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Published: 2005-09-19 03:43:57 +0000 UTC; Views: 102; Favourites: 1; Downloads: 3
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Description Our shoes crunch on broken glass.

The past we took with us,
Packed up in a box,
Wrapped up like a present,
Colorful and nice,
‘Fragile’ stickers pasted all around.

Somewhere,
It seems,
As we bumped and tussled,
Down the road of no returns,
They dropped out the back window,
And fell into the gutter.

As they journeyed their way,
Unaware as we were,
We moved further along,
In the other direction.

You lift up your foot to see us two,
Reflected in the tiny facets,
One hundred times and more.

As I watch our laughing smiling faces,
In the mirrors and photographs,
I wonder where those days have gone,
Why aren’t they here now?

I look at you,
With scratches on your face,
Where I clawed you,
And see in your eyes,
My own bruises reflected,
Purple welts blossoming on my cheek.

This is our love,
A cardboard box,
Wrapped up like a present,
Contents fractured,
‘Fragile’ stickers pasted everywhere,
The red ink smeared and fading,
From years of misuse.

Your hard eyes turn away from me,
Walk out of the room,
No more to be said or done this night,
Nothing left.

Such is a cardboard box,
Strong until the water falls,
Dampening the edges,
Skewing the sender’s name,
Falling apart.

Our shoes crunch on broken glass,
The remnants of that package,
Sent to ourselves,
When love was aplenty,
Arriving too little, too late.
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Comments: 6

AcousticEnergy [2005-09-22 00:14:10 +0000 UTC]

Hi, Jordan!

This poem is really nice, the imagery is really good. I get the image of two people walking down a snow-covered trail in winter... but I bet that was what you were aiming for. Emotion and flow are good, too but I think you could change "Colorful and nice" (fourth line) to a different, more fitting adjective...

Great work.

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unTAGGed [2005-09-19 03:52:23 +0000 UTC]

this is waaaay better than your other ones.

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FailingMemory127 In reply to unTAGGed [2005-09-20 00:04:53 +0000 UTC]

Whoa... a compliment? on POETRY? from TAGGZAN?!!

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unTAGGed In reply to FailingMemory127 [2005-09-20 00:24:09 +0000 UTC]

fine! *picks up your jaw*

this is not as bad as your other ones! i've seen worse from you.

better?

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FailingMemory127 In reply to unTAGGed [2005-09-20 00:26:42 +0000 UTC]

*laughs* Maybe.

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unTAGGed In reply to FailingMemory127 [2005-09-20 00:39:43 +0000 UTC]

there are emoticons you know... like , and

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