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In chapter two, we are first introduced to the first and most important of OC's - Charon, the Knight of Pluto. Many elements were changed from the orgional rough draft here, namely two.

First, there was an unnecessary memory arc that served to major purpose to the events happening now, namely Haruka's past during the Moon Kingdom. I had scripted a lengthy event to help define certain characteristics and interactions later on, but I found that while reading other fan-fictions she is commonly displayed as hateful angry lesbian. Surely, in my rough draft I had unintentionally prescribed this behavior to Haruka.

I'm smarter than that. After reassessing some of the Manga/Show interactions, it really became a trust issue. This fact made an entire portion of my story not only moot, but rather poor taste in some respects. So, in later chapters you'll see where I take Haruka's apparent dislike of our friend Charon. Haruka has a soft side. Shall I show it to you?

Yes, I most certainly will.

The other matter in this chapter was that Charon regards his situation too calmly in the first print run. He was dying, plucked from the heat of battle. The man is hip deep in flight or flight response, not some bad-ass Gary-stu. I had to strip him of his smug and freak his shit out. The cannon characters are also scripted into behaving more appropriately, except Setsuna. What's up with her?

Yeah, if you are a new reader you are going to love how I focus on her. I love Sailor Pluto, and in short - the story was originally spun around her for the sake of I wanted a romance story for her that *coughs* didn't involve Mamoru. That just pisses me off. You'll see.

Comments and questions below. In PDF format, so use download feature if it doesn't show up for you.

Description
In chapter two, we are first introduced to the first and most important of OC's - Charon, the Knight of Pluto. Many elements were changed from the orgional rough draft here, namely two.

First, there was an unnecessary memory arc that served to major purpose to the events happening now, namely Haruka's past during the Moon Kingdom. I had scripted a lengthy event to help define certain characteristics and interactions later on, but I found that while reading other fan-fictions she is commonly displayed as hateful angry lesbian. Surely, in my rough draft I had unintentionally prescribed this behavior to Haruka.

I'm smarter than that. After reassessing some of the Manga/Show interactions, it really became a trust issue. This fact made an entire portion of my story not only moot, but rather poor taste in some respects. So, in later chapters you'll see where I take Haruka's apparent dislike of our friend Charon. Haruka has a soft side. Shall I show it to you?

Yes, I most certainly will.

The other matter in this chapter was that Charon regards his situation too calmly in the first print run. He was dying, plucked from the heat of battle. The man is hip deep in flight or flight response, not some bad-ass Gary-stu. I had to strip him of his smug and freak his shit out. The cannon characters are also scripted into behaving more appropriately, except Setsuna. What's up with her?

Yeah, if you are a new reader you are going to love how I focus on her. I love Sailor Pluto, and in short - the story was originally spun around her for the sake of I wanted a romance story for her that *coughs* didn't involve Mamoru. That just pisses me off. You'll see.

Comments and questions below. In PDF format, so use download feature if it doesn't show up for you.