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your golden locksnot smearing metal, but filling chests
chests of nuts in stories treasured
nuts that flowed down mountain slopes
rivers that flowed to mighty seas
down your backbone.
a perfect portrait
of faces animated and the passage of time,
of dancers swirling, twirling, curling,
into the folds of their arms
of the sounds of a hymn
hummed;
to pull through a haughty night
for saints of wisdom
grew distraught,
and poets of feelings
were ever so sane.
I'd have it all in a handful yet
let it all out
to ignite being with the hint of a flame.
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Comments: 20
fortymudshanks [2009-11-18 23:39:00 +0000 UTC]
This is so pretty!
I love "hymn-hummed"; the clever way these two words play together actually makes me hear hummed hymns. !
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gedwaylem [2009-11-18 08:14:57 +0000 UTC]
"your golden locks
not smearing metal, but filling chests
chests of nuts in stories treasured
nuts that flowed down mountain slopes
rivers that flowed to mighty seas
down your backbone."
-yesyesyes, winderful.
i love this stanza
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TwistedAlyx [2009-11-18 02:50:45 +0000 UTC]
Nice! It'll be interesting to see what you come up with in the future!
Welcome to DA.
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alapip [2009-11-18 01:41:40 +0000 UTC]
linked from the feature by Shane,
(YouInventedMe). he's right. we
must watch you.
welcome to dA.
you add beautiful poetry.pip
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fadedframes In reply to alapip [2009-11-18 04:26:07 +0000 UTC]
aw thanks lovely
i hope the rest of my stuff is as good
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fadedframes In reply to vampireknightfan [2009-11-18 04:24:21 +0000 UTC]
thank you so muchh <3
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spoems [2009-11-18 01:23:48 +0000 UTC]
satisfying meter
"not smearing metal, but filling chests" this
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