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Published: 2009-08-24 19:02:44 +0000 UTC; Views: 351; Favourites: 3; Downloads: 1
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Description Often with eager eyes and Icarian dreams
I have gazed off to the east, to the sunrise,
and dreamt of escape-
from what, I do not know.

I think myself foolish at times, and perhaps rightly,
for I have no fears nor dangers and no desire to seek them.
But what fairer lands lie beyond this rolling sea
of concrete and familiarity?
What greener pastures?

All my life I've heard the tales of yore,
strangers poor and abandonded
coming back with dreams fulfilled and quiet riches.
If only I could drink of that nectar,
my lips dripping with ambrosia...

But I am not a stranger to this land.
If anything, I am a stranger to myself.
What lies yonder past the rolling hills
in the sky painted by the sun,
I can only close my eyes and imagine.

And yet time ticks by, slowly draining
the life out of this youthful and ambitious passion.
Though I am fully prepared to wait,
thoughtlessly counting each grain of sand
as it meanders down the hourglass,
Those dreams are all my heart beats for.

When age has robbed me of my idealism
and my life is little more than a drying well,
and I am left alone passing my final days
in the numbering of my regrets, I will count this high among them:
My days were spent in the formation of dreams rather than the pursuit of them.
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Comments: 17

hewsan [2009-09-23 00:28:38 +0000 UTC]

Nice to know, that Icarus is also a hero to another...

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Mirrorakay [2009-08-26 13:34:00 +0000 UTC]

When I saw the preview pic () I instantly started in hopes of picking out which lines belonged to which person. I quickly gave up; it matches together extremely well. The message is also very clear and written very well. Good work to the both of you!

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Formlessforce In reply to Mirrorakay [2009-08-29 02:04:06 +0000 UTC]

Thanks I can detect the subtle differences, but that's because I know my own style like the back of my hand. I think it meshed awesomely.

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Zarathustras-Crown [2009-08-25 23:30:27 +0000 UTC]

"Often with eager eyes and Icarian dreams
I have gazed off to the east, to the sunrise,
and dreamt of escape-
from what, I do not know."

Icarion derams is PERFECT here...this whole piece reminds me of a Baudelaire piece...somethig from Les Fleur du Mal...well done!

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Formlessforce In reply to Zarathustras-Crown [2009-08-26 00:04:01 +0000 UTC]

Thanks! I love how the lines I'm most proud of are almost always the ones people point out.

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Zarathustras-Crown In reply to Formlessforce [2009-09-02 22:06:41 +0000 UTC]

There's a universality I think to knowing when some specific powerful point is being reached, I can usually feel a genuine "swelling" in most poems, a crescendo or symbolic "orgasm" and then a drifting end...wow, that sounded WAY dirtier than intended you get what I mean though, and it seems the most fascinating poems are the ones that break those rules, and not just break them, but well. My guitar teacher once said to me that "you spend decades learning all this theory, musical rules and such and in the end it's just so you can break those rules effectively".

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Formlessforce In reply to Zarathustras-Crown [2009-09-02 22:08:32 +0000 UTC]

Wow, your teacher said that wonderfully. What a great quote.

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Zarathustras-Crown [2009-08-25 23:27:10 +0000 UTC]

They fit perfectly...I wouldn't have ever known more than one person had written this...good job !

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Formlessforce In reply to Zarathustras-Crown [2009-08-26 00:01:28 +0000 UTC]

Thank you! I think we reached a nice compromise. Both of us toned down our style differences just enough that they would mesh, but still felt natural.

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Zarathustras-Crown In reply to Formlessforce [2009-09-02 22:08:47 +0000 UTC]

Which is hard to do, the tough part is synergy...like a band, the band as a whole is greater than the sum of it's parts, it's more than just a great drummer, singer, guitarist etc...it's a cohesive unit that goes beyond the individual parts. You did awesome

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Formlessforce In reply to Zarathustras-Crown [2009-09-02 22:12:26 +0000 UTC]

Thanks

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Lizerus [2009-08-25 04:14:11 +0000 UTC]

Ungh, this piece is probably a good definition of me. I spend more time fantasizing than actually doing.

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IIIXII [2009-08-25 01:17:26 +0000 UTC]

The message being Pursue your dreams. Wow. That was fantastic guys.
I loved it. You guys did terrific.
I laughed when I saw the preview pic.
Very clever.

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Formlessforce In reply to IIIXII [2009-08-25 01:21:20 +0000 UTC]

Thanks

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jesusroxgirl [2009-08-24 19:09:09 +0000 UTC]

haha i love the addition to the preview pic

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Formlessforce In reply to jesusroxgirl [2009-08-24 19:12:12 +0000 UTC]

Lawl, I hoped you would xP

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jesusroxgirl In reply to Formlessforce [2009-08-24 19:44:11 +0000 UTC]

haha most def

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