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Please give me feedback on this. I'm not sure how I feel about the font. I think I might make the white around the words an unbroken circle instead of a thick outline. I think this is the style of font I want, but not the

Is the shading too much for screentone? Is my style of screentone appealing? Should I have more space between panels? Do the panels not need a border? Are these opening lines total crap? Would you, having read this first page, have any interest in the rest of the book? Would you feel cheated when you found out it was about the SCA?

Do you want to read the second page? [link]

Description
Please give me feedback on this. I'm not sure how I feel about the font. I think I might make the white around the words an unbroken circle instead of a thick outline. I think this is the style of font I want, but not the

Is the shading too much for screentone? Is my style of screentone appealing? Should I have more space between panels? Do the panels not need a border? Are these opening lines total crap? Would you, having read this first page, have any interest in the rest of the book? Would you feel cheated when you found out it was about the SCA?

Do you want to read the second page? [link]