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Published: 2015-08-21 21:12:03 +0000 UTC; Views: 562; Favourites: 9; Downloads: 0
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Healing wounds like braille, becoming pain that you can
actually feel. They are my own yet, I have no idea what
they are saying. Red and scabbed soon turning scared and
white. Read my pain, written in different ways but always
along my skin. For all to see. Story of my own book, my life
consists on thin pages, messy words meant for all.
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Comments: 8
It seems rather obscure. I think you may have to expand rewrite this.
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No, this is the way it was written.
You just don't understand it. And let me
say its rather rude to tell someone to
rewrite something, just because you
don't understand what it means.
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I do understand it. Hence, I suggested a rewrite. You wrote that you did not understand what it means in the about the poem section. How do you expect others to understand? For clarification, I did not mean to be rude.
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Then why say it was obscure if you understand it?
That is writing, that is poetry. I am not sure you understand
how poetry works, how it can mean something and yet
nothing at the same time. I know what it means, I wrote
it and if you didn't mean to be rude, then don't tell a writer
that they rewrite something they wrote just due to your own
confusion over what its all about.
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I do understand how poetry works since I write poetry myself and run a newsletter in my company. Apart from the pathetic ad hominem, I will stop it here since you seem to post your writing here for people to admire, not to get feedback. Before throwing hissy fits, I would advise you to learn some manners. Thank you.
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I am not throwing a hissy fit. LEARN how to critique and not
rip apart someones work and tell them to simply rewrite it.
Its just that you don't understand MY writing style AND that
is okay and telling me to rewrite it, its not feedback. That is rude.
You are new here, I am assuming, because your comments show
it very much. If you don't see the difference between critique
and picking apart something you don't get, then we are done.
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I am not new here. Just a new account.
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This was all painful. Painful as the poem was beautiful. I guess it would be a matter of how each person would understand or perceive it.
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