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[prev] >>> [next]Lawlz, I got a few comments on the last page stating they didn't know Fang was supposed to be a boy.
He didn't really seem girlish to me... I thought he looked like a little boy... 'cause that's what I was going for. XD So I just put the author's note in there... XD He's a boy! I swear!I don't think I've ever made Rosie so serious before. o_O
Just a reminder to PLEASE give me some kind of feedback. XD Show your support! It makes a happy author/artist!
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Lol. Poor seagull. XD and I don't think it's quite so safe to follow her example... X3
Ps. ... People thought he was a she? I thought he looked like a boy, too.
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LOLZ Rosey is the best!! i love how you never know what she's going to do or say!
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Aww, yay! 
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Rosie is evil.. BUT I LOVE HER!
Well, if you want a summary, I'll do my best to give you a character analysis like I do for people's writing.
Talori: You are seriously a master at character quality. I think that Talori is one of the best OC's I've ever seen. Her playfullness and how gullible she is really clashes with the fact that she's a queen. Shocker, right? I really like how she has red stars all over her, that was a nice touch, very original and something I've never seen before. The only thing I request is to see her good side. All I've ever seen is how clumsy and annoying she can be. Then again, she has a good heart and tries to make people happy, but in the future and as the plot unravels, that won't cut it.
Cam: She is SO like me. She has to have everything in order or else, she'll get a little too violent. Haven't seen many quirks to make her a little different from other OC's, but that's fine (I know that she married an orange and all, but that was in the past. I need to see a quirk or habit/hobby for the present). I like your style and how you always make each character different, looks and personality. Can't wait to see what else is cooking up in your brain.
Asura: Did I spell that right? XD Anyway, I have no idea why he dyed his hair, lol. But that is real cute, it is. He seems to be the shy one who doesn't want to get into any situation, which makes him unique, especially with the crossword puzzles. And his sibling rivalry with Cam? Funny. Just hilarious.
Vi: I swear, I keep forgetting their names. Anyway, if I got his name wrong, it's that demon guy. His character design is really cool! Pointy ears, wow. And I'm wondering what he looks like with his sunglasses off... To the important stuff. I really can't wait to see his plot for destroying Talori. Killing Talori... harsh, but it... makes sense. I never thought that I'd see the day when someone actually uses their common sense to make something interesting. Because usually, common sense isn't usually interesting. I do have a problem with him actually... WHY DOES HE HAVE TO KILL TALORI?! HE IS SO EVIL, HE'S TRYING TO KILL ONE OF THE BEST CHARACTERS EVER! DOESN'T HE REALIZE THAT?! That was to show how much of an effect you have on people. You make us hate the characters you want us to hate and vice versa. Good job with this character, the only thing that I have to complain is that he's not evil enough. Where's the dark sarcasm?
Rosie: She's perfect. Really, she is. The character design is pretty cool (She has pink hair, which somewhat blinds me, but it's all to make her look cute and innocent, right?) and her cuteness on the outside is something I could DIE for. It's just so ironic, right? But I can tell that more of her character is going to unravel. For example, I'm wondering where she got her powers and why she thinks that she NEEDS to be around Talori (sp?). I'm guessing that this is going to be a big plot point so I'll be sure to stay to see that!
Fang: ... Nothing to say besides that he's a Rosie wannabe. JK JK JK, but it seems that he's in competition with Rosie now. I wonder why... That's also something that frustrates me. I want to know so much of their pasts and how they are going to act that it drives me crazy. Not much to say besides the fact that I can't wait to see his character unravel!
This comic is one of the main reasons I go onto DA. I love again thanks to you. There are so many unanswered questions. What will Vi do? Are Fang and Rosie going to fight over Talori now? And most importantly... HOW THE HACK DID TALORI FALL OUT OF THE SKY?! Anyway, I hope that this was a good enough critique. The only thing that bothers me in the comics are how the words are different colors when you say the word "Talori" or "Wonderous Powers" or something. Do they say it magically or something?
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That last bit about the words was mean, wasn't it? I'm sorry, I just want to give a slap in the face (Not literally.) about what the world wants. The art is superb, the plot makes sense, and this is really funny! Talori and Rosie make the perfect duo and with Fang interfering? It's gold and genius. Great job on this comic, I'm looking foward to more!
P.S. You know that Hamtaro request with Sandy and Maxwell as a couple in it? I recall that you wanted me to remind you to do it. LOL, sorry if I'm bothering you and stuff. I really am mean, aren't I?
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Oh wow. D: I don't think I've ever had so extensive of a comment/feedback before!
*is in awe of the wall of text*
Seriously though, thank you SO SO much for your feedback. You have no idea how happy you've made me!
I'll try to answer some of your concerns right now. :3
Talori: She does have a good side, which is more apparent in the final chapter (which consequently, is the next chapter). And I'm so flattered that you think my characters are so good! *o* I try really hard to make them unique and likeable.
Cam: lol, she's a lot like me too.
Asura: Idk why he dyed it either... he just did. XD
Ve: Oh ho ho, you mentioned his sunglasses.... :3 But anyways, you'll see why he's desperate to kill Talori in the next chapter. It's part of his duty, but it's also a personal matter. And yeah, he doesn't quite seem evil enough does he? I kinda view him as more as pathetic and desperate to be amazing and evil but just fails.
Rosie: The origin of her powers isn't something that's really gonna be explained unfortunately, she just kinda has them. And the reason she wants Talori's power isn't a major plot point either, but is explained in the current chapter. The reason is actually very trivial.
Fang: More about him is said in the next pages coming out tomorrow. :3 I agree he kinda seems in competition with Rosie, in both a good and bad way, IMO. I don't think I've really successfully integrated him in my story. Hopefully as the chapter progresses his presence will seem more natural.
Colored text: I'll probably cut down on this in future pages. They don't say it magically or anything, it's just... colorful. XD And I like colors. But the more I use it the more I feel it puts too much emphasis on things that don't need it... so yeah... probably will cut down.
But man... I'm soooo flattered that i'm one of the reasons you go onto dA. *o* A lot of the questions you've asked will be answered, either in this chapter or the next. I don't know if everything will be as fantastic as it should, because this is just a fun, humorous, jokey, don't-take-seriously kind of comic, so things happen just to mess with people. XD But I hope you'll enjoy it all the same. :3
P.S. I've got the picture half-drawn, so I am working on it. :3 It's just right now it's kinda crunch time for me, so I can't promise I'll have it done right away. But I am working on it!
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Whoa, okay, I meant VE, not VI. LOL, I was off by one friggn' vowel, sucks to be me...
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rosie is so full of bs... she is easily my favorite character in GP!! Feng looks manly with those eyebrows lol
I really like the perspective in the panels btw the bottom one are my avorite : D
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lol XD Manly eyebrows!!!
Thanks so much!
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haha I thought Fang was a girl XD omg 
But again, wasime page, can't wait to next page
Maybe Talori saves a kitty
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Aww, don't worry about it.
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I love Roses's expression on the last panel of the first page. XD And I like how you switch between no shading to really intense shading to show the mood. Looks awesome.
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omgosh how are you so awesome, i just totally fail at making comics, rawr im so jello of your mad comic making skills!
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Aww. D: Thanks. ;o;
And I doubt you fail at making comics. D:
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Owo Fang is a guy for sure. But fwaaah Rosie spooked me with her seriousness. I was like "Awwh cute Rosie..." and then "O_O; SCARY ROSIE GONNA HURT SOMEONE!"
But hmmm O: wonder what Rosie wants to do with Talori's powers...
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lol XD That's good to know.
And you'll see.... :3
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Yus :3
And ohh o3o I will stay tuned, don't ye worry!
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That's good.
Thank you!
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I thought it was pretty easy to tell that Fang is a boy, but if it's really confusing people I guess you could just draw an adam's apple on him?
Btw, how would you catch a seagull to kiss its feet? XD
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Hmm... maybe. D: That might be a good idea... but he may be kinda young for that. :\
Easy, you find one that got hit in the head with a coconut, like Talori did. XD
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I knew about the feet kissing part, but I never knew you were supposed to call him Jim!
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Oh yeah. D: You have to call him Jim, or else he won't listen to you.
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and if you ALSO give the seagull a foot massage you save like 6 more kittens and a ferret
tried it the other day
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Oh man. D: I did not know that.
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YAY another page! Woah rosie knows so much! *runs off to kiss a seagulls feet*
Yet again you have conquered another page with perfect amounts of humor and enough plot info to keep it rolling great job!
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lol XD Be sure you sanitize them first!
Aww, thank you so much!
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*runs to get sanitizer* I'll be sure to do that....
and your welcome!
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Rosie's after Talori's power? Whoa, didn't see that coming.
or did I?
I am in love with Rosie's outfit here, it's so cool.
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Rosie looks really cute in the last panel on the first page. Serious Rosie looks awesome as well.
I could tell he was a boy when I first saw him. I have that problem though; all my guys look girly. XP
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Aww thanks.
Well that's good to hear. :3 At least he looked like a boy to someone. X3
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I think he looks like a little boy for what it's worth...
I really enjoy the story on these pages, but I am not a big fan of the pink/purple/blue color scheme. It feels a lot more...I don't know...lifeless than usual.
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Aww, that's good. At least someone does.
Fair enough. :3
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thanks!
and I'm glad you think so! :3
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