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Published: 2005-05-19 05:37:25 +0000 UTC; Views: 682; Favourites: 4; Downloads: 143
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Description on my thoughts you buttered,
a starless yearning glow.
wistful dreams unbutton
and shatter crispy woes.

Spongy Love flakes a crumb
of this Youth-Muddled mind.
A crumb to be the only one
my branches now can find.

Yet confidence is all you gurgle
unto this bashful heart.
Confidence to slowly sparkle --
poise me to a Start.

Different – we could always be,
with petals so Alike.
Sticky smiles -- unbuckle -- collide –
but you do not know ---
you coil me more whole!

And so I wait ---
as clocks paddle through ---
for a day –-- to trace.

A day to brew all that I am

and leave a chunk on you.
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Comments: 8

6robyn9 [2005-07-26 12:53:32 +0000 UTC]

Well well. Look who I found through *burn-p0etry

This is beautiful, more so because it applies to everyone. Made me trace my own start Loved the candy-sugary start... pre-adolescence melting into something less innocent but just as beautiful.... I think even older people are "Youth-Muddled" when they come across something new and fuzzy. Superb, as usual.

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flappability In reply to 6robyn9 [2005-07-29 13:41:09 +0000 UTC]

:hugs:

Ahh... it's sad how nobody really uses those foodie adjectives anymore to describe emotions. Sugary, crispy, crunchy, crumbly, flakey, buttery, peppery, spicy, salty, monosodium glutamated.... brewing...

When all the other adjectives run away & wrinkle up, food adjectives are just there, to glue together. I mean, doesn't it sound completely normal to run around screaming "you're the most oversalted buttock I've ever ever met!!!!!" to express anger so peppery that all the meanings of overused insults shrink and you must string together an insult that never came out of another person's mouth, by using the power of very high sodium?


haha. maybe I'm wrong, maybe I'm crazy.

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6robyn9 In reply to flappability [2005-07-29 16:46:22 +0000 UTC]

"you're the most oversalted buttock I've ever ever met!!!!!"

I am so going to say that to my supervisor *laughs until a bit of wee comes out*

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suzisays [2005-07-18 17:55:38 +0000 UTC]

This is brilliant, as has already been said, you use your words in such interesting ways and that gives this poem such a warm, happy feeling. I don't know what else to say it's just so lovely.

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ariallure [2005-06-17 01:59:06 +0000 UTC]

Very good reflection of your feelings.
I wish you all the best, Jessie.

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wolfxcarnival [2005-06-14 14:20:16 +0000 UTC]

Wow, this is so great. Okay, I should start, but =zebrazebrazebra has already left a good comment. You do use glutty, creamy, buttery words all the time though. I don't think glutty is a word, but I like it.

So, I love a poem that wraps itself up perfectly, and this does. The rhyming scheme doesn't feel tiresome either, unlike in so many other poems, and the gurgle and paddle parts made me smile. You've such talent.

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zebrazebrazebra [2005-05-30 07:27:15 +0000 UTC]

Ah, this is just so...edible! It's like a cake made out of surreal and butter. You twist words around and use them in positions they never knew they had!

Wonderful, all around.

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AcousticEnergy [2005-05-22 06:18:33 +0000 UTC]



You are an amazing writer, Jessie. You really are. I love this poem so much, as much as I loved "Sigularity." Love, love, love, love, love! Great concept... an overall excellent poem.

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