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MiloTo most,
Probably has no deeper meaning
Than
Chocolaty goodness
And vague links
To long ago sports days
Unless perhaps
You were
A year 9 student
At Methodist Ladies College
Where swarthy canisters
Were
(and still are I suppose)
Dolled out each Monday
At the 8 week
“Country experience”
For city slicker girls like me.
Each Monday
Houses of 8
Fought over who “owned”
This weeks gleaming green can.
(Along with cow defecations,
Marshy fields
And the sense it was
Unnatural to coop 72
15 year old girl up together)
Milo became an institution.
Incidentally Milo proved to be
My very first withdrawal
From energy sustenance
And forged an over whelming need
for control
Surrounded and
Confounded
By the bodies of
Dancers, riders, gymnasts
My frame seemed
Completely engorged in fat
And unworthiness
(not to mention
Hope told Lauren who told Belinda
Who told me
I resembled a potato
Round, unperfected and dirty)
While the others
(as if for the first time
in their sheltered little lives)
ate Milo
straight
from
the
tin
with wicked smiles
dribbling granulated chocolate
and double dipping
sticky stained spoons
they whispered
“we’re so bad”
and giggled
A secret society
That I had no intention of joining.
Each time the tin passed my way
I smiled
And through closed teeth
Said “no thanks”
I found more glee
In the concave of my stomach
And the way
My ribs poked out
As if soon
They might pierce
All the way through
the lucid skin
(fat)
that had the bony fingers
suffocated
Milo was my first lesson in
(And successful execution
Of)
C O N T R O L
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Comments: 21
sungoddess667 [2006-09-29 15:24:14 +0000 UTC]
This poem simply oozes purity of thought and feeling! More please!!!!
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Tianta [2006-08-27 03:56:50 +0000 UTC]
Very nicely done hunnie... Know how ya feel in ways too of course...just wish I still held that same feeling as easily....
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Innocence-Maintained In reply to Tianta [2006-08-27 08:13:59 +0000 UTC]
thanks, but its a pretty good thing if you dont feel that way anymore!!
havn't seen on msn though hunf, where are you?
Love Luisa xoxo
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Tianta In reply to Innocence-Maintained [2006-08-30 02:38:24 +0000 UTC]
I havent really been online too much past few weeks. Between being at Andrew's constantly and just not feeling up to it...I just dont come on as much....*shrugs*
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No1Believes-Me [2006-08-25 12:24:00 +0000 UTC]
Very interesting!
You know what, I believe that you're a brave person... Cos you shared this piece with us!!!
Very nice style... Great work as always!
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Innocence-Maintained In reply to No1Believes-Me [2006-08-26 04:36:01 +0000 UTC]
thank you SO much, you're comments mean so much to me...they're always uber sweet!!
thank you again
Luisa xoxo
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No1Believes-Me In reply to Innocence-Maintained [2006-08-27 11:59:48 +0000 UTC]
Wow
You're most welcome!
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A-Sent-Miracle [2006-08-24 08:21:46 +0000 UTC]
Youre style still is interesting, unique, and makes you wonder...and use mind power. I hope all goes well hun .
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Innocence-Maintained In reply to A-Sent-Miracle [2006-08-26 04:36:34 +0000 UTC]
thank you! hehehe that means so much to me
Luisa xoxo
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randomchild4life [2006-08-23 09:15:30 +0000 UTC]
interesting
i no that feeling
at that age every 1 goes threw that
i just wish it wer easier to change the way u look
as id do it rite away
but im glad u sorted ur self out hun
lv jon
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Innocence-Maintained In reply to randomchild4life [2006-08-23 12:03:18 +0000 UTC]
you dont need to change the way you look, and i'm not just saying it in the "its whats inside that counts" kind of way (though it really is), i've seen your pics and you look fine
we always judge our selves far more than we would ever judge another it seems...well most of us judge others more, there are always exceptions to the rule ahaha
Luisa xoxo
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randomchild4life In reply to Innocence-Maintained [2006-08-23 13:46:00 +0000 UTC]
thnx
but u forget i can make people look gud in photos
but thnx any way hun
n i no its just a self concious thing
n i will get ova it
lv jon
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Innocence-Maintained In reply to randomchild4life [2006-08-26 04:37:36 +0000 UTC]
yeah, once you hit your 20s i hear its all down hill, im just 20....so i'm still new to it..but it does seem alot less superficial
Luisa xoxo
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randomchild4life In reply to Innocence-Maintained [2006-09-04 08:58:30 +0000 UTC]
ur still in the prime of ur life till u hit ur 30s i was told
well thats wen every1 has a mental breakdown or is that just my family
lol
n i cannit wait to b less superficial it is too much work lol
lv jon
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GuardianOmega [2006-08-22 04:53:11 +0000 UTC]
Intersting, how you CONTRALLED the overall flow with lines and letter spacing...making for a feel with every line that grew into an image by the end of a moment caught in time. It was like being there, on both sides for me, being the shunted and those shunting.
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Innocence-Maintained In reply to GuardianOmega [2006-08-23 12:01:53 +0000 UTC]
your comments always rock! haha, thank you so much
Luisa xoxo
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underworldriver [2006-08-22 02:34:14 +0000 UTC]
interesting...control is a very good thing to learn. Very nicely written, the flow wasn't to bad itself. writing from expeirence is good, best i think in my eyes.
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Innocence-Maintained In reply to underworldriver [2006-08-23 12:04:46 +0000 UTC]
writing from experience is the only way i can write, i need to work on it...but honestly my fiction turns out so hollow and bleh
Luisa xoxo
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underworldriver In reply to Innocence-Maintained [2006-08-23 16:51:47 +0000 UTC]
come now, you really don't mean that.
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Glitterati [2006-08-21 21:19:41 +0000 UTC]
That's cool that you realized that. Not that you hated the way you looked, but that you could control yourself. Its a good feeling.
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Innocence-Maintained In reply to Glitterati [2006-08-23 12:01:09 +0000 UTC]
yeah control is a great feeling
Luisa xoxo
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