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LitheKamitatsy — Two's Company, Three's a Crowd
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Description Prologue

"V-Vinyl, what has g-gotten into you?" Octavia mumbled through a shower of kisses and nuzzles, the unicorn being more aggressively affectionate than usual.

"You just look…sexy tonight." She responded sensually, forcing her lover back even further towards their bedroom.

"…I wouldn't worry about what's gotten into me…but you might wanna think about what's gonna get into you…" She whispered in her ear in the most sensual tone she could muster. Octavia's face turned a deep shade of crimson, returning the kisses almost as intensely as her partner.

The kisses grew more intense and more frequent with every passing moment, the brown pony finally forced onto her back when her rear legs made contact with the bed. Vinyl immediately straddled Octavia, continuing to shower her with gentle kisses and brushes of her mane, her tail gently twirling itself around her lover's.

Octavia's mind was in a flurry. 'Vinyl is being more aggressive than usual…I could DEFINITELY get used to this…' She thought as a smile spread across her flushed face. She practically squealed in delight when she felt Vinyl slowly begin to move down her body, her horn beginning to glow softly in the soft darkness of their room.

"Same as always, Octy?" The unicorn questioned softly.

"Same as always…" She responded, her heart racing.

That night, neither pony slept.

~Several Weeks Later~

Octavia watched the doctor pony walk out of the room and shut the door, leaving the cellist to the silence of the room around her, as well as her thoughts. She gazed around the room, looking to the familiar white-washed walls, as well as a familiar painting of what appeared to be a young colt staring at a vision chart while the doctor prepared a syringe behind him. She then noticed a rack of pamphlets near the door. She squinted a bit to read the print on one of the covers.

'Proper Hoof-Care for the Active Pony…' Octavia thought. 'Mother and father always took good care of me as a filly, so I never had to worry much about that…Vinyl on the other hand- ugh!  She should at least file them down so they do not look like daggers!' She thought, grumbling inwardly.

She shook her head. 'What in Equestria has gotten into me lately? I have been overly sensitive to everything around me…oh, I hope I am not suffering performance exhaustion-'

Her thoughts ground to a sudden halt, her face turning beet red as she thought of the now two different types of "performance" that filled her head.

'NO, NO, NO! Not THAT type of performance! Oh, Octavia get a HOLD of yourself!' She yelled inwardly, doing her best to shake both the thought and the blush away. 'I'm even starting to THINK like her…' She then yawned, rubbing at her eyes briefly.

'I will say this, I have been feeling a little weak lately…maybe it WAS a good idea to listen to Vinyl…for once. Celestia knows this will be her last GOOD idea for a while- no, I should not say that. Vinyl is far from being dumb, it is just the sheer lack of coherence in her thought-process that-'

"Octavia?"

The voice made Octavia jump. She was so deep in thought she hadn't heard the nurse pony enter, holding some documents.

"N-Nurse Redheart, so good to see you again." She chuckled, her heart finally slowing down to a normal pace.

"It's good to see you too, Octavia." The cream colored pony with a soft pink mane and a red cross for a cutie mark gave her a warm smile.

"I have your results with me." She said, walking over to a nearby table and reading through the documents.

"Well, I'm very pleased with the results of your check-up." She said. "It would appear the problems you brought up with Doctor Haysworth were nothing to worry about. You just need more bed rest, is all…
especially now."

The last part passed right over Octavia's head. "Oh good, I was worried that the recent string of concerts and lack of rest because of them-" she paused for a moment and thought '-and because of a certain unicorn-' then continued, "-would have begun to affect my health."

"Well, you have nothing at all to worry about. You have a clean bill of health." The nurse smiled.

"Your blood-work came out fine; your hemoglobin is up, your white blood cell count is normal, although your blood pressure is a little higher than normal…" She stated.

"No surprise there." Octavia chuckled to herself. She loved Vinyl to death, but at times the DJ would just grate against her nerves.

"Oh, the doctor wanted me to remind you that you need more iron in your diet. Remember you're eating for two now." She giggled.

Octavia frowned. "Eating for two? I do not quite understand what you mean…have I gained weight?"

It was the nurse's turn to frown this time. "What do you mean you don't understand? Did the doctor not tell you when he was done examining you?"

Octavia's expression grew from one of confusion to one of worry. "Tell me what? Is there something wrong with me? Am I ill?!" She questioned, beginning to panic.

The nurse sighed. '…They don't pay me NEARLY enough for this…'

She then smiled. "Well, I guess then it's my job to say, congratulations to you, Miss Philharmonica- you're pregnant!"

Octavia's jaw unhinged itself from the rest of her skull. "C-Could y-y-you p-p-please r-r-repeat th-that?!"

"I said you're pregnant, Octavia. You're going to have a foal! Isn't this exciting?!" The nurse giggled.

"Oh…v-v-v-ery e-exciting…why is the world spinning?"

Apparently it was all too exciting, because it was only a moment later that Octavia ended up on the floor, unconscious from the shock.
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Comments: 27

Pikminchick [2012-07-21 02:14:24 +0000 UTC]

i thought octavia was grey and vynl is white... it doesn't make sense but... STILL GREAT

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Komonoto [2012-06-29 09:03:40 +0000 UTC]

WUT

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Layder [2012-01-01 01:32:52 +0000 UTC]

The kisses grew more intense and more frequent with every passing moment, the brown pony finally forced onto her back when her rear legs made contact with the bed.

uhh... BROWN pony? i tought octavia was gray...

and viinyl is white so... what?

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Rysonn [2011-12-24 01:50:46 +0000 UTC]

Wait a minute.... how the fu- 'no, no, give it time...'

alright, just a word of advice " i know youre one like chapter 50 or something, but i have to point this out in case noone else has. You seem to clearly understand that when two different characters speak, you separate the text into different paragraphs. however, in instances like this: "Well, you have nothing at all to worry about. You have a clean bill of health." The nurse smiled.

"Your blood-work came out fine; your hemoglobin is up, your white blood cell count is normal, although your blood pressure is a little higher than normal…" She stated.
you do not need to separate into different paragraphs because it is the same character speaking, and it is the same context. unless the second part was completely different from the first, leave the text in one paragraph.

Although i will say this is an absolutely excellent way to start a story, and upon my first chance, i intend to read on, and eventually, catch up to where you are, if thats even possible with how far you are in your story.

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LitheKamitatsy In reply to Rysonn [2011-12-25 08:23:16 +0000 UTC]

The structuring gets MUCH better post Ch.20. I intend to rewrite the early chapters to match that structuring.

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Rysonn In reply to LitheKamitatsy [2011-12-25 16:10:19 +0000 UTC]

Alright then.

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Frostybrand [2011-12-11 04:10:14 +0000 UTC]

Well. Thats a way to start a story.

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lloyd1191 [2011-11-24 01:11:19 +0000 UTC]

Nice prologue, but I have a question. Is this like the sequel to Allegrezza? If not it's still cool, hope to read more from you, good luck.

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LitheKamitatsy In reply to lloyd1191 [2011-11-24 04:23:27 +0000 UTC]

Well, yes and no. CoffeeGrunt has named it a "spiritual successor" but it's not really canon by his standards I suppose, and I am so glad you're enjoying it!

~Lithe

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Shawnay631 [2011-11-20 09:27:49 +0000 UTC]

If this is the prologue, why have I not read this entire series already?

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dlazerous [2011-10-30 20:51:48 +0000 UTC]

Bwahahahahaha!

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Bromonn [2011-10-30 20:04:58 +0000 UTC]

i might be alittle out of the loop, but correct me if im wrong isnt Vinyl a chick? how did Octavia get pregnant?

other then that not bad, very good read

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LitheKamitatsy In reply to Bromonn [2011-10-30 20:06:07 +0000 UTC]

Read the next chapter and you'll find out!

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kakashinobaka [2011-10-29 18:34:49 +0000 UTC]

wow, this is pretty darn good, it keeps Scratch and more importantly Octavia in character with my head cannon which is perfect hahaha, I can't wait til the next part comes out (also Lithe Kamitatsy stole all my suggestions (I couldnt post this reply yesterday because my internet kept acting up) so I got nothing)

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Kwazishun [2011-10-28 17:47:20 +0000 UTC]

Being an MLP Fan myself, I have to say that this literature is actually very well done! Above average I must say. I have read quite a few and they usually aren't that elaborate and flexible with using different adjectives and/or verbs to describe the scenery as well as emotions of the characters. It will be very interesting to see the process of this mini fan-fic.

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TheWerewolfNobody [2011-10-28 05:27:10 +0000 UTC]

I'm liking the idea, but one thing bugs me a bit - it went just a little too fast for me.. but that's just me *I'm such a fluttershy when it comes to constructive criticism*

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LitheKamitatsy In reply to TheWerewolfNobody [2011-10-28 05:43:43 +0000 UTC]

Please, don't be! Your feedback is PARAMOUNT! I intend to reupload a final later on, and I am in DESPERATE need of pre-readers and proofreaders. I'm relieved to see you like the idea, though. Tell me where exactly you thought it felt rushed, and I'll get to work on fixing it as soon as I can.

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TheWerewolfNobody In reply to LitheKamitatsy [2011-10-28 06:04:05 +0000 UTC]

Alrighty :3

Well, I think that it could have a few small things added here and there that would add to the feeling the place - such as in the doctor's, Octavia would have had a bit of a wait between the examination and getting her results.

What did she do while she was waiting? Was there anything in the room to distract her during the wait? Was there anything on her mind that she could be worried about? Perhaps she pondered a little about her tiredness to herself before she got the data - were Vinyl and her concerts the only thing tiring her?

And as for the revelation of Tavi's pregnancy, how did her body react to the shock, other than fainting? Did she think it was some sort of joke, as she thinks it's impossible?

Little things like that help to increase the length. You may feel it unnecessary, but I find it helps you relate to the character more.

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LitheKamitatsy In reply to TheWerewolfNobody [2011-10-28 06:11:00 +0000 UTC]

All excellent and valid points. I had run some of these ideas through my mind a few times, but I never wrote them in for some unknown reason. I'll be sure to add them in to the final.

Speaking of which, would you mind being a pre-reader?

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TheWerewolfNobody In reply to LitheKamitatsy [2011-10-28 06:14:59 +0000 UTC]

Glad to be of service :3

I'd be happy to pre-read :3

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LitheKamitatsy In reply to TheWerewolfNobody [2011-10-28 06:38:01 +0000 UTC]

Awesome! I'm actually about to repost a major edit I just did.

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TheWerewolfNobody In reply to LitheKamitatsy [2011-10-28 06:49:26 +0000 UTC]

Alrighty! *watches*

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LitheKamitatsy In reply to TheWerewolfNobody [2011-10-28 06:57:31 +0000 UTC]

Alright, and fixed. That's probably gonna be the last alteration I make tonight.

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TheWerewolfNobody In reply to LitheKamitatsy [2011-10-28 08:50:35 +0000 UTC]

Oki Doki!

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LitheKamitatsy In reply to LitheKamitatsy [2011-10-28 05:44:53 +0000 UTC]

Oh, sidenote: I do intend to talk about what happens during those three weeks.

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LitheKamitatsy [2011-10-28 04:36:50 +0000 UTC]

I am absolutely flattered. There will definitely be more to come- soon. I'm currently going through R&D for the next part. Thanks again!!!

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IgnisFireWolf [2011-10-28 04:31:49 +0000 UTC]

Had to come back to leave a comment on how amazing this was and ish hoping there is more to come While also being curious to octy's state after those several weeks lol

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