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Published: 2005-08-11 20:56:47 +0000 UTC; Views: 380; Favourites: 0; Downloads: 16
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Under skies you sprinkled.I'm poking at the Past.
seeing how i found myself
on these woes I mashed.
All I ever wanted
is to yank out who I am
Every babystep -- uncoils --
to slowly gassify
every custardy-whirling strand
of the stuttering voice I am.
Flapping years have beaded
my Heart into my eyes.
Knoted colors begin to silken --
with the Future by my side.
I'm letting it design --
the Appetite
to gobble up my Life.
Peeling through the churning Clocks
swallowing a spiral --
Peeking onwards
just to see --
Another Door of spangled lights --
yet Another Door that cried.
So these Highschool years
you'll hear me
finding Dreams to follow.
Tearing through mistaken visions.
Loosening my hold.
Maybe your own Fantasy
unravels -- here -- beside me.
Together we will inhale --
these concocting -- spiny days.
Waiting for the Starfalls
of bundled second tries.
to iron out the secrets --
that Never gnawed our Eyes.
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All I ever wanted
is to yank out who I am
Every babystep -- uncoils --
to slowly gassify
every custardy-whirling strand
this part makes my toes curl.
the kind of toe curling feeling you get when one is sitting on a beach barefoot.
fantastic poem.
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toe-curling feeling. Aha. I love that.
Thanks for the awesome comment, and for dragging your eyes across the poetry that two middle school years inspired me to write.
Go dig into a 
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I'm sorry. I want to read and comment on this properly so but I'm too damn tired and too damn busy. 
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*searches swoon in the dictionary*
...
Wah.
It's always alright. No matter what you say. Even if you hate my work. And Ithought I was busy.. in 8th grade.
I can't imagine how busy I'd be if I was in University. .____.
I understand.
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this is so raw.. i love 'yank out who i am'. it is so... just.. i dont know.
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Awww.. Thank you.
It took an insanely long time, glad you liked it. ^_^
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Knoted colors begin to silken --
with the Future by my side. Spelling?
I'm letting it design --
the Appetite
to gobble up my Life. - Great line.
Good poem.
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oh god. and you can rhyme as well, without sounding caged and horrible. and you put words together so perfectly... I envy your skills of rhyming, it's never been something I wanted to do mainly because I just.. couldn't.
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Thank you. I'd be dead if my thesaurus was not helpfully there beside me. You could try a rhyming dictionary. Occasionally I find myself searching words at [link] . But I think the fattest help is that you have to believe that just about any word is capable to fit inside your poem, regardless of how crunchy, smelly, flakey it is, as long as your imagination is in the right place.
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Well... you say that Jordan can say what you have to say a million times better.
I'd think that Jordan would say either that my writing is just too optimistic and candied, or that I'm doing the right thing by letting writing yank out my head, and that I'm being a truthful good old friendly "halfie", or something. Or she'd just nod.
Yeah. I'm glad to be leaving you speechless, Tagg, whatever my writing is to you. Because I know you're not the kind of person to just say "this rhyming is good here, this rhyming needs to be tweaked there..." and all that regular stuff. You're one of those people who say the things nobody else ever says.
hi/bye!
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You say the things that nobody ever says, so how would I know...?
Ahh.. nevermind. Forget it. You don't have to say anything. Just be... Tagg.
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well if you know that i say stuff that nobody else says, how would you not know what i'd say (which is what nobody else says) if you know that i say stuff that nobody else says?
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I never said I'd know what you have to say. But I knew you were always capable of thinking something to say, and that something is something that nobody else says.
And maybe this time that something that nobody else says would just plainly be nothing. ^__^
Nobody else is saying nothing.
May your spork never crumble.
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... ok.
it can take plasic 700 years to break down. i think i'll be dea by then.
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Aww ths is such a good piece.
The rythym and rhyme is so splendid.
You've been living a good past and soon a great future. ^^
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I just learned a lot of things, and changed a lot, that's all.
I guess that's what made it good, and I know other people don't really get opportunities like these to have the alone time to think deep, about what everything really means. And to go through shy stuttering which makes you naturally observe many of the things -- the people, the love, the cliques and stuff -- from the sidelines. And the difference it makes is chubby, and your realize a lot more.
I know that very few people get that stuttering opportunity, and most people get punched by the bad side of it, but as I really look back, that is one of the pudgiest reasons why art is jumping out of me, and I'm the internet-glued person that I am. So I gotta admit that I'm a tad thankful.
Ahh.. thanks for commenting!
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Ah, you are so wise Jessie, and we all love you for who you are as well as who you've become.
it was my pleasure.
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