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Description your golden locks
not smearing metal, but filling chests
chests of nuts in stories treasured
nuts that flowed down mountain slopes
rivers that flowed to mighty seas
down your backbone.

a perfect portrait
of faces animated and the passage of time,
of dancers swirling, twirling, curling,
into the folds of their arms
of the sounds of a hymn
hummed;
to pull through a haughty night

for saints of wisdom
grew distraught,
and poets of feelings
were ever so sane.
I'd have it all in a handful yet
let it all out
to ignite being with the hint of a flame.
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Comments: 20

fortymudshanks [2009-11-18 23:39:00 +0000 UTC]

This is so pretty!

I love "hymn-hummed"; the clever way these two words play together actually makes me hear hummed hymns.

!

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fadedframes In reply to fortymudshanks [2009-11-19 09:07:37 +0000 UTC]

aw thanks lovely!

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AlecBell [2009-11-18 11:34:24 +0000 UTC]

A sweet and musical poem, full of promise.

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fadedframes In reply to AlecBell [2009-11-18 12:14:22 +0000 UTC]

Thank you

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AlecBell In reply to fadedframes [2009-11-18 12:29:13 +0000 UTC]

Most welcome.

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gedwaylem [2009-11-18 08:14:57 +0000 UTC]

"your golden locks
not smearing metal, but filling chests
chests of nuts in stories treasured
nuts that flowed down mountain slopes
rivers that flowed to mighty seas
down your backbone."

-yesyesyes, winderful.
i love this stanza

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gedwaylem In reply to gedwaylem [2009-11-18 08:15:25 +0000 UTC]

*wonderful

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fadedframes In reply to gedwaylem [2009-11-18 08:25:55 +0000 UTC]

aw thank you soso much

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TwistedAlyx [2009-11-18 02:50:45 +0000 UTC]

Nice! It'll be interesting to see what you come up with in the future!

Welcome to DA.

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fadedframes In reply to TwistedAlyx [2009-11-18 04:30:11 +0000 UTC]

Thanks a lot<3 :joy:

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TwistedAlyx In reply to fadedframes [2009-11-18 05:01:40 +0000 UTC]

No prob.

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alapip [2009-11-18 01:41:40 +0000 UTC]

linked from the feature by Shane,
(YouInventedMe). he's right. we
must watch you.

welcome to dA.
you add beautiful poetry.

pip

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fadedframes In reply to alapip [2009-11-18 04:26:07 +0000 UTC]

aw thanks lovely
i hope the rest of my stuff is as good

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vampireknightfan [2009-11-18 01:33:19 +0000 UTC]

Wow. That is beautiful.

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fadedframes In reply to vampireknightfan [2009-11-18 04:24:21 +0000 UTC]

thank you so muchh <3

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vampireknightfan In reply to fadedframes [2009-11-18 22:06:16 +0000 UTC]

Your welcome.

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spoems [2009-11-18 01:23:48 +0000 UTC]

satisfying meter

"not smearing metal, but filling chests"

this

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fadedframes In reply to spoems [2009-11-18 04:24:08 +0000 UTC]


thanks (:

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sheraine [2009-11-17 19:23:26 +0000 UTC]

it feels really smooth and flowing, great job

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fadedframes In reply to sheraine [2009-11-17 20:53:22 +0000 UTC]

aw thank youu<3

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