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gothdevil — Mathimatical Suicide
Published: 2005-12-04 00:25:03 +0000 UTC; Views: 262; Favourites: 2; Downloads: 6
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Late that nightBoy could not fight
In his heart
He lost the light.
He grabbed a rope,
Strung it around,
Climbed on a chair,
Jumpped to the ground.
Hanging, swiinging,
He closed his eyes,
And at once he
Was dreamming.
30 minutes later,
His dad walked in,
Saw him hanging,
And knew it was the end.
Lookin at the note,
Tided by the rope
That had been tighten
Right around his throat.
“ Mathimatical Suicide
She cheated + lied = have to die
Dated + hated = I fadded
I cry + die = no more lies.
Broken heart + soul = have to go
My love + mind = love you so
Her bold heart + mind = it’s time
Lonelyness + betral = sorry I failed "
Dad cried,
Said “goodbye”
For he knew
This was no lie...
Comments: 56
stupid maths. if anything's my downfall it'll be that. great poem by the way. deep and meaningful. good job.
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how, and why is that smurffet?
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You need help...remember I'll drag you back from the dead.
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lol yea i no... I dont really need help.....this will pass.....
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My mom says "All things come to pass not to stay." But its good to know you'll come out of it.
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*smiles like cute little kid*
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You have three heads! ...Cool....
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lol yea i know....Thanks man.....
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will talk to you PERSONALLY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! on the phone............like but have so many personal things to say to you.........
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uh ok? sure...So did you like it?
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yes I like it...well most of it......you will get the rest of my comment, like I said, in person
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lol thanks, a lot of other pople likes it, and said almost the same thing.....Glad you like it
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I like this one. Almost seems to be pulled from the makings of a novel. Don't be suprised to find that someone writes an award winning series based on this breif summary. Beautifully portrayed, though I would have integrated some of the other mathematical signs to make it more...mature, I guess you could say. It is spiffy as it is, but if you add a line like so..."My heart (divided by '/') her sin= my sorrow" or perhaps "my pain 'x' reality=my destined end" might have made it deeper, though deep now. Great job. Not a usual combination, poetry and mathematics.
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lol thanks. I didnt even thing to use other sighns, I might write one called like " mathimatical Suicide 2 " and If I do i'll keep that in mind... Thank you so much.....I'll send you credit if I do.....
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-^^- I like to make things as varied as possible. No credit needed-just remember, if you ever do, that people recognize detailed and complicated just as much as simple. Not everything needs changing, if you feel that the original portays what you wanted to get across to people.
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oh, well then never mind. Besides, I am not the type of person to make a part 2 to anything really. Really not poems. Poems are a way that I can relax and get what I need and have to say across to other people in words that most people like to read about. Know what I mean? I enjoy writting, I enjoy writting poems even more, and I have no clue why though.....
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I know what you mean. I cannot, per say, write a poem and have it sound correct, where I can write a storyline and have it blossom into a work that amazes me, when I go back and look at it. So far, I have found my stories unfit to post to the public because of self-criticism. Bad habit, I guess.
You enjoy writing poems because it is an escape for you to do so. Some people vent emotions through actions of the spoken word, like those in philosphy and politics, or that debate for a cause. Some write stories based on their lives or that of others to get across feelings, and yet other do physical things like beat people to bloody heaps and murder out of spite. Others find heart to display the inner soul by poems and such, same as novel writer. All humans have the basic needs of the mind, not just those of the body. To be loved, to be able to share love, to be needed and to show another they too, are needed. Not all are given these, and so are destined to bear the fruit of their raising by the actions they take...
-sigh- I only thank whatever gods do exist that I was given the oppourtunity to grow in an unhostile environment, to be able to learn the mistakes of those around me, and to be able to share my tiny bit of knowledge with those who need it most.
I type too much. o_O; Sorry...
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well yea, I guess I understand where your comming from on this. Yes, you're right. I do use writting poems as a way to get out of what's goin on for that time being, and I hate it. Thats why my poems are comming out the way they are..I'm writting from within my heart, soul and mind, and they come out like " Mathimatical Suicide ", or " Goodbye " I'm not wantting them to, but I have tried to write a normal love poem, and cant do it anymore.....I always wrote my love poems to and for Cheyenne, lost her, so I write what I feel now..... And no, you dont write too much, well maybe a lil...LOL Just kidding.
Sorry, dont write enough......
lol
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There will always be those times wheich you future seems bleak and unfruitful, but these do pass, and the mind can then replace the words you use accordingly. I do hope you find a way out of your troubled mind's tangled forest-more often than not, I find myself in the same predicament. Only, in my case, morbidity id shown through the pictures depicted, not through the words I write. Anyways, good luck and rest easy.
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Damn chuck, that is a cool poem, Deep in the heart as well..
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I think that's really unique. A poem within a poem, for one thing. And for another, seeing it all written that way, and by a boy who never really understood math is.. Really very ironic in a very sad way. Just by saying those few little things, about he'd never gotten math made me feel even more connected to the poem, since I'm not that great at math either, to be honest. This is good stuff.
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I used to write sweet love poems for this girl I still love to death, but things came up and I lost her. I cant stop thinkin of her. So I started writting what I felt in my heart and I still do now, but thay seem to be suicide poems now. I'm not that well in math either, that how I cam up with " Mathimatical Suicide ".....
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Well, as your signature says, "It's better to have loved and lost, then never to have loved at all." At least you're taking what you feel and doing something productive, something grand with it.
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I dont think grand, but ok. I dont think I write all that well.....
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Most of the time I don't think I write that well either. We're our own worst critics; I think you're quite good, you know that?
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I think your way better then me anyday....Thanks though.....
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Oh nonsense, I can't rhyme worth shit. 
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sure you can, just relax, and think about different things. Something will come to you....I promise.....
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Oh, ideas I have tons of, but I have zero talent for drawing or making things on the computer.
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it's not that bad though. It's worth it end then end, and besides you can only get better not worse.....
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so try it, you might like it.....
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Maybe.. It'd be interesting.
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i hated it at first, but I like it now.
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So, what program was that again?
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dazart, you can find it on the internet.....
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