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KippeeComicLab In reply to Blue-Beetle-Geek [2016-11-27 08:18:16 +0000 UTC]

Sure! Go ahead

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Blue-Beetle-Geek In reply to KippeeComicLab [2016-11-27 09:33:31 +0000 UTC]

Apologise if this seems harsh in anyway, I mean no harm or to start a fight.
For the reference sheet, the line art doesn't connect or goes through the lines and it's slightly messy and hard to tell the proper hair style. The anatomy is off slightly, so I suggest to look at anatomy for torso's and hands. Also I don't think really life people or even in a fantasy realm someone would have swirls for eyes, whenever you would make a character design, think about what they would look like in a real life form. As for the design for clothing, it's nice, a simple colour scheme and design, kudos for you for making it nice and simple.

As for the information, it's sort of limited, not much on it but I'll do it on order downwards. For personality, again, theres not much information, I suggest you list the trait, and show how they're like it, also the easily angered and usually cheerful cross each other out. People have an biological gender, even gods have something in they're pants hun. The backstory is small and what people call 'sue' it makes no sense and is confusing, it jumps slightly over the place. I suggest making it slightly simple, also, a mix of gods, that seems slightly overpowering, it's understandable if it's a god, that has one power but a mix is overdoing it. As for friends, a brief description of how the character interacts and their thoughts  on their friend(s), the same with enemies. As for Likes it's simple but the making characters is slightly confusing but the rest is good. Finally for dislikes it's limited and I think everyone, or most people, don't like to get beaten or being incorrect.
Again this means no harm, of you need any advice or questions please let me know.

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KippeeComicLab In reply to Blue-Beetle-Geek [2016-11-27 09:45:58 +0000 UTC]

I see where you're coming from. The god part is meant to be a joke or play-on for an author or creator. I can't change them too much since it's already in a series that I'm making. Sorry the backstory in confusing, I wrote it on my Ipad so chances are it's full of grammar errors, auto corrects and all that. But thank you for letting me know what you think!

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Blue-Beetle-Geek In reply to KippeeComicLab [2016-12-03 12:20:33 +0000 UTC]

You seem to be avoiding thee critique in general. Persona's are supposed to be characters that connect to the artist/writer, but not in a literal sense, like another version of you, that still connects to you via looking almost, exact or even vaguely like the artist, and I don't think you look like a grey skinned god with pure white hair. The back story is confusing but I explained how in my critique, I'm saying it makes no senses and it's extremely limited, why was a female with cancer and multiple gods fused? It doesn't make much sense even in fantasy realm, and for the series, I checked it out on you YouTube channel and theres not much connecting the Bio to the Series meaning you do still might have the ability to change it, information and power wise.

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KippeeComicLab In reply to MilkandCerealKat [2016-05-24 07:09:02 +0000 UTC]

Yea sure ok

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