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Published: 2012-10-07 02:28:34 +0000 UTC; Views: 354; Favourites: 6; Downloads: 2
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Description Transparent

hues fade from the eyes of humans, clear tinged reds and blues falling to the wayside—

reminiscent of summer nights when the purple glow of  a setting sun

washed over the viridian trees that dominated long, contemplative strolls;

ears awash with nature's rhythms—chirping crickets a subtle cadence joining the whisper of

emerald leaves and sloth of crunching footsteps, the night's faithful song lost within the murmuring

voices of shared love and hammering yells of children at the crest of becoming teenagers, lost

within the delicious swirls of vanilla twilights and chocolate dreams—sweet tastes of honey

and sugar lie on lips crusted with lust and love, tinges of mint hovering between air heated by

duo sets of breath and minds aching to cross that final tower of luscious strawberry sin;

laden by the earth's subtle texture graced by the gentle breeze of God's cool fingers lain, cradling

smooth bark of age-old trees and lapping waters of the cerulean lake brushing soft strokes on

transparent skin, growing fainter in the darkening day and delighting in love's cradle and time's touch.
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Comments: 22

CelestialMemories [2012-10-09 07:56:42 +0000 UTC]

What a beautiful and fantastic piece, you did a beautiful job with the vivid colors while at the same time recognizing the absence of the same color! What an amazing job.

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LightOverpowers58 In reply to CelestialMemories [2012-10-10 05:18:01 +0000 UTC]

Thank you, dear!

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CelestialMemories In reply to LightOverpowers58 [2012-10-10 05:28:35 +0000 UTC]

You're welcome!

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intricately-ordinary [2012-10-08 19:22:49 +0000 UTC]

This is beautiful! I bet you will do magnificently in the contest! You always have the best sense of flow.

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LightOverpowers58 In reply to intricately-ordinary [2012-10-09 02:14:54 +0000 UTC]

Thank you!

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grew-up-a-screw-up [2012-10-08 19:20:10 +0000 UTC]

I'd love to pick a specific line but the whole poem flows so easily and brilliantly, but if I did pick one line it would have to be "hammering yells of children at the crest of becoming teenagers" I love how you describe the swift change from childhood to well adulthood(?) A brilliant poem I love it!

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LightOverpowers58 In reply to grew-up-a-screw-up [2012-10-10 05:18:29 +0000 UTC]

Thank you...I'm glad you enjoyed the piece so much!

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grew-up-a-screw-up In reply to LightOverpowers58 [2012-10-10 19:00:45 +0000 UTC]

You are more than welcome!

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LightOverpowers58 In reply to grew-up-a-screw-up [2012-10-10 23:20:53 +0000 UTC]

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Contradictory55 [2012-10-07 21:19:33 +0000 UTC]

I love the colours all combining to create this kind of scene of a couple in love, or more like, various couples all in different places yet sharing the same view on love, on life, on living.

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LightOverpowers58 In reply to Contradictory55 [2012-10-07 23:42:48 +0000 UTC]

Thank you, dear!

How is your mother doing?

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Contradictory55 In reply to LightOverpowers58 [2012-10-09 00:51:49 +0000 UTC]

You're welcome!

She's healing wonderfully, the skin has peeled off her face and so she looks like she's always blushing due to the pinkness of the new skin. I love seeing people heal~

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LightOverpowers58 In reply to Contradictory55 [2012-10-09 02:14:12 +0000 UTC]

I'm glad to hear that she is doing well! (You sort of have to like seeing people heal when you want to be a RN)

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Contradictory55 In reply to LightOverpowers58 [2012-10-09 04:39:32 +0000 UTC]

Thanks for asking by the way
And yes, that would be a good thing in an RN XD

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reflectionsinwater [2012-10-07 10:03:52 +0000 UTC]

Interesting. I see a theme of nature coming up and how growing up and being human ties with nature quite closely. It's just part of nature, a wonderful thing. Just a question? What exactly is your colour? A bit confused slightly because there isn't one dominant colour, but that could be the meaning of transparent . The structure is quite nice, a almost retrospective view, but transcends beyond contemplation. Smooth bark, i especially like that and the last few lines have unique image on that the experiences shaping us, don't hurt us, but just shape us. Lovely and wonderful piece.

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LightOverpowers58 In reply to reflectionsinwater [2012-10-07 23:42:25 +0000 UTC]

You caught my meaning for using transparent...transparent is the absence of color, so it can be any color whatsoever, every color may become transparent.

Thank you for the wonderful comments and compliments...I'm glad you enjoyed the piece!

Interesting idea for the theme...this why I ask those who read my pieces their interpretations...you all are so imaginative and find meanings where I never see.

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RisingWolve [2012-10-07 02:31:17 +0000 UTC]

I really like how you spread out the colours, I take it that the poem is about the progression of a human's age/aging but it definitely extends beyond that. Lovely.

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LightOverpowers58 In reply to RisingWolve [2012-10-07 22:38:57 +0000 UTC]

Thank you!

This is why I ask what the readers think....you all come up with things I never thought about....thank you again!

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RisingWolve In reply to LightOverpowers58 [2012-10-08 01:44:52 +0000 UTC]

No problem! I'm curious what you originally meant though, it's a very interesting piece. :3

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LightOverpowers58 In reply to RisingWolve [2012-10-14 01:09:57 +0000 UTC]

I don't now what I originally meant, I just wrote what felt like coming out.

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RisingWolve In reply to LightOverpowers58 [2012-10-17 15:38:15 +0000 UTC]

Oh I do that sometimes, though I usually have an underlying idea.

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LightOverpowers58 In reply to RisingWolve [2012-10-18 00:36:43 +0000 UTC]

Ah...well as for that....nah, I didn't have one of those either.

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