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Memnalar — 3. Lem's First Lesson
Published: 2011-07-29 00:14:53 +0000 UTC; Views: 1207; Favourites: 10; Downloads: 7
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Description It was a tiny room lit by a buzzing flourescent light, painted eggshell white and interrupted with posters delivering passages from Scripture, social services information, and the Mission's rules. There was a folding table in the middle of the room, folding chairs on either side. Against a wall sat a smaller table with a coffeemaker cradling a dented, stainless-steel carafe.

Melody sat at the table, staring at her hands as they absently picked each other's fingernails. Lem poured a cup from the carafe, walked to the table and set the cup down in front of her. He dropped a legal pad and a mechanical pencil in front of an empty chair, and sat down.

The cup steamed. Melody looked at it, then back at her hands.

Lem clicked some lead into the pencil, scribbled on the pad and showed it to her.

I know you're hungry. It's pig blood. Warm. Will do the trick for now.

She read the message, looked at the posters, then looked at the cup again, for longer this time before looking away.

Lem scribbled again. It's a lot worse when it's cold.

She looked away, but reached a tiny, pale hand across the table to slide the cup closer, then she raised it to her nose. She sniffed it, sipped it. Her face twitched like she wanted to cry, but she couldn't.

None of them could.

Melody looked at Lem through long, purple-orange bangs. He nodded his encouragement.

She drank. Three swallows, then threw the cup at the floor and curled up with her feet on the chair, burying her hands in her lap.

He reached into his coat, pulled out a wet wipe, and put it on the table. He made a dabbing motion at his mouth with his fingers.

Her hand closed over the wipe, and she pushed it against her lips as if she wanted to throw up into it.

Lem wrote on the pad again.

How much do you remember? From before?

She stared at her knees. Slowly, she opened her mouth and started to speak, but no sound came out. She bit her lip.

He pushed the pad toward her.

She put her head on her knees for a while, but Lem was patient. Eventually, she took the pad and pencil, and wrote. Her hand was flowing, erudite against Lem's tight, square letters.

I remember being dragged and waking up here. I remember some faces. I remember the name Ray. I think I liked him.

He took the pencil and pad back.

Is your name really Melody? He handed it back to her.

No. She started calling me that. That bitch at the desk. Because of my tattoo. She pushed the pad back to Lem, and her hand went absently to the musical notes on her neck.

Do you know your name?

She thought for a long time, but shook her head no.

It's normal. I don't remember much either. That was almost a lie. He still remembered the war, like still-photos and sounds from far away. None of us do. It happens when we change.

She read that, picked up the pencil, but didn't start writing. She bit her lip again. Melody looked at Lem, the question in her eyes. The same question they all asked on the first night.

What happened to me?

He took the pad and wrote the three words that all of them had to confront, the words that separated their old lives from the new one, from now on.

You're a vampire.

Sometimes they laughed, or tried to, their faces twisted in a silent grin. Others cried, or tried to, dry tear ducts denying them. Lem had thrown a chair across this very room and clawed the skin off his chest when Old Hitchcock told him what he was.

Melody just stared. She opened her mouth again, closed it. They sat like that, in silence, for a long time.

Finally, she picked up the pencil again.

I played the clarinet.

Lem pursed his lips, picked up the pencil, but stopped. He put it down, then closed his eyes and forced his blood to move again. He swelled his chest and strummed at his vocal cords, his forced voice echoing like the moan of an attic ghost.

"Maybe you will again."
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Comments: 37

jon-com [2011-09-18 21:09:23 +0000 UTC]

This is horribly sad. I teared up. Honestly. I am riding a rollercoaster with this story, from humor to tragedy and back again. This just might be the most original take on the vampire legend that I have ever read. Bravo, author. I'me screaming inside with jealousy.

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Memnalar In reply to jon-com [2011-09-19 01:06:08 +0000 UTC]

Thank you. My primary inspiration for this story was Grand Central Winter by Lee Stringer, who was himself a homeless man and a crack addict before he discovered writing. The book is an autobiographical look at that journey. It's filled with darkness and despair, certainly, but also no shortage of streetwise humor. I wanted to capture that.

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jon-com In reply to Memnalar [2011-09-19 23:54:02 +0000 UTC]

I think I read something about Stringer. Do you know if they made a movie based on his life, like maybe two, three years ago?

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Memnalar In reply to jon-com [2011-09-21 11:36:06 +0000 UTC]

I wouldn't be surprised, but I hadn't heard anything.

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xlntwtch [2011-09-04 01:22:42 +0000 UTC]

This gets better and better. You throw old careworn (careless?) vampire calamities out, and replace them with brand new ways for them to be, places they go, things to get upset about (though maybe later for a clarinet player) and in the meantime, make your readers happy. You're staying right with this "social service" for the new-vampire-genre-deprived. Count me in on the whole hand you plan to play (terrible mixed metaphors, but...eh). Thank you.

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Memnalar In reply to xlntwtch [2011-09-08 13:18:43 +0000 UTC]

Really glad you like it.

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K47454k1 [2011-09-01 18:39:20 +0000 UTC]

jay: you should link forawrd and back on these, not just one or the other.

just a suggestion. *continues reading*

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Memnalar In reply to K47454k1 [2011-09-03 14:39:22 +0000 UTC]

Yeah, I should. I'm lazy.

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SadisticIceCream [2011-08-06 16:53:00 +0000 UTC]

Little nitpicky thing -- when Melody picks at her fingernails, it doesn't make much sense to me. I usually pick at my cuticles. I'm not sure what there is to pick at with fingernails, as it were.

I am enjoying this immensely, though. You're going to be torturing me while I wait for more.

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Memnalar In reply to SadisticIceCream [2011-08-07 16:23:58 +0000 UTC]

Thank you.

I usually end up with dirt under my fingernails after outdoor work, etc. I figured her nails would be pretty dirty, so she'd be picking at them. Or under them, I suppose.

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SadisticIceCream In reply to Memnalar [2011-08-07 17:50:46 +0000 UTC]

Aha! See, I can't do outdoor work, and by that I mean I don't do much in the yard, since everything green I touch usually just dies. But I see the connection.

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KreepingSpawn [2011-08-06 04:28:30 +0000 UTC]

Kudos to you, mate; this is a totally new approach!
You start to think the Vampire genre is all worn out, and then somebody comes along and does this!
Power on!

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Memnalar In reply to KreepingSpawn [2011-08-08 13:17:14 +0000 UTC]

Excellent! Glad you think so. Thanks for checking it out.

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KreepingSpawn In reply to Memnalar [2011-08-09 04:09:10 +0000 UTC]

Sure thing, bro!

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orphicfiddler [2011-08-02 01:12:54 +0000 UTC]

I like all of these. You're vampires make quite a lot of sense - I've never pondered how frustrating it would be if you had once played a brass or woodwind instrument but now had no breath. Maybe that's why they're always portrayed with instruments like violins?

Anyhow, I love the details.

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Memnalar In reply to orphicfiddler [2011-08-03 16:59:01 +0000 UTC]

Thanks very much! I'm re-thinking all the standard stuff I've ever seen about the monster, and trying to make it as logical as possible...as logical as blood-drinking corpses can be, anyway.

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Tobaeus [2011-07-31 18:43:20 +0000 UTC]

I'm really digging on this world. There's so much to discover in it, for us and for the characters.

"staring at her hands as they absently picked each other's fingernails." I found this phrasing kind of awkward. Only thing in the whole section, though.

"She bit her lip." With moments like this, I wonder if new vampires are prone to cutting themselves. It's such a simple gesture, but the fangs would make it painful to do so , yes? Or do the fangs only come out when they feast on a victim?

"Old Hitchcock" I have the feeling we'll be hearing more about this dude.

I remember reading a book forever ago that had a vampire in it. In that world, since blood is the only bodily fluid vampires have any more, it has to replace any necessary fluids. So if they could move the blood to their tear ducts, they could cry, but it was blood tears. I don't think it's something they would want to do very often, though, as it's a waste of precious food.

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Memnalar In reply to Tobaeus [2011-08-01 19:55:09 +0000 UTC]

Thanks very much, also for the observations! I think that vampires crying blood is something of a genre staple these days, so I'm working hard to avoid it.

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Tobaeus In reply to Memnalar [2011-08-01 20:18:31 +0000 UTC]

I hear you. It's sad that there's so much about vampires that's been overdone. Makes it harder to write a vampire story and still seem original.

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faeriecrone [2011-07-30 16:28:23 +0000 UTC]

This one has enormous promise, so unlike the glamour and glitzy (sparkle? please .... ) stuff.

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Memnalar In reply to faeriecrone [2011-08-01 19:54:01 +0000 UTC]

Again, thank you.

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faeriecrone In reply to Memnalar [2011-08-03 01:01:26 +0000 UTC]

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Aro-chan [2011-07-30 11:44:43 +0000 UTC]

Again, the irony. It's nice

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Memnalar In reply to Aro-chan [2011-08-01 19:53:51 +0000 UTC]

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Aranov [2011-07-29 14:12:05 +0000 UTC]

From the difficulty Lem has in speaking, she's gonna need a lot of practice to do anything with a clarinet... At least it's not flute or tuba. Poor kid. She needs hugs.

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Memnalar In reply to Aranov [2011-08-01 19:53:47 +0000 UTC]

She does. Nobody tends to get hugs in my stories, though.

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Aranov In reply to Memnalar [2011-08-01 21:10:24 +0000 UTC]

I've noticed. This is why it is apparently my duty in life to mentally hug characters who need it.

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ThornyEnglishRose [2011-07-29 11:06:06 +0000 UTC]

Good stuff. Dry tear ducts, eh? It seems to me you have to think very carefully these days about what vampires can and can't do, or someone pounces on you and says, 'But the undead can't do that!' Speaking of which, don't you need breath to play the clarinet? Seriously, though, this is shaping up well.

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Memnalar In reply to ThornyEnglishRose [2011-08-01 19:53:21 +0000 UTC]

Thank you! Yep, you do need to breathe to play the clariet; I guess Lem was trying to be encouraging.

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BarbecuedIguana [2011-07-29 03:30:07 +0000 UTC]

Hmm, what was I just writing about guidance counselors?

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Memnalar In reply to BarbecuedIguana [2011-08-01 19:52:44 +0000 UTC]

You think advising sullen sophomores about their vocational-school choices is bad, try it with the undead.

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BarbecuedIguana In reply to Memnalar [2011-08-02 04:26:04 +0000 UTC]

Sophomores aren't undead?
Oops.
Awkward....

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LunaticStar [2011-07-29 02:33:54 +0000 UTC]

Reminds me of my vampires, who can only speak when giving considerable effort, and even then it hurts. I like that. It's good! Short comments brought to you by the power of tired.

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Memnalar In reply to LunaticStar [2011-08-01 19:49:23 +0000 UTC]

Much appreciated. This series is mainly about me deconstructing all the stuff that I'm tired of seeing in the vampire genre, or that doesn't make much sense to me.

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LunaticStar In reply to Memnalar [2011-08-01 20:46:31 +0000 UTC]

Cool that works. As long as you're writing, I'm reading. moooostly.

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Memnalar In reply to LunaticStar [2011-08-01 21:11:11 +0000 UTC]

Speaking of that, I just (finally) ordered your book.

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LunaticStar In reply to Memnalar [2011-08-01 21:15:59 +0000 UTC]

Oooh! You're officially back in my good graces. I'll call off the zombies.

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