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LightOverpowers58 — Love by Intoxication
Published: 2013-11-12 01:09:47 +0000 UTC; Views: 462; Favourites: 5; Downloads: 0
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Description trembling words, falling from mouths
desperate to drink the essence of life—
aching to feel the scorching elixir slide
down their throat and coat the linings of
their stomachs, implosive embalming…

desperate to drink the essence of life—
traveling from the heart outwards, leaving
organs blackened in its wake and muscles
torn and tissues stretched as escapes fall into
vanity (beauty sacrificed by juxtaposed phrases)…

traveling from the heart outwards, leaving
words unspoken and emotions left bare, experiencing
a paltry happiness and slighted love—we luxuriate in a
false sensation: joy and intrigue and hope, lies we told
ourselves to make everything okay and to ignore [the]

words unspoken and emotions left bare, experiencing
intoxicated adulation, lines blurred and eyes bloodshot
swollen shut by feigned illumination and chosen stupidity;
hungover with heads pounding, simulating a bolstered
bliss…[alcohol has nothing on love]
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Comments: 11

NotenSMSK [2014-03-12 09:48:34 +0000 UTC]

Well the language was well used but for me it was too verbose - I would require some thoughtful reading to properly understand the piece. I did manage to get the first stanza and it was quite well written but ahead... well it was sort of vague

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Contradictory55 [2013-11-15 02:48:43 +0000 UTC]

It is just... the most brilliant extended metaphor of love and liquor I've ever read. It's original, and the metaphor perfectly fits together as well.

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LightOverpowers58 In reply to Contradictory55 [2013-11-16 22:54:47 +0000 UTC]

many thanks to you, dear...I was really unsure about how well the poem was written...you have eased some of my doubts

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Contradictory55 In reply to LightOverpowers58 [2013-11-18 04:45:09 +0000 UTC]

Aw, my pleasure!

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Evaria666 [2013-11-13 15:43:55 +0000 UTC]

I don't even... I can't even... Just yes to this poem. Aside from the fact its beautifully structured, aside from blistering imagery and the language that just fits so perfectly...it just makes me feel! I love the concept and I love the outcome :-D

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LightOverpowers58 In reply to Evaria666 [2013-11-16 22:52:28 +0000 UTC]

Awww thank you, hun...you have literally made my day with this comment!

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Chezzy-Am [2013-11-12 04:55:55 +0000 UTC]

I love the poem's cynical approach towards speaking out a truth about love which is sad but true - love by intoxication is exactly like the last stanza (spot on there). What I love most about this poem is the approach: the words are piercing, and the theme they speak of is well portrayed.


The build-up is balanced, but not too overwhemling either - it feels strongly, like a balanced work talking about emotions.


Well written.

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LightOverpowers58 In reply to Chezzy-Am [2013-11-12 05:00:18 +0000 UTC]

Thank you, hun...as always I love your well thought out feedback and cherish your comments.

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Chezzy-Am In reply to LightOverpowers58 [2013-11-12 05:03:01 +0000 UTC]

Thanks... but, frankly, you write good poems and they deserve being loved and cherished...

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LightOverpowers58 In reply to Chezzy-Am [2013-11-12 05:04:35 +0000 UTC]

thanks again

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Chezzy-Am In reply to LightOverpowers58 [2013-11-12 05:06:45 +0000 UTC]

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