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MarcusAurelius21 — Kiss me.
Published: 2011-09-29 06:55:47 +0000 UTC; Views: 1704; Favourites: 67; Downloads: 12
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There's something in the pale placid blue of your eyes

Watching grey tendrils fade into a dark night

As they leap from the soft red embers

Perched at the end of an off brand cigarette.

"Everyone wants to be beautiful," you say,

Letting the words drip from the tarnished silver of your tongue

And slide down the makeup caked on your jaw

To lie in pools like nightsoil on street corners

Stiffened by winter winds and carelessness.

"You are beautiful," I say,

But the words ring a haunting hollow,

A single breath in a stillborn sea of wasted breaths,

Some shining schoolgirl promise

After a dozen deafened seasons have spun each other round.
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Comments: 23

morbidthrall [2011-12-22 02:33:53 +0000 UTC]

"You are beautiful" always sounds hollow. "I want you" is much more honest.

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worldsendinwhispers [2011-11-17 04:13:00 +0000 UTC]

just read this again
it's so wow

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jadesfires [2011-10-06 04:26:14 +0000 UTC]

I love how colorful it is. And it feels so tangible. I love it.

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MarcusAurelius21 In reply to jadesfires [2011-10-06 14:41:17 +0000 UTC]

Thanks I appreciate it.

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Nohimase [2011-10-01 00:53:38 +0000 UTC]

the language is astoundingly beautiful. the first two lines caught me immediately

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MarcusAurelius21 In reply to Nohimase [2011-10-02 01:49:16 +0000 UTC]

thanks, i'm really glad you enjoyed it

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jesus-in-a-bin [2011-10-01 00:05:17 +0000 UTC]

unbelievable..theres not many poems these days that really draw me in ,but this is one of them i applaude you!

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MarcusAurelius21 In reply to jesus-in-a-bin [2011-10-01 00:16:38 +0000 UTC]

I really appreciate that. Thanks man, seriously.

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Destynee33 [2011-09-30 12:18:47 +0000 UTC]

Wow that is a really gorgeous poem! Really well written. I love this!

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MarcusAurelius21 In reply to Destynee33 [2011-09-30 17:45:29 +0000 UTC]

Thank you I'm really glad you liked it.

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LittleGreenPurse [2011-09-30 05:19:08 +0000 UTC]

This made my head implode.

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MarcusAurelius21 In reply to LittleGreenPurse [2011-09-30 17:47:11 +0000 UTC]

lol thanks! (that's a good thing right?)

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LittleGreenPurse In reply to MarcusAurelius21 [2011-09-30 23:49:17 +0000 UTC]

Yeah totally good.

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17352iloveu2166675 [2011-09-29 15:57:44 +0000 UTC]

........ woah.

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MarcusAurelius21 In reply to 17352iloveu2166675 [2011-09-30 05:04:49 +0000 UTC]

thanks

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17352iloveu2166675 In reply to MarcusAurelius21 [2011-09-30 21:59:45 +0000 UTC]

Dude, seriously, you should be SELLING this stuff! It's AMAZING!

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Zer0-Naught [2011-09-29 15:31:48 +0000 UTC]

beautifuly written

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MarcusAurelius21 In reply to Zer0-Naught [2011-09-30 05:04:59 +0000 UTC]

much appreciated, thank you

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Zer0-Naught In reply to MarcusAurelius21 [2011-10-04 03:01:39 +0000 UTC]

your welcome

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thysilverdoe [2011-09-29 12:24:16 +0000 UTC]

This is really lovely, probably one of the best poems I've seen on DA in a while.

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MarcusAurelius21 In reply to thysilverdoe [2011-09-30 05:05:17 +0000 UTC]

truly, you're too kind. thank you so much.

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ToInfinityAndBeyond [2011-09-29 08:56:54 +0000 UTC]

beautifully written

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MarcusAurelius21 In reply to ToInfinityAndBeyond [2011-09-30 05:05:27 +0000 UTC]

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