
and thank you baby
<3
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you know,youre so good at expressing emotions trough text that it almost scares me. while reading it felt odd because i found myself thinking "..thats exactly how it went" remembering ive been trough something so alike to that myself but i could never express it by words.
i like how bitter and yet kind of careless the text is, just like when realizing that something really has got to its end and theres nothing you can do to change that.
very expressive, im sorry i cannot give constructive critique what could be better because i thought it was just more than fine as it is.
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i love this comment. if i could +fav a comment, i would do that with yours.
thank you so much darlin'
xxo
<3 kandice
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"They always did say that love hurts."
Nice idea with the whole hurt leg thing, but this line is reallyyyyy clicheeeeeeee.
As is a lot of your last paragraph.
but
Behind my pretty smile, there's a thick film coating my teeth; and I can't help but run my tongue over it to see if it tastes like you. I’m not sure if it does or not, ‘cause my taste buds become extinct after I open a bottle of tequila, and half of it is gone. Slurred words and teary eyed expressions are all that is left of me.
I Love this whole thing here ^
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Hahaha.
I've been waiting for a comment like this to come around. When I had first submitted it, I recieved one or two.. but I figured a lot more would come in!
Anyways, this is how I see it.
Love itself is a very cliche thing. I can't think of one thing someone can write about love that hasn't been written over and over. This is actually a few pieces I wrote and couldn't finish, that I threw together and tried to piece it together properly.
When I said "They always did say that love hurts" I meant it in that cliche way. I didn't mean it as the actual phrase. But referring to those people who say love hurts [like all the songs and all the emo poetry .. etc etc]
And as for most of the last paragraph being cliche, I really dont feel that it is. When I first wrote that piece a few years ago I felt very clever because of the things I used in it to differentiate it from average "fuck love!" type pieces.
I really appreciate your thoughts and views. It's so great to get an honest comment from someone! I love these comments so much more than any other average comment I get!!!
So Thank You! I'm definitely going to go check out your stuff right now.
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thanks, i'm glad you can take critique because it's hard to come by ppl who can do that without getting offended. As for my stuff, have at it!! lol
<333Arielle
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wow, this is beautiful 
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thanks so much for your comment
<3
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I like the story you have there..it's really interesting...
I like it so much that it deserves *fave*
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english translation please? ha
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"And I'm sure that you think it’s not your fault. It's never your fault. Nothings ever your fault."
I like your brutal honesty, it's not a perfect piece but that adds to it, it even enhances the emotions of the piece.
Broken
This is really good
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Thank you so much for your comment/thoughts!
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Great picture, love the expression and I really enjoyed the prose as well
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thanks for the comment
<33
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Oh yes! I enjoyed it ever as much as when I read it for the first time!
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thank you, thank you darlin.
<3
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The descriptions are so vivid; I feel like I was there.
The first sentance is a little wordy. I can hear her voice, and I understand that she isn't nessesarly speaking clearly. Still I think there is a way to reword the sentace a little and still get the character's state of mind across.
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Thank You so much!
I'll try to figure a better way to word that, I can definitely see what you mean.
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Does the sequel involve a chainsaw and revenge? ^_^
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it should, it should.
care to write that for me? haha.
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I'm not as good a writer as you are, I might have to pass on that ^_^
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i wish i was a good writer, love.
but hey, practice makes perfect.
<333
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"1 hour and 45 minutes ago I had to crawl across my living room floor because my heart broke into 317 minuscule pieces. I picked up as many pieces as possible and glued them back together with my hot glue gun, but not every piece was found; so I guess my heart will never be complete again."
That is a fabulous line. Er, well, two lines, I guess.
I love this piece. It's short and bittersweet. You didn't over-work the topic, like I probably would have, but you gave us just a snapshot, and just a little moment in time.
Great job. 
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Thank you so much!
What's really funny about this piece, is it's three different very short pieces I started writing, and threw together. haha.
But thank you SO much.
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You're very welcome. ^-^
And I think I see what you're talking about, it being three seperate pieces. Now that you mention it, I think I can see where it was split up. But it's still fantastic. ^-^
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*this* one is also one of my all time favorites which i wanted to ask you to upload again. i loved it when you first submit it and i still do. great piece of writing
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thank you, thank you, thank you!!!!!!
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Reaches into chest, tears off about 20
Nice writing, I can understand why you like it so much.
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you're adorable.
thank you so much.
<3
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