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It is all black, still, and silent: void.Void.
Void.
Scratching, it shuffles in the one dimensional dirt of my mind…
Dark against the void… it shuffles.
Bed:
I awake
Pink tepid fill my eyes
They’re washed with neon pastels.
But I’m merely seeing through my eyes.
I am not deceived.
I still feel it… shuffling, shuffling in the void.
Do you hear it? Ruffling the dirt?
It’s awake.
Awake, in the Void.
Shower:
White walls, white soap, white shampoo, white conditioner, white noise
Reality is lying to itself.
Muffled pitter patter of chlorinated water,
I hear it tapping, tapping on the shards,
The melted sand
School:
It’s talking,
Talking in the Void.
One thousand whispers
It’s the sound of black the way a blind person would hear it.
A Symphony of one thousand dying children, and a million burning victims…
Screaming in every frequency just bellow a whisper.
It scratches at the Void, entombed in its burial dirt.
Scratching
Scratching at the Void.
Room:
I can hear it praying
Praying for me to remove it from its tomb
To let it scurry from the dirt
Let it fill that dreadful darkness
Let it fill the Void.
But the soil is rich
And filled with tears
The tapping
O the tapping
Is a pounding in my ears
And a color to my eyes
The greens and reds and blues,
Amongst the rhythmic chanting
From every hair on my head to the bottom of my shoes
I can feel the spinning
The turning
The burning
It’s reaching up
And reaching out
Beyond the black
Beyond the lack
Reaching above the stars
And singing beneath the skin
It’s reeling white hot
And begging to spin
Burning
Sand to Glass
Fate to Past
Future to Fate
Burning words in the book of present
Plotting its escape…
Beyond the keyboard
To the Operating System
Out over the phone lines
And servers releasing it to the great beyond
It is my idea
My transcending,
My Translucent,
My Eternal
Forever…
Living Bond
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Comments: 5
faeriecaptive [2003-11-19 21:30:03 +0000 UTC]
hmm- i too, like the shower section alot. we don't have melted sand in my shower we have a curtain, not a glass door. but yeah, i could totally see and hear & feel the shower you were taking. [heh heh- that is not a pick up line]
i really like the style you used- kind of an intense description, but without using hard, tangible details. Like, when I was done, I knew exactly what you meant, but didn't understand~ I can only describe it in a feeling, not coherent words. Anyway, that's talent.
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beneath-the-mist [2003-11-18 07:16:07 +0000 UTC]
yes, white noise was an excellent choice for 'shower'. as has been previously repeated, your descriptions of sound are exceptional, as is the rhythm.. is sort of pounding-ly (..is that even a word) spirals down to the end. very intriguing, to say the least. makes you stop and think about things from the perspectives illustrated in the poem. a favorite, i believe. i rather like this one.
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O-Wise-Master [2003-11-15 16:03:16 +0000 UTC]
for some reason, the section called 'shower' grabs me, and I like how you' create the scene by describing mostly the sound of things.
the sound, and the color, but you leave ot the imagination of your readers the shape of things and such. I enjoy this!
I especially enjoy how you describe the sounds. Thank you for the share.
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invisagoth [2003-11-15 10:32:56 +0000 UTC]
Thank you so much for the comment. Means a lot to me.
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PreciousLoLo [2003-11-15 10:28:15 +0000 UTC]
wow. -speechless- lol. that's really good. kinda creepy at times but it's awesome. i love it.
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