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evilrulerofpeanuts — paper thin hymn
Published: 2010-09-23 08:17:20 +0000 UTC; Views: 429; Favourites: 14; Downloads: 10
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Description nights like these where
i don't sleep i think of
you and the way your
fingers used to curl around
my spine before the bones broke
and the birds carried them to the
corners of the earth

she's singing, an
entire language made of
heavy breathing; nuances of the
common dialect
you had forgotten
before you ever learned to speak.
things better left unsaid yet
butchered by words.

here, i deteriorate.

the bullet in your
insides is made of ice, but the doctors
found the shards lodged
in your vital organs and
shook their heads in dismay;
you are broken, without
doubt,
but there is no way to fix you.
even shattered you will
never be broken enough

mirrors have become
undisguised enemies,
unabashed chronicles of each and
every delusion years without valid ambition
and thousands of miles of
unpaved roadways built around you.
we're so concentrated on
falling apart we fall back
together at every turn.

it's boys like you that make me
think about

all the things i said i
would never allow myself to be.

but these are but
words,
so necessary but
absurd.
musings built around idle
notions that stem
from unhealthy amounts of
time spent alone pining
for days long passed away.

it's a structure built to collapse;
an ideal intended to disintegrate,

a young girl who once had dreams and now means nothing to you.
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Comments: 10

TwistedAlyx [2011-01-30 00:56:13 +0000 UTC]

I love that song.

I really enjoyed the imagery in the first two stanzas, but it kind of went downhill from there for me especially the third stanza. You used a lot of "but"s in that one that didn't seem to be actually contradicting anything said before it. And broken enough for what? How would being more broken make this person fixable?

I like this best:
she's singing, an
entire language made of
heavy breathing

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evilrulerofpeanuts In reply to TwistedAlyx [2011-01-30 01:10:55 +0000 UTC]

the more i look at this the more i agree with you. the third stanza could be removed entirely. sadly i'm too lazy to do it.

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AlterEgo1629 [2010-10-02 00:56:52 +0000 UTC]

I love that song by Anberlin.
This piece is incredible.

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ObstructionofQuiet [2010-09-25 16:01:11 +0000 UTC]

This is fantastic!

And the Anberlin title and quote, amazing!

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evilrulerofpeanuts In reply to ObstructionofQuiet [2010-09-25 21:21:43 +0000 UTC]

Thank you!

I'm so glad that you both like it and understand the reference!

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ObstructionofQuiet In reply to evilrulerofpeanuts [2010-09-25 22:04:16 +0000 UTC]

You're welcome!

^^

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TwistedAnger [2010-09-24 08:16:58 +0000 UTC]

This is fantastic! I loved every word!

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midnight-eclipses [2010-09-24 00:29:49 +0000 UTC]

Good day! I just dropped by to tell you a couple things! Thing #1: This piece of literature is absolutely amazing! And Thing #2: I decided to feature this amazing piece of literature here at Lit That Shouldn't be Missed 2 .
Thank you for writing such an amazing piece and sharing it with everyone!

Have a wonderful day!

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Inner-Pyrefly [2010-09-23 09:27:14 +0000 UTC]

I love this

I think it's your style I love most, I can just read it over and over, I mean wow, what is not to like - brilliant work!

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Pinksolace [2010-09-23 09:19:54 +0000 UTC]

Beautiful poem. Full of intense and also, fragile, emotions.

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