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gothdevil β Love Forever
Published: 2005-12-21 15:39:12 +0000 UTC; Views: 444; Favourites: 7; Downloads: 7
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Love you I will doHurt you I will not
The first time I seen you
Love was on the spot.
Heart started beating,
Love started to grow,
Not here to hurt you,
I will never go so low.
Love you forever,
Love you so kind,
Love you so deeply,
Love you in mind.
A love so endless,
A love so free,
Higher then heaven
We will so be.
Sell my soul to the devil,
If that's what it will take I'll do,
To show you I'll never hurt you,
I'll never turn your heart blue.
For My love for you
Is way more then true...
Comments: 37
I like this poem alot...
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this one is really freat i guess iΒ΄ll fav it....
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Freat? Huh? thanks for the fav!!!
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oh sorry it was a typping mistake freat=great sorry once more!! your welcome i relly like it!
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Sounds beautiful but soonner or later you are going to hurt her...life wouldn't be life otherwise...either that or neither of you would care and that would be worse...
I know, I know, I read way too far into things..*exsaperated sigh*
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I speak from experiance on the I'm not supposed to get hurt end. Didn't last.
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sorry to hear that.
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eh, it hurt but you get over it...Just gotta be realistic even when reality sucks...but life has its ups and downs thats a given...Its all in what you do with them.
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so what do you do with them?
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It's kind of clichΓ©, but then again some of the rhymes were better and original. Try avoiding clichΓ©s and as foxychobits said, I bet you could be really good if you took time on your poetry, from what I've read. ^^
Remember, a poem can never have enough drafts. Haha.
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lol Thank you!!!!!
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i likes this one^^ the fact that ur wording seems a little off adds to it in a very good way. makes u seem more caught up in the whirlwind of love hehe. good job kid, very nice.
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it's really good. Needs some work on the grammer, but it is really good
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lol Thakns.....
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Very good. You speed wrote it. but it was good. I like... Continue to keep up the good work.
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Nope didnt speed write it one bit....
ok well maybe I did....LOL
Thanks...
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your welcome!!^^ I know you better than you think I do! and I have read many of your poems....do me a favor. write a poem... don't speed write...take days and weeks if you have to. if your poetry is this good when you speed write try slowing it down a bit.^^
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