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Published: 2006-01-11 06:57:30 +0000 UTC; Views: 568; Favourites: 3; Downloads: 27
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Sunand
Moon.
smiles
and
Pain.
bouncing like chickpeas
on the se e e
sa
a
a
a
a
w
w
w of
Clocks.
they tick so slow
as they spank our souls
fritter our hopes
and Gobble us whole.
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Comments: 18
it's floating
in white and black and all the colors of
illuminatedly illustrated childrens' tales
with a meaning far far older
good job
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thank you thank you thank you.
I'm so glad that my poetry got a chance to float in your nifty mind.
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i keep coming back to read this.
reminds me of picture books and old wives tales.
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Yeah kev2137, i felt that too. Your structure is always amazing and interesting. The rhyming is interesting here as well. A short, sweet, gut-lurcher.^_^
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Thank you thank you thank you!
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I like how you stretched seesaw XD I felt like I was falling, an brief uplifting lurch in my gut
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My kitchen is making strange noises.
For some reason I heard 'a' instead of 'the' seesaw of Clocks. Thoughts?
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Ah.
Well the reason I picked "the" was because "the seesaw of clocks" represents "Time." And there isn't more than one "Time..."
Ahh. well I guess it all depends on how you interpret it.
But I think I'm going to stick with "the." 
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Ah, it's making more sense to me now I'm actually awake. 'The' is fine - I just read it differently on my first skim and wanted to hear your thoughts on that. And I got 'em. So YAY!
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(More serious comment later. I'm using deviantArt to procrastinate... ahahaha. I suck.)
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Ahaha.. I do that too. Yeah. sometimes I just have uncontrollable urges to jump on to these virtual gray floors and just take a peek at the poetry and the rufty tufty art.
And then I end up staying on for two hours instead of 5 minutes.
Wahhhh...
What does A-?1?! mean?
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A- <-- haha. As in the grade you got?
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I knew it would be a wonderful adventure watching you.
This is the sort of thing I could read over and over again.
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Awww.. thank you for the watch and the syrupy toe-curling comment!
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this is quite amusing.
Six months ago, you took one second out of your life to apply pressure to a single left mouse button.
And that single click, six months later, erupted into this....
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I know where you got the idea for the title OH.
If I'm not right, zebrazebra had a poem called "a gress lion" that ended each stanza in "Oh!". slightly before you wrote this poem
and thats where you got the idea, isn't it?
Also the whole poem sounds like something connor oberst would say. The whole emphasis on clocks and how they control us or "gobble us whole."
This piece was very inspired
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